And Then She Burped
Beyond just based on a very, very true story.5 total reviews
Comment from Janet7053
I guess I saw several sentences that needed editing.
Almost like a slow replay... is not a sentence
reflect means looking back so you don't need the word back.
vestibule, comma needed
periods should be inside the quotation now." Trent,"
Just be more meticulous about the final presentation before clicking end preview.
Must have been the way I was thinking when I scored you.
Happy Tuesday!
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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I guess I saw several sentences that needed editing.
Almost like a slow replay... is not a sentence
reflect means looking back so you don't need the word back.
vestibule, comma needed
periods should be inside the quotation now." Trent,"
Just be more meticulous about the final presentation before clicking end preview.
Must have been the way I was thinking when I scored you.
Happy Tuesday!
Comment Written 07-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Based on the 4 review, did you have any recommendations for me to improve it or ?? Thanks for taking your time!! Very much appreciated!!! :) <3
Comment from Quoiky
Bahahaha! I can totally relate to your story, only it was my mother in law. We were at a small restaurant, having brunch. Their tables were very close to one another, and my mother in law had a little more girth than she thought. She squeezed herself between two tables of patrons, who were not finished eating. I was in front of her and I heard the people at the first table moan and grumble, and say things like 'Jeeesuss'! And 'Damn, lady'! Then the same thing at the next table.
When we finally got outside, I asked my husband what that was all about. He said, 'every step mom took, she farted."
Her butt was level with the tables, so the poor diners really got blasted.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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Bahahaha! I can totally relate to your story, only it was my mother in law. We were at a small restaurant, having brunch. Their tables were very close to one another, and my mother in law had a little more girth than she thought. She squeezed herself between two tables of patrons, who were not finished eating. I was in front of her and I heard the people at the first table moan and grumble, and say things like 'Jeeesuss'! And 'Damn, lady'! Then the same thing at the next table.
When we finally got outside, I asked my husband what that was all about. He said, 'every step mom took, she farted."
Her butt was level with the tables, so the poor diners really got blasted.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2015
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Lmfao right now!! That is SOOOO awesome!!!
Thanks for the review (a six?! Holy cow!!) & the story especially!!!!! ;) <3
Comment from Tatarka2
This was so funny. Who hasn't experienced exactly those feelings in adolescence? I take it your grandma is still alive? And probably embarrassing the family each year, right? Well done. I hope you do well in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2015
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This was so funny. Who hasn't experienced exactly those feelings in adolescence? I take it your grandma is still alive? And probably embarrassing the family each year, right? Well done. I hope you do well in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2015
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Thank you & yes - she is!! ;) <3
Comment from Carole Rosa
To the author of "And Then She Burped". I bet you get many equally funny stories in return for this short story. My mother and I went to a Mexican restaurant when I was a teenager. As we were leaving the table, my mother dropped her keys. The tables were close together in this restaurant. When she bent over to pick up her keys, she let a big loud stinker aimed at the table next to us. I almost died trying to get out of there!!! Good luck in the contest. Your story is very well told. Carole
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2015
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To the author of "And Then She Burped". I bet you get many equally funny stories in return for this short story. My mother and I went to a Mexican restaurant when I was a teenager. As we were leaving the table, my mother dropped her keys. The tables were close together in this restaurant. When she bent over to pick up her keys, she let a big loud stinker aimed at the table next to us. I almost died trying to get out of there!!! Good luck in the contest. Your story is very well told. Carole
Comment Written 01-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2015
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Thus far, yes, with my story comes another - but that's what I love best about this (& writing in general!)!! Your story even, it reminds me of why my mother-in-law doesn't eat onions!!! LOL!!! LOVE IT!!! Thanks for reviewing!!!!!
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Smiles. We aren't the only ones who can tell stories! Ha! Carole
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:) <3
Comment from patcelaw
This short story had e laughing as I can relate to some point. My grandma would never have burped nor did she wear false teeth, but my mother had false teeth. She tool great delight at family dinners of using he tongue to flick out her bottom teeth. We kids just laughed She never did this in public. Patricia
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2015
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This short story had e laughing as I can relate to some point. My grandma would never have burped nor did she wear false teeth, but my mother had false teeth. She tool great delight at family dinners of using he tongue to flick out her bottom teeth. We kids just laughed She never did this in public. Patricia
Comment Written 31-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2015
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LMAO... WAIT... My GMA SOOOOOOO didn't intentionally burp, nor expect her teeth to fly out, but pretty sure my reaction was the biggest surprise of it all!!! LOL!!! ;) <3
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Check your email quick if you can plz... ;) <3
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Sent e-mail
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Oops. I think this was a blind contest. Oh well!! Not like I was going to win anyhow!!! ;) <3
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Maybe not.. Who knows. I don't pay too much attention but, with my luck it was. Whatev. Off to bed. <3
