Comment from Zinnia48

Exceptional

this poem has such great energy! It razzle dazzles off the page! It's an imaginative story told with sizzling rhythm and rhyme--and I thank you! Caroline

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015

Caroline thanks for the kind words and the six stars - much appreciated.

Steve

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

The prompt should be well satisfied by this, and the poem should read well to the young. They probably won't mention the well crafted rhymes and meter, so I will. Excellent.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from pattipac

Excellent

Bravo! So deserving of six, bright stars, but I regret I've used up my limit. Excellent word choice makes for a tongue-twisting great read. Alliteration, and rhyme make it flow, and a party of fun makes me want to be there!

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015

Thanks for the kind words and the virtual six.

Steve

Comment from evesayshi

Excellent

In my opinion, an absolutely charming read for children of all ages - the young ones may have difficulty with some of the words, but I believe the older ones will add them to their vocabulary and enjoy sharing them with one other - a wonderful bedtime read for all children - rhyming and rhythm excellent in structure and rendering - I can see a genuine enjoyable experience for children and their parents as well...

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015

Thanks so much for the review and the kind words.

Steve

reply by evesayshi on 19-Mar-2015

You are indeed welcome...

Comment from Ninap2

Excellent

I simply love this piece especially your unique wording. My favorite stanza,
Figberry Folly's Fiesta Finale
(Try saying that thrice and your tongue'll go gnarly!)
Has fireworks and flares that are phantasmegorical,
Wand-craft and wizardry new and historical.
I have always loved that word:Phantasmagoria...
You did a wonderful job with this.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015

Nina, thanks so much for your kind words.

Steve

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi Steve,

This is definitely a piece that needs to be read out loud. Great alliteration and something kids would love.

Fantastic kids poem - well penned.
GMG

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Exceptional

WOW! This is great. The rhythm is superb as is the alliteration. I know that kids would really like this fun poem (but adults, too). Great job with the prompt. The flow and rhyme keep the poem moving at a quick pace (but not to quick that one misses the fun of the made up words). Good job. This is a strong contender.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015

Thanks for the lovely review and the six stars - much appreciated.

Steve

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

This is excellent. Your use of language and fantasy captivated me. This is poetry and fun of the highest order. This poem is a feast to my ears and my tongue. Great use of sound and alliteration. A delight to read. Thank you for sharing and daring.

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015

Thanks for the wonderfully kind words.

Steve

Comment from livelylinda

Excellent

kiwisteveh: I am picturing a group of small children sitting in a circle and listening to this poem. A few would be lost but it would be the usual few who were always lost. The rest would be in motion from the rhythm of this silly poem. There would be smiles and giggles and attempts at saying the made-up words which tickle their tongues. They would be happy. A great contender for the contest. Imagination . . . you are not lacking. livelylinda

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015

Thanks, Linda - seems your own imagination came into play here!

Steve

Comment from fimarie78

Exceptional

This is fabulous. It reminds me of the invented vocabulary written by Roald Dahl. Great alliteration and fun tongue twisters. This would make a super children's book or even a series. well done

 Comment Written 17-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2015

Thanks for the wonderfully warm words and the six shiny stars.

Steve