Comment from dmt1967

Excellent

I like the picture of the woman praying. I thought this was very apt for the poem and bought the poem together. It was a nice little poem and very well written. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015

thanks, dmt1967
jan

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

When I saw the description of the poem I said this is about me, but then after reading it, it is a spiritual direction you were talking about. I am quite spiritual,

Well done
Mary

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015

that is about the highest praise a poet could ever receive, Jackarrie - thanks so much, jan

Comment from mumsyone

Good

Hi Jan,

I'm a little confused here. You seem to start out talking TO God; then, suddenly without anything, including punctuation, to indicate it, you are talking ABOUT Him rather than to Him.

Please let me know if your change it. I love the message; just confused about the format.

When I lose my way
there you (You) are
reaching out for me


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 Comment Written 08-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015

mumsyone:
I'll reread to see if I can pick up what you mean
jan

Comment from linsbm

Excellent

A well written poem that reminds readers that God is there for us to reach out and call Him at anytime. Good closing -


"except claim My Name -
I am yours;
you are always Mine."

Thanks for sharing.} Lin

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015

thanks, linsbm
jan

Comment from Patti R.

Excellent

This is a lovely and hopeful poem/psalm.
The only suggestion I would make is in the fourth verse:
Somewhere deep inside
His presence
quietly whispers.

Through the rest of the poem you are 'talking' to God. It feels like it should read Your presence/quietly whispers to keep to the voice you started with.

Patti

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015

thanks for your suggestion, Patti
jan

Comment from Carole Rosa

Excellent

Jan, How lovely. The artwork is very well done and it surely enhances your poetic piece of work. In parts of the poem you having a conversation with HIM and then you are talking about HIM and then HE is talking to you. Not that it is bad, it's just something I think I noticed. Carole

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015

thanks, Carole
jan

Comment from LadyTreana

Excellent

This poetry gives a sense of peace and harmony. You can feel the solace it would bring to anyone that is looking for some semblance of peace, comfort and just wanting to be loved. Very good writing.

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 Comment Written 07-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015

thanks, LadyTreana
jan