To Cherish Thorns
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "The Gathered Ghosts"Free Verse Poetry
25 total reviews
Comment from artemis53
Nice job as you go through your life and review (as all of us do) the ghosts we encounter in this life. The reprimand to your father was powerful to me and I understood your interpretation of the 'good son.' You just do what is necessary and needed w/o heroics.
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Nice job as you go through your life and review (as all of us do) the ghosts we encounter in this life. The reprimand to your father was powerful to me and I understood your interpretation of the 'good son.' You just do what is necessary and needed w/o heroics.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
Comment from pattipac
Already used up my shiny sixes, Michael, of I'd attach one to this creatively written poem about ghosts of a lover, and burdensome family members who continue to trouble you, even after they have died.
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Already used up my shiny sixes, Michael, of I'd attach one to this creatively written poem about ghosts of a lover, and burdensome family members who continue to trouble you, even after they have died.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
Comment from Lylise
Wow! Have a good time formatting this? Ha!
This was very cool and flowed well. My only real comment is that at the beginning of the poem you note that it is for a free verse contest. But posted under ghost contest.
Perhaps that line is a ghost all its own?
This is visual as hell and quite easy to follow. I thought it was going to be too long but it wasn't at all.
Killer entry for your contest. Good Luck! Lynda
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2015
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Wow! Have a good time formatting this? Ha!
This was very cool and flowed well. My only real comment is that at the beginning of the poem you note that it is for a free verse contest. But posted under ghost contest.
Perhaps that line is a ghost all its own?
This is visual as hell and quite easy to follow. I thought it was going to be too long but it wasn't at all.
Killer entry for your contest. Good Luck! Lynda
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2015
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Hi. I've been running around with clients at nut houses and things. So I've been away and behind... I'll try and catch up in the next day or two. Love your reviews and the smiles they bring, very needed at the moment. I mean it's a free verse AND a contest entry, just lazy wording. Ha! I've been in all these black and white no art etc. contests. I had to bust loose!! Yes, I did have fun. :)) mikey
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This has too much metered rhyme in it to be a free verse poem. But don't sweat it. They won't recognize it.
...clients at nut houses?
Dear boy, pray tell what is your vocation? Tell me later when you have time.
Comment from Acquired Taste
Mikey, terrific offering for the contest. Looks great with the different artwork and reads smoothly. It's getting harder and harder to decide if it's your work or Dean's *** our Brothers of the Macabre! Like the ending unexpected - but great! Jean
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Mikey, terrific offering for the contest. Looks great with the different artwork and reads smoothly. It's getting harder and harder to decide if it's your work or Dean's *** our Brothers of the Macabre! Like the ending unexpected - but great! Jean
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
Comment from Sasha
Already knowing a little about your life story, I found this very well written and a terrific entry for this Ghosts writing contest. Excellent work with this one. I enjoyed it very much. I wish you all the best in the contest.
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Already knowing a little about your life story, I found this very well written and a terrific entry for this Ghosts writing contest. Excellent work with this one. I enjoyed it very much. I wish you all the best in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I love the poem. Oh, the ghosts of what could have been and should have been. In truth, it was not and could not have been. We need to bury the ghosts and quit second guessing about the past. Great work.
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I love the picture. I love the poem. Oh, the ghosts of what could have been and should have been. In truth, it was not and could not have been. We need to bury the ghosts and quit second guessing about the past. Great work.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
Comment from nordicgirl
This is so reflective and unusual. It takes the theme and uses it to examine life and how we relate to it or rather how you relate to it. So thought provoking and well written. The presentation gives pause for each section and adds to the experience in a good way.
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This is so reflective and unusual. It takes the theme and uses it to examine life and how we relate to it or rather how you relate to it. So thought provoking and well written. The presentation gives pause for each section and adds to the experience in a good way.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
Comment from Tatarka2
I think you mean "plane," not "plain," but still, this was just SO effective. The use of the pictures within the poem was unexpected, and added to the overall mood. How could you not win this contest? I especially loved the stanzas about your Dad, and the one that begins "I never was the key - ." You have described feelings that so many people have, in such a hauntingly lyrical form here. I think this is so well done.
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I think you mean "plane," not "plain," but still, this was just SO effective. The use of the pictures within the poem was unexpected, and added to the overall mood. How could you not win this contest? I especially loved the stanzas about your Dad, and the one that begins "I never was the key - ." You have described feelings that so many people have, in such a hauntingly lyrical form here. I think this is so well done.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Excellent, Mikey! The Ghostly poem is enhanced with the ghostly pictures, and make an excellent contest entry. I liked how each stanza was worked in with the illustration, really spooky and really a great read. Good luck in the contest! xsx Sandra
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Excellent, Mikey! The Ghostly poem is enhanced with the ghostly pictures, and make an excellent contest entry. I liked how each stanza was worked in with the illustration, really spooky and really a great read. Good luck in the contest! xsx Sandra
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
Comment from Kingsland
I find you poem here written about ghosts. I just posted one recently about death, entitled death. I supposed the two poem just maybe intertwining. I really liked the picture you added in with the thoughts you've rendered here in this verse. The word and the picture play off of each other really well. I enjoyed reading this excellently written poetic voice... John
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I find you poem here written about ghosts. I just posted one recently about death, entitled death. I supposed the two poem just maybe intertwining. I really liked the picture you added in with the thoughts you've rendered here in this verse. The word and the picture play off of each other really well. I enjoyed reading this excellently written poetic voice... John
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
