Occurrence at Ebenezer Creek
black history month contest entry22 total reviews
Comment from write hand blue
War desensitizes people and a uniform gives soldiers cart-blanche to do almost as they liked.
This can be illustrated in many conflicts. Including the one at Owl Creek Bridge. Blood lust is just below the surface in a lot of us I'm afraid.
Your war was of the worse kind, a 'Civil' war where brother fought brother. So there must be many stories like this.
A well written poem, original and with a very good visual.
:) Mel.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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War desensitizes people and a uniform gives soldiers cart-blanche to do almost as they liked.
This can be illustrated in many conflicts. Including the one at Owl Creek Bridge. Blood lust is just below the surface in a lot of us I'm afraid.
Your war was of the worse kind, a 'Civil' war where brother fought brother. So there must be many stories like this.
A well written poem, original and with a very good visual.
:) Mel.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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You have summarized man's inhumanity to man very well, Mel. I truly appreciate your sharing my poem and your commentary. Rod
Comment from emrpoems
Good use of abcb rhymes
Excellent enjambment allowing smooth flow of words fr om line to line
An entire account of the Ebenezer Creek incident
Thanks for sharing your notes
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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Good use of abcb rhymes
Excellent enjambment allowing smooth flow of words fr om line to line
An entire account of the Ebenezer Creek incident
Thanks for sharing your notes
Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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Thank you so much for sharing my poem and your kind praise. I am pleased my notes were also helpful. Rod
Comment from words
A sad story effectively told in the first person.
The closing line is chilling.
What a terrible price the speaker paid for "freedom". At that moment, it must have seemed a hollow concept.
An apt post for Black History Month. It is sad that such a large portion of our citizenry was so ill used for so long.
Hugs,d
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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A sad story effectively told in the first person.
The closing line is chilling.
What a terrible price the speaker paid for "freedom". At that moment, it must have seemed a hollow concept.
An apt post for Black History Month. It is sad that such a large portion of our citizenry was so ill used for so long.
Hugs,d
Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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Thank you so much, Hugs, for your wonderful comments and the six stars. I truly appreciate your sharing my poem. Rod
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Well done. I was not aware of this story. I was not prepared for the ending. So sad to believe that these things did occur. Your poem had great flow. It is, though, a sad commentary on the state of the society at that time.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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Well done. I was not aware of this story. I was not prepared for the ending. So sad to believe that these things did occur. Your poem had great flow. It is, though, a sad commentary on the state of the society at that time.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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Yes, it is hard to believe how invisible Black people were during the Civil War, even after the Emancipation Proclamation. Thank you so much for this fabulous rating and your very kind praise. Rod
Comment from Ben Colder
Many atrocities such as this, but many never mentioned. Glad you shared a bit of what is documented. You did well with the poem. It sang louder than Dixie!. LOL.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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Many atrocities such as this, but many never mentioned. Glad you shared a bit of what is documented. You did well with the poem. It sang louder than Dixie!. LOL.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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Thank you so much for sharing, Ben, and your kind praise. Rod
Comment from Veeb
Very well done, Rod. We have family in GA, and so I have heard the tale of Ebenezer Creek - the brutality of war will never be underestimated, will it? This is a well constructed poem that moves at a good tempo and tells a great story. Your colloquial dialogue adds interesting flavor and authenticity. Very enjoyable.
This should be a great contender, and I wish you well in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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Very well done, Rod. We have family in GA, and so I have heard the tale of Ebenezer Creek - the brutality of war will never be underestimated, will it? This is a well constructed poem that moves at a good tempo and tells a great story. Your colloquial dialogue adds interesting flavor and authenticity. Very enjoyable.
This should be a great contender, and I wish you well in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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Wow! I am thrilled and delighted to receive such high marks and kind praise. Thank you very much,
Rod
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Deserved, Rod. Most welcome!
Comment from Pyrrho
It is tough duty writing narrative poetry and making it sound like it belongs. Meter and rhyme do not lend themselves to detailed narrative. You succeed and make it ring authentically. Well done you.
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It is tough duty writing narrative poetry and making it sound like it belongs. Meter and rhyme do not lend themselves to detailed narrative. You succeed and make it ring authentically. Well done you.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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Thank you very much for your very kind appraisal and review. Rod
Comment from Finglas
Well done you did the Bierce piece proud -- a favorite of mine. I like the rhyme scheme and rapid flow of the piece, even it it tells a very sad tale.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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Well done you did the Bierce piece proud -- a favorite of mine. I like the rhyme scheme and rapid flow of the piece, even it it tells a very sad tale.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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I am delighted you enjoyed my story, Finglas. Thanks so much for sharing. Rod
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements beautifully. I enjoyed the solid rhyme and meter throughout which made for a smooth and enjoyable read. I think the use of a specific point in history was very creative and shows a masterful command of the poetic arts in order to translate it lyrically. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing it with me.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully. I enjoyed the solid rhyme and meter throughout which made for a smooth and enjoyable read. I think the use of a specific point in history was very creative and shows a masterful command of the poetic arts in order to translate it lyrically. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing it with me.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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Thank you, M A for sharing my poem and your wonderful feedback and best wishes. Rod
Comment from Dawny53
After reading this I was so sorry I gave all my sixes up.. I was so impressed with your writing and your authors notes that I shared this with my family.. excellent writing, right down to your dialogue, which was really, really good. May just have a winner here!
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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After reading this I was so sorry I gave all my sixes up.. I was so impressed with your writing and your authors notes that I shared this with my family.. excellent writing, right down to your dialogue, which was really, really good. May just have a winner here!
Comment Written 12-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2015
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Thank you, Dawny53, so much for your lovely praise and for sharing the poem with your family. Rod
