Minnesota Poems
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Comment from MM lives on :)
Hello my friend, a well deserved historically entertaining entry in the poem of the month contest. Oh how the massacre of these innocent souls were brushed under the carpet in the sake for failure to kneel to an unknown and frightening God.
Fantastic work!
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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Hello my friend, a well deserved historically entertaining entry in the poem of the month contest. Oh how the massacre of these innocent souls were brushed under the carpet in the sake for failure to kneel to an unknown and frightening God.
Fantastic work!
Comment Written 23-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2015
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Thank you Christopher, not to mention greed and abuse leading to genocide.
Comment from jlsavell
Treischal, now this is poetry at its finest. A crown of sonnets with a didactic execution. A tour de force. This is no small feat and very few poets on this site can tout a crown of sonnets executed flawlessly and with real meaning.. Stunning.. wish I had a six, but I do not. Best wishes with the contest. wow, after reading you and a few others, I am absolutely and undeniably honored to be nominated among you. Truly humbling.. jlsavell
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Treischal, now this is poetry at its finest. A crown of sonnets with a didactic execution. A tour de force. This is no small feat and very few poets on this site can tout a crown of sonnets executed flawlessly and with real meaning.. Stunning.. wish I had a six, but I do not. Best wishes with the contest. wow, after reading you and a few others, I am absolutely and undeniably honored to be nominated among you. Truly humbling.. jlsavell
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Thank you jlsavell for your wonderful words of encouragement. Yes, i read them all too, and some were very amazing. I particularily liked the one about the leaf, but to me it read more like prose than poetry. Unfortunately, mine is probably too long and not the type that will be popular in this contest. I really appreciate your review very much.
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I am a big fan of well executed poetry. Long or short. It is sad that most here on Fanstory will not stick with long poetry, but it is truly their loss, if in fact they love poetry at all, in which case they might just love their own and want to get on with the reviewing to promote instead of enjoy the true beauty of a talented wordsmith. I am afraid your observation might be spot on. Sadly.. jlsavell
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Tom, this is a remarkable piece of historical poetry, very well written, and very engrossing. I do have a lot of sympathy for the Indians, their land was literally stolen from them. I saw this in the Poem of the Month contest, and think this one should easily win. You definitely have my vote. xsx sandra.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Tom, this is a remarkable piece of historical poetry, very well written, and very engrossing. I do have a lot of sympathy for the Indians, their land was literally stolen from them. I saw this in the Poem of the Month contest, and think this one should easily win. You definitely have my vote. xsx sandra.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Thank you Sandra. It's not doing too well. I don' t think its the type of work that will win, but thank you .
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I have read them all, some I just don't know how they got there. Yours is exceptional. I didn't have a 6 left, but it honestly deserved it.
Comment from BeasPeas
This is a wonderful poem that encompasses a heartbreaking period in our history. You've progressed your interesting piece logically throughout in telling the story. Rhyming is excellent while keeping good flow of content. Thank you for incorporating your author's notes into your piece.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015
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This is a wonderful poem that encompasses a heartbreaking period in our history. You've progressed your interesting piece logically throughout in telling the story. Rhyming is excellent while keeping good flow of content. Thank you for incorporating your author's notes into your piece.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2015
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Thank you very much Beas Peas. I am very pleased you liked the poem and the notes. I was a lot of work, but i feared the notes were too long.
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Perfect just the way you did it. I don't have six stars to give you for this wonderful endeavor, but I would have if I had them. Good luck in contest for poem of the month. Marilyn/BeasPeas
Comment from Pantygynt
One doesn't see this sort of thing much these days and to see it so brilliantly done was an added bonus. I remember the headmaster of the boarding school I attended aged 8-13 was a great fan of Lord Macauley but Macauley's rhythms were so banal one got fed up with them by the time one was half way through. No wonder he's out of favour these days. Nothing boring here however. It gripped me from beginning to end. A classic example of form well-matched to content. I have to admit I was not aware of this form before reading your work. I has been a mammoth undertaking and a fantastic achievement. There is not a forced rhyme in there and some excellent examles of printer's rhyme. Did I find one typo - Sonnet 1, verse 3, line two: "...made an ancient hunting grounds..." I think call this article/noun number agreement! It shouldn't be too hard to correct. Pardon me for being a pedant ant keep up the good stuff. I'm definitely bookcasing this one.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2015
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One doesn't see this sort of thing much these days and to see it so brilliantly done was an added bonus. I remember the headmaster of the boarding school I attended aged 8-13 was a great fan of Lord Macauley but Macauley's rhythms were so banal one got fed up with them by the time one was half way through. No wonder he's out of favour these days. Nothing boring here however. It gripped me from beginning to end. A classic example of form well-matched to content. I have to admit I was not aware of this form before reading your work. I has been a mammoth undertaking and a fantastic achievement. There is not a forced rhyme in there and some excellent examles of printer's rhyme. Did I find one typo - Sonnet 1, verse 3, line two: "...made an ancient hunting grounds..." I think call this article/noun number agreement! It shouldn't be too hard to correct. Pardon me for being a pedant ant keep up the good stuff. I'm definitely bookcasing this one.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2015
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Thank you Pantygynt. Yes I see it. As you say, easily fixable.
Comment from slwerder
This was a tremendous piece ...great on the history lesson and great on the rhymes...I was curious; this is going on at the same time as the civil war ,so how the US Calvary had time to fight the Indians and the civil war must have spread them pretty thin ...The whole time I was reading I was wondering about President Lincoln ...Whether he new of the forked tongue deals they were making...I really enjoyed this poem and I can't see anything but excellence....
slwerder
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2015
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This was a tremendous piece ...great on the history lesson and great on the rhymes...I was curious; this is going on at the same time as the civil war ,so how the US Calvary had time to fight the Indians and the civil war must have spread them pretty thin ...The whole time I was reading I was wondering about President Lincoln ...Whether he new of the forked tongue deals they were making...I really enjoyed this poem and I can't see anything but excellence....
slwerder
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2015
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Thank you slwerder. I appreciate the input and the award of stars. I don't think Lincoln knew, or he would have done something. The treaty was signed before he was elected. He had his hands full with the Civil War, too. Certainly, the Minnesota military was spread very thin as many regiments had been sent east to fight.
Comment from Tatarka2
I almost gave this one of my few remaining 6's. I think it really deserves it, and I hope this poem is nominated for Poem of the Month. Even more, I hope you will submit it to the historical society of Minnesota, or of one of the tribes affected. I know they would treasure this beautiful set of poems. My only small suggestion would be that I'm not crazy about the repetition of some sentences. Still, this is a stunning set of poems. I can see how hard you worked on this, how well you know the history, and how passionate you are about this subject.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2015
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I almost gave this one of my few remaining 6's. I think it really deserves it, and I hope this poem is nominated for Poem of the Month. Even more, I hope you will submit it to the historical society of Minnesota, or of one of the tribes affected. I know they would treasure this beautiful set of poems. My only small suggestion would be that I'm not crazy about the repetition of some sentences. Still, this is a stunning set of poems. I can see how hard you worked on this, how well you know the history, and how passionate you are about this subject.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2015
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Thank you very much Tartarka. I definitely was a lot of work.
Comment from Kingsland
This is a well told tale about the plight of the American Indians. This country was stolen from them by cut throats and thieves. You have written this piece well in an excellent poetic verve. I enjoyed reading and writing this response for it... John
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2015
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This is a well told tale about the plight of the American Indians. This country was stolen from them by cut throats and thieves. You have written this piece well in an excellent poetic verve. I enjoyed reading and writing this response for it... John
Comment Written 06-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2015
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Thank you John. Yes, i agree, it was stolen.
Comment from Spiritual Echo
What a marvelous gift to tell such a detailed story in poetic form. If history was taught with rhyme and meter, I think students would remember details better.
This is marvelous work.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2015
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What a marvelous gift to tell such a detailed story in poetic form. If history was taught with rhyme and meter, I think students would remember details better.
This is marvelous work.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2015
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Thank you Spiritual Echo. So glad you appreciated it. It was hard work to write.
Comment from trimple
Hey there, Tom
Wow! What an epic tale you have created here. I so admire your skill to put this together. I know from experience that these sonnets are pretty complex.
The brutality of mankind is age-old, and we see today the same hatred going on toward our fellow man.
I havn't been able to write a sonnet for a very long time. I have the 'block'but perhaps this will ignite me again...
Fabulous, Tom.
Much love
tracey :)
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2015
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Hey there, Tom
Wow! What an epic tale you have created here. I so admire your skill to put this together. I know from experience that these sonnets are pretty complex.
The brutality of mankind is age-old, and we see today the same hatred going on toward our fellow man.
I havn't been able to write a sonnet for a very long time. I have the 'block'but perhaps this will ignite me again...
Fabulous, Tom.
Much love
tracey :)
Comment Written 03-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2015
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Thank you Tracey. I am glad you liked it so well you gave it these fabulous stars. If it ignites a Sonnet in you, so much the better.
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I hope so too, Tom, but I doubt I could do as well as you have done here, my friend. This is truly outstanding...
The pleasure was all mine, Tom.
much love
tracey
