Blaze of Glory
A short baseball story36 total reviews
Comment from GabbyLew
This is a great story that is complete despite the restriction. I love the images developed. This is a great entry.
God bless in the competition.
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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This is a great story that is complete despite the restriction. I love the images developed. This is a great entry.
God bless in the competition.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 17-Mar-2015
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Thank you Gabby. I appreciate your time and talent. John
Comment from boxergirl
Good job John with your story about Blaze and his determination not to wear a cup. Your descriptive details were spot on and the twist at the end with his coach also being is dad was a nice one. 8-)
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
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Good job John with your story about Blaze and his determination not to wear a cup. Your descriptive details were spot on and the twist at the end with his coach also being is dad was a nice one. 8-)
Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
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Thank you boxergirl. I'm glad you read this and enjoyed it.
Always appreciated. John
Comment from risktaker
Boy, he is tough to take a hit like that voluntarily. He chose to accept the consequence for being hard-headed and not following directions. The scenes are clear.I like the ending and the message.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
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Boy, he is tough to take a hit like that voluntarily. He chose to accept the consequence for being hard-headed and not following directions. The scenes are clear.I like the ending and the message.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
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Thank you. I appreciate your stopping to read and comment. John
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Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
A very cute story that probably most young men can relate to. You took a very different approach to the topic, which I find attractive in a story. I like to be surprised.
The story flowed well, and the interest was kept.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
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A very cute story that probably most young men can relate to. You took a very different approach to the topic, which I find attractive in a story. I like to be surprised.
The story flowed well, and the interest was kept.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
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Thank you kindly for the encouraging review. John
Comment from ericawrites
Five stars for a well written piece in terms of imagery, grammar and punctuation. I'm not sure I get the story though, but forgive me as I know nothing about baseball. I just don't get (a) why a player wouldn't wear a cup and (b) why a coach (especially a father) would inflict pain and possibly a devastating injury on a player.
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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
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Five stars for a well written piece in terms of imagery, grammar and punctuation. I'm not sure I get the story though, but forgive me as I know nothing about baseball. I just don't get (a) why a player wouldn't wear a cup and (b) why a coach (especially a father) would inflict pain and possibly a devastating injury on a player.
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
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The cup protects the "family jewels" as the boys refer to there testicles.
Thank you for reading this short story. Always appreciated. John
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Good idea and well excecuted. Nice surprise at the end with the coach being his dad. That boy had better start wearing a cup. I think he might try it now. :)
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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
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Good idea and well excecuted. Nice surprise at the end with the coach being his dad. That boy had better start wearing a cup. I think he might try it now. :)
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Comment Written 16-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2015
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No, Blaze (no relation to your story) is a defiant lad.
Nah, just kidding. Thanks for reading. John
