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Comment from Tatarka2
This is a very powerful and evocative poem. I love the reference to Morrison's song, too. I especially like the verse "In sixty seconds/Peter Pan's medicine/never never lands." (You probably need an apostrophe, though). Still, such a strong line, read on several levels, and such a strong entry. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2015
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This is a very powerful and evocative poem. I love the reference to Morrison's song, too. I especially like the verse "In sixty seconds/Peter Pan's medicine/never never lands." (You probably need an apostrophe, though). Still, such a strong line, read on several levels, and such a strong entry. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2015
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-smile-...thank you very much...glad you enjoyed....love bug-
Comment from MoonMuse
Howdy stranger! Remember me? It's been awhile, but I'm trying to reconnect with everything I loved about this site. Your writing is certainly something I missed, and this one is wonderful.
Loved the word play (especially "Peter Pans...never never lands") and flow. Stripped down so that each word is magic - fantastic. Hope to read more...Cheers!
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
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Howdy stranger! Remember me? It's been awhile, but I'm trying to reconnect with everything I loved about this site. Your writing is certainly something I missed, and this one is wonderful.
Loved the word play (especially "Peter Pans...never never lands") and flow. Stripped down so that each word is magic - fantastic. Hope to read more...Cheers!
Comment Written 27-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
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yes I do remember you...How are Prophet...-smile- read your poem last night...outstanding...I got interrupted....I'll be by later....good to see you sir...love bug-
Comment from jlsavell
Good evening Michael,
How are you?
Well perhaps I can answer this. You are doing well. The tone of this work speaks volumes. Absolutely, undeniably volumes.
In your poetry you always give body and form to something we will term a concept. Obviously one of the necessary abilities of reading poetry is the ability to interpret in figurative language. Every use of figurative language involves the risk of misinterpretation, though the risk is well worth taking. For the person or in this case the reader who can interpret or translate the figure, tThe dividends are immense.
Figures of speech, which you employ extensively through all your work, are a means of concentration, a way of saying much in a brief compass.
Figures of speech, also, are a way of bringing additional imagery into a work, of making the abstract concrete, of making poetry more sensuous.
Figurative language affords us imaginative pleasure. My definition of imagination- of course in imho, in one sense might be described as that faculty or ability of the mind which proceeds by sudden leaps from one point to another, which goes up a stair by one leap from the bottom to the top rather than climbing step by step. The mind takes absolute delight in those sudden leaps, in seeing likeness between unlike things.
Now to the poem. Unfortunately I do not have a six, but it is what it is.
The opening
strong whiskey warmth
quick swallowed follow
safe inside
Everyone who has had the taste of whiskey know its warmth when swallowed. It fills your whole body with warmth, a strange sensation, but eventually your inhibitions and worry leave and you feel cozy and safe. This is what I mean by saying so much in a brief compass. The figurative language continues with some high voltage lines, but it all is bringing the reader back to the thrill of the leap. And then, what happens? You address why you have arrived at this point of uplifted spirits. Now whether this arrival is someone dear to you, or a turn of events in your life becoming optimistic and full of promise, it is clear, the narrator is finding a comforting place in life. Truly warm inside, arriving to the calm side of the dragon's back. Again we come full circle in the ending stating what you opened with, reinforcing this new but not foreign feeling.
Awesome song to, by the way.
Whatever is going on Michael, I am happy for you. Whether it be that special someone or a prospect of prosperity, or even both, you are deserving.
To you dear, dear friend- my love, my respect, and my admiration two fold.
It is like the Rasfcal Flatts song.. God Bless the Broken Road
Love you dearly.. Jimi
Take care sweet dear man..
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
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Good evening Michael,
How are you?
Well perhaps I can answer this. You are doing well. The tone of this work speaks volumes. Absolutely, undeniably volumes.
In your poetry you always give body and form to something we will term a concept. Obviously one of the necessary abilities of reading poetry is the ability to interpret in figurative language. Every use of figurative language involves the risk of misinterpretation, though the risk is well worth taking. For the person or in this case the reader who can interpret or translate the figure, tThe dividends are immense.
Figures of speech, which you employ extensively through all your work, are a means of concentration, a way of saying much in a brief compass.
Figures of speech, also, are a way of bringing additional imagery into a work, of making the abstract concrete, of making poetry more sensuous.
Figurative language affords us imaginative pleasure. My definition of imagination- of course in imho, in one sense might be described as that faculty or ability of the mind which proceeds by sudden leaps from one point to another, which goes up a stair by one leap from the bottom to the top rather than climbing step by step. The mind takes absolute delight in those sudden leaps, in seeing likeness between unlike things.
Now to the poem. Unfortunately I do not have a six, but it is what it is.
The opening
strong whiskey warmth
quick swallowed follow
safe inside
Everyone who has had the taste of whiskey know its warmth when swallowed. It fills your whole body with warmth, a strange sensation, but eventually your inhibitions and worry leave and you feel cozy and safe. This is what I mean by saying so much in a brief compass. The figurative language continues with some high voltage lines, but it all is bringing the reader back to the thrill of the leap. And then, what happens? You address why you have arrived at this point of uplifted spirits. Now whether this arrival is someone dear to you, or a turn of events in your life becoming optimistic and full of promise, it is clear, the narrator is finding a comforting place in life. Truly warm inside, arriving to the calm side of the dragon's back. Again we come full circle in the ending stating what you opened with, reinforcing this new but not foreign feeling.
Awesome song to, by the way.
Whatever is going on Michael, I am happy for you. Whether it be that special someone or a prospect of prosperity, or even both, you are deserving.
To you dear, dear friend- my love, my respect, and my admiration two fold.
It is like the Rasfcal Flatts song.. God Bless the Broken Road
Love you dearly.. Jimi
Take care sweet dear man..
Comment Written 19-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015
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ah we all hold special memory...that when sipped, warms us like whiskey's truth...count on comfort...Hi Jimi...yes you are my friend, grateful am I for that gift...-smile-...been working a lot...forgive me, I'll be by to read you later....love Michael
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Never worry about reading me. I hardly have time to review mych less answer reviews. Read your other fans and the special one in your heart and mind. Let her climb the clouds on your back. Take care abd best wishes in the contest and in life. Love you dearly. Agape., Jimi
Comment from ravenblack
Strong whiskey warmth- self-medication with a twist, quick swallow follow safe inside- maybe making you feel safe inside or a quick shot for courage to be safe inside with someone. Snake charmer's elixir- doubt, games or it just speaks for itself- the hunt and peck method of finding the right meds (just Don't read the labels- or so they hope). Peter Pan's medicine never never lands- love that line. Keeps you flying or never takes. Cloud cover/cotton field- great image, white on white, a cotton gin summer dressed you or a woman in a white cotton dress. And there is that warmth. And you followed inside. Don't know if I'm close. Blame the coffee- my source of warmth for the day. Excellent poem and a six if I had any left.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2015
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Strong whiskey warmth- self-medication with a twist, quick swallow follow safe inside- maybe making you feel safe inside or a quick shot for courage to be safe inside with someone. Snake charmer's elixir- doubt, games or it just speaks for itself- the hunt and peck method of finding the right meds (just Don't read the labels- or so they hope). Peter Pan's medicine never never lands- love that line. Keeps you flying or never takes. Cloud cover/cotton field- great image, white on white, a cotton gin summer dressed you or a woman in a white cotton dress. And there is that warmth. And you followed inside. Don't know if I'm close. Blame the coffee- my source of warmth for the day. Excellent poem and a six if I had any left.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2015
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ah just swallowing a memory from a perfect blend of cherished and never end....-smile- thank you Kind friend Ed...give Van and Halen a hand if you get a chance man...will ya...aint heard from them in ions...I'm getting struggling vibrations...I know I need shocks...but its more than that smart ass...lol...love Bug-
Comment from closetpoetjester
Hmmm...up lifting spirits? Or lifting up the spirits and upending them into yo...ahh never mind LOL
A select choice of phrase here my friend on just HOW warm that whisky is getting you.
Is it hot in here? LOL
Nope.
But it's mighty hot under that cotton pickin' cloud cover. Ah the field...now I lay me down to...ahhh never mind.
LOL
Great verse, you. I deem this worthy of a sixer Mower Man.
Sassy
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reply by the author on 18-Mar-2015
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Hmmm...up lifting spirits? Or lifting up the spirits and upending them into yo...ahh never mind LOL
A select choice of phrase here my friend on just HOW warm that whisky is getting you.
Is it hot in here? LOL
Nope.
But it's mighty hot under that cotton pickin' cloud cover. Ah the field...now I lay me down to...ahhh never mind.
LOL
Great verse, you. I deem this worthy of a sixer Mower Man.
Sassy
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Comment Written 18-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2015
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I thought of you the other day Sassy...I was painting on second floor and the neighbor was sunbathing, I was painting the inside of the window frames when I noticed her...freedom, so Gosh dang beautiful, barely bikini who needs more...I said to the brush and it shook....when I looked back , she was bending over for a towel...I suppose, I studied nose squished to window closer...then she...she turned her head and smiled....-smile-.....yes Sassy you just let me know when its time mow...I got this...-wink- Love Bug-
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Yeah, I BET you got it covered.
LOL
So...second floor huh?
Pervi...oops I mean Painting huh?
LMAO
I just bet your nose was flattened haha
LOVED this piece.
Poem weren't bad neither. LOL
Sasster
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Ahh lol I would be embarrassed to peep too far un invited....but I think ah...maybe I was. Will see what happens tomorrow....-wink-...I'm just playing, I'm completely professional...until they start taking their clothes off...what do you want from me...am I human with natural male eurges...am I not just a man...jeeze....see ya Sexy-
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Well good luck for tomorrow and just be careful how you whip that "brush" about haha
SaxySasster
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Comment from fimarie78
This a very interesting poem. I have read it a couple of times to appreciate it fully. There is some nice use of alliteration. I liked the internal rhyme of swallow and follow and using the same 1st and last stanza framed it nicely. I really liked the 4th stanza. well done. Fiona
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2015
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This a very interesting poem. I have read it a couple of times to appreciate it fully. There is some nice use of alliteration. I liked the internal rhyme of swallow and follow and using the same 1st and last stanza framed it nicely. I really liked the 4th stanza. well done. Fiona
Comment Written 18-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2015
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Hello Fiona...-smile- I thank you maam...appreciate you thinking so...love Bug-
Comment from Pili Pubul
Interesting poem my friend, love so much last two. Last stanzas the most...
Great images. Sorry to hear you not feeling well , what is wrong?
I seldom come by this days, no motivation... But recuperating slowly.
Take care of yourself ... Love you. Pili
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2015
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Interesting poem my friend, love so much last two. Last stanzas the most...
Great images. Sorry to hear you not feeling well , what is wrong?
I seldom come by this days, no motivation... But recuperating slowly.
Take care of yourself ... Love you. Pili
Comment Written 18-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2015
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Pili....-smile- been worried. Your home now....so thats good news...wish you would have called.....-smile- Me...nothing....I got flu or something...i'm all better now...okay, well check in every once in while with me will ya...love you michael
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Hope you are better, I will check once in a while. ;:-). Love u
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love you too...you call me, when you can...-smile-
Comment from Kingsland
This poem is just okay for me. It seems a tad weak in the meaning. It Does have good poetic language in its thoughts. But for me, this is not one of your better poems. But it is still worthy of a five star rating. But I've seen you post pieces of poetry that were far better than this particular verse... John
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2015
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This poem is just okay for me. It seems a tad weak in the meaning. It Does have good poetic language in its thoughts. But for me, this is not one of your better poems. But it is still worthy of a five star rating. But I've seen you post pieces of poetry that were far better than this particular verse... John
Comment Written 18-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2015
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Mr. Kingsland...how are you...come in please, very nice to see you...excuse me...weak...tad...meaning...? what...what are you saying John...you...you challenging me...? Yer dam right its worth five stars...its polished perfection in rare form...I suggest you read it again Sir...and again...and again....until you to have grown into the tower of a man I know you were destine to be....now reevaluate that five to six....and begin. Love Bug-
Comment from robina1978
Lovely photo of a female face that complements your poem very well. It is a very well written free verse. Just like you, I liked the first stanza that is also your last one best. Tip: I suggest to capitalise Heaven. A lot of alliteration in it.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2015
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Lovely photo of a female face that complements your poem very well. It is a very well written free verse. Just like you, I liked the first stanza that is also your last one best. Tip: I suggest to capitalise Heaven. A lot of alliteration in it.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2015
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Hello Sister...-smile- ...thank you ...thank you so much....wish I had one of me that was so purely perfect as strung pearls....but you know I'm a turquoise kid...-shouldershrug-...love Bug-
Comment from amada
Nice to find you again and very fine that you are feeling much better, maybe even groovy with that "snake charmers elixir." This is a very good work, Michael, inspirational too. Smiling...
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2015
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Nice to find you again and very fine that you are feeling much better, maybe even groovy with that "snake charmers elixir." This is a very good work, Michael, inspirational too. Smiling...
Comment Written 18-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2015
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Hello Bella...-smile- ahh very nice to see you...all is well...? "groovy"...yea...yea...every once in a while...I scare people. haha...love you Lady Michael
