From out of the Grayness
Viewing comments for Chapter 46 "I was a Leaf"Reaching from the gray areas to understand life
15 total reviews
Comment from Treischel
I wonderful poetic free verse journey into the Mind of a leaf. Wonderful characterizations of the forces and energies that play on a leaf. Very clever, very colorful. Full of imagination and a delightful read.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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I wonderful poetic free verse journey into the Mind of a leaf. Wonderful characterizations of the forces and energies that play on a leaf. Very clever, very colorful. Full of imagination and a delightful read.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Many thanks Treischel...a really meaningful review which is much appreciated! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance
Comment from BeasPeas
An enjoyable story with a unique point of view from the perspective of a leaf. I found its originality and storytelling charming. Your poem flows well and is interesting. Last line makes the perfect ending. Marilyn/BeasPeas
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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An enjoyable story with a unique point of view from the perspective of a leaf. I found its originality and storytelling charming. Your poem flows well and is interesting. Last line makes the perfect ending. Marilyn/BeasPeas
Comment Written 20-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2015
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Thanks so much BeasPeas: and glad to meet you. I enjoyed your review and really appreciate your comments! Don't be a stranger...I love hearing from you: Vance.....HIS GRAYNESS
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Hi Vance--His Grayness (great pen name). Thank you. This poem was done so well. Best, Marilyn/BeasPeas
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Vance - this is a spectacular post, captivating and creative. It kept me engaged and wondering, as well as exploring life as I read your lines. Beautiful work that has a depth and contemplative feel to it. My favourites to read my friend.
I would suggest putting in a few line breaks, just to ease the one big block of words you have here. I think it would also help in creating a pause or pondering for the reader....like taking a breath slowly before the next step begins. But exceptional work all the same.
Thanks for sharing,
Maureen
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2015
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Dear Vance - this is a spectacular post, captivating and creative. It kept me engaged and wondering, as well as exploring life as I read your lines. Beautiful work that has a depth and contemplative feel to it. My favourites to read my friend.
I would suggest putting in a few line breaks, just to ease the one big block of words you have here. I think it would also help in creating a pause or pondering for the reader....like taking a breath slowly before the next step begins. But exceptional work all the same.
Thanks for sharing,
Maureen
Comment Written 10-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2015
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Wow Maureen: I am delighted beyond words to hear from you!!! I've been away for a long time and have prayed for you every day .... Just to see your name was worth a million stars but I consider your six to be a huge praise and your comments are very well meaningful...thank you and a million hugs (stored up) are on their way....but still warm. Blessings and thanks, Vance
Comment from robina1978
Lovely artwork that complement your lengthy poem very well. It is an epiphany for a leaf, a big one. He is God's leaf indeed. A nice and original free verse. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2015
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Lovely artwork that complement your lengthy poem very well. It is an epiphany for a leaf, a big one. He is God's leaf indeed. A nice and original free verse. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2015
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Thanks Robina1978 your comments are much appreciated
Comment from Irish Rain
Well, this is just too outstanding. I knew it was going to be about the life of a leaf...but what a life! And the laughing at the bugs falling was just too much! I loved it. But then, as Autumn set in...fear of not knowing how to fly, and then taking on the aura, vibrational beingness of the human...to finally become ink...and thus this message. I loved this. I think for a while...I was a leaf too!
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015
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Well, this is just too outstanding. I knew it was going to be about the life of a leaf...but what a life! And the laughing at the bugs falling was just too much! I loved it. But then, as Autumn set in...fear of not knowing how to fly, and then taking on the aura, vibrational beingness of the human...to finally become ink...and thus this message. I loved this. I think for a while...I was a leaf too!
Comment Written 09-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015
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Bless you Irish Rain: I'm sure if you indeed believed it.....it really did happen and you were indeed a Leaf. Our energies given by God are highly interchangeable and ALL LIVING THINGS HAVE ENERGY so my deepest thanks are to you for this lovely sharing of YOUR energy. Blessings and Love: Vance
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You are most welcome! Yes, I believe absolutely everything is energy...which never dies, it simply changes form. I SO enjoyed this!
Comment from lfemine
That's a lovely poem, very well written, nice imagery, great imagination and some humor and compassion. Rhyming is well done and flows well.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015
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That's a lovely poem, very well written, nice imagery, great imagination and some humor and compassion. Rhyming is well done and flows well.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015
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Thank you so much lfemine....(I hope that means "the lady" ) and I appreciate your comments and hope that you will come back and tell me more! Blessings and Love! Vance
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Sure. Yes, I'm a lady :)
Comment from GracieAnn
Vance, this is fun write that personifies the advent of the left. Great dialogue that is much like a child would speak. I enjoyed the creative way this is written. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015
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Vance, this is fun write that personifies the advent of the left. Great dialogue that is much like a child would speak. I enjoyed the creative way this is written. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 08-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015
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Thank you Gracie Ann but I'm alarmed and confused at how this reflects anything "left" (in politics?) as I am a bit right of Genghis Khan. ??? Thanks for your review..as always...much appreciated. Vance
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Vance, I fat fingered the word left and meant to type leaf. LOL :0 GracieAnn
Comment from Glasstruth
Wow! You just blew me away with this. The personification of the leaf was so real that it put me in a trance. The leaf is vulnerable as humans, in that there's an end to everything. The most amazing part which explained this all is: "You see, I borrowed a soul...for just a little while from a human that could write this all down for me." Clever!!! This to me is your very best. I give it ten stars!!!!!!!!!!! Les
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015
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Wow! You just blew me away with this. The personification of the leaf was so real that it put me in a trance. The leaf is vulnerable as humans, in that there's an end to everything. The most amazing part which explained this all is: "You see, I borrowed a soul...for just a little while from a human that could write this all down for me." Clever!!! This to me is your very best. I give it ten stars!!!!!!!!!!! Les
Comment Written 08-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015
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Dear Les: I am exhilarated at your review as I respect your talent so very much! I always wanted to try and move my persona to another perspective and I so dearly love nature and especially trees and leaves so my thoughts embraced the leaf and my connection became this work. Thanks again for such a wonderful encouragement! Vance Bless you for the six stars!!!!!
Comment from Spitfire
l feel the energy in this poem, Vance, although I think you overdo the exclamation points. Great use of personification and clever take on a leaf taking over a soul. You use a concrete image very successfully to get across an abstract thought.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015
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l feel the energy in this poem, Vance, although I think you overdo the exclamation points. Great use of personification and clever take on a leaf taking over a soul. You use a concrete image very successfully to get across an abstract thought.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2015
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Thanks so much Shari! I'm an exclamation fanatic and always whacking that key on my keyboard. I just gotta back off and thanks for the feedback! Thanks for the tip. Vance
Comment from val fitchie
where does one go to find the words to begin reviewing this without sounding condescending and trite. I am at a loss to respectfully "match" the SPITIUALALITY, ARTISTRY, and INTEGRITY of every individual word PERFECTLY CHOSEN AND PLACED within PERFECTLY CRAFTED sentences within TRANSCENDANT PARAGRAPHS of such HOLY THOUGHT................. so PALPABLE and TACTILE..(the response -I "feel ya", man- can't even scratch the surface of YOUR WORLD) For us wordplay fans there are several metaphors and UNIQUE first time puns here as well as the MASTERFUL scripture. You are the planet's greatest poet (yes, this was "prose" but SHEER poetry, brother.) I am pleased at this great work and will not even try to "flower" this......I will LEAF it alone to loudly declare itself without a cheerleader........this was TOO damn good and original
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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where does one go to find the words to begin reviewing this without sounding condescending and trite. I am at a loss to respectfully "match" the SPITIUALALITY, ARTISTRY, and INTEGRITY of every individual word PERFECTLY CHOSEN AND PLACED within PERFECTLY CRAFTED sentences within TRANSCENDANT PARAGRAPHS of such HOLY THOUGHT................. so PALPABLE and TACTILE..(the response -I "feel ya", man- can't even scratch the surface of YOUR WORLD) For us wordplay fans there are several metaphors and UNIQUE first time puns here as well as the MASTERFUL scripture. You are the planet's greatest poet (yes, this was "prose" but SHEER poetry, brother.) I am pleased at this great work and will not even try to "flower" this......I will LEAF it alone to loudly declare itself without a cheerleader........this was TOO damn good and original
Comment Written 07-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2015
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Dear Val: (emphasis on "dear")... your inspiration is my pathway for thoughts and words! Your words are the challenges of my pen's worthiness and the will of my spirit! Thank you sincerely for the gifts of thought you so brilliantly share! VanceT
