Sonnets
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "A Scandalous Affair"A collection of sonnets
35 total reviews
Comment from patcelaw
It is never the right thing to do if we are breaking the vows we took with another. I was blessed to have a good marriage where my husband and I were faithful to each other until death took him from me. Blessings ,Patricia
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It is never the right thing to do if we are breaking the vows we took with another. I was blessed to have a good marriage where my husband and I were faithful to each other until death took him from me. Blessings ,Patricia
Comment Written 21-Feb-2015
Comment from adewpearl
perfect pairing of art and poem
good rhyming in the rhyme scheme of the English sonnet
good use of enjambment
good use of iambic meter
nice alliteration in phrases like soul's sky and sing our secret song
and grand as gold
effective imagery
you convey well the high emotion and inner turmoil of the speaker
brooke
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perfect pairing of art and poem
good rhyming in the rhyme scheme of the English sonnet
good use of enjambment
good use of iambic meter
nice alliteration in phrases like soul's sky and sing our secret song
and grand as gold
effective imagery
you convey well the high emotion and inner turmoil of the speaker
brooke
Comment Written 21-Feb-2015
Comment from Lylise
Oh yeah. Let he without sin cast the first stone. LOL!
You have chosen a tragic and familiar subject to write about. I don't know if the 30 years is real or not but that doesn't matter. You have captured the wonder and pain of running into a long lost love very well here. Your presentation was very interesting. The red font is haunting.
This sonnet is clear in its intent and reaches those nether areas that you intended. The last two lines are your best. Cleanly and decisively you terminated this encounter. Sad. Isn't it always? Well done. Lynda
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Oh yeah. Let he without sin cast the first stone. LOL!
You have chosen a tragic and familiar subject to write about. I don't know if the 30 years is real or not but that doesn't matter. You have captured the wonder and pain of running into a long lost love very well here. Your presentation was very interesting. The red font is haunting.
This sonnet is clear in its intent and reaches those nether areas that you intended. The last two lines are your best. Cleanly and decisively you terminated this encounter. Sad. Isn't it always? Well done. Lynda
Comment Written 20-Feb-2015
Comment from l.raven
HI Michael, love is so hard to predict...do you go with it...or walk away...and wonder...a poem for though...very well written and a great picture...Luff Linda xxoo
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HI Michael, love is so hard to predict...do you go with it...or walk away...and wonder...a poem for though...very well written and a great picture...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 20-Feb-2015
Comment from emrpoems
An excellent sonnet and the story of many couples alive today. Some marriages appear strong but except for principle their hearts belong somewhere else. sad that everyone could not not be where the were supposed to be. Good rhythm and rhyme
compellingly paired picture and poem
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An excellent sonnet and the story of many couples alive today. Some marriages appear strong but except for principle their hearts belong somewhere else. sad that everyone could not not be where the were supposed to be. Good rhythm and rhyme
compellingly paired picture and poem
Comment Written 20-Feb-2015
Comment from ravenblack
You do well capturing the humanity of the situation. No judgement- how does one control the heart? Do that and it is not a heart at all. The only antidote- Keep your marriage strong. Excellent sonnet.
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You do well capturing the humanity of the situation. No judgement- how does one control the heart? Do that and it is not a heart at all. The only antidote- Keep your marriage strong. Excellent sonnet.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2015
Comment from JJ Rowe
Sonnets are tricky and I am not the best judge because my "da Dum-ing" is always off but this was beautiful and followed the the requirements to the best of my knowledge. great job!
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Sonnets are tricky and I am not the best judge because my "da Dum-ing" is always off but this was beautiful and followed the the requirements to the best of my knowledge. great job!
Comment Written 20-Feb-2015
Comment from madhatter1977
Excellent poem, Mikey! This can relate not just to one person but to many. I don't think it makes them bad people, just human! Let others judge, feelings are more important than other people's "morality", although it other people (wives, husbands etc) are involved it is troubling for all concerned. I was very taken with this - it's an extremely thought provoking and well written sonnet. Thanks for the author notes too and good luck in the contest, Pete :)
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Excellent poem, Mikey! This can relate not just to one person but to many. I don't think it makes them bad people, just human! Let others judge, feelings are more important than other people's "morality", although it other people (wives, husbands etc) are involved it is troubling for all concerned. I was very taken with this - it's an extremely thought provoking and well written sonnet. Thanks for the author notes too and good luck in the contest, Pete :)
Comment Written 19-Feb-2015
Comment from lancellot
Great poem and it tackles what many face. Is it wrong to love another when bound to one for life? There is no easy answer and you did well to show the passion and the sadness that comes with it.
{With} honor, our wild fantasy was stalled.
- I would cap this, Mikey.
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Great poem and it tackles what many face. Is it wrong to love another when bound to one for life? There is no easy answer and you did well to show the passion and the sadness that comes with it.
{With} honor, our wild fantasy was stalled.
- I would cap this, Mikey.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2015
Comment from Gloria ....
I'm not entirely clear on what the metaphor is in the first stanza, Mikey, but then I think I'm having a blonde day, and any day I have a blonde day it's always a good day.
Having said that this sonnet is written in terrific iambic meter and right to the point perfect, rhyme wise.
The best sonnet you've written yet in my humble opinion.
Good luck to you in the contest.
Gloria
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I'm not entirely clear on what the metaphor is in the first stanza, Mikey, but then I think I'm having a blonde day, and any day I have a blonde day it's always a good day.
Having said that this sonnet is written in terrific iambic meter and right to the point perfect, rhyme wise.
The best sonnet you've written yet in my humble opinion.
Good luck to you in the contest.
Gloria
Comment Written 19-Feb-2015
