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Comment from rod007
This poem in its combination of God and the pain of grief creates an aura of hope and savior so that the pain will not sap away a new day of happiness. Well done, Tom.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2015
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This poem in its combination of God and the pain of grief creates an aura of hope and savior so that the pain will not sap away a new day of happiness. Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2015
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Thank you rod for that wonderful insight.
Comment from ravenblack
Your wife ( and you ) are in my thoughts. No consolation, but time heals and sometimes the grieving process takes much time. I think your penning of this poem will help to ease her grief, the love and concern for your wife emanating from it
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2015
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Your wife ( and you ) are in my thoughts. No consolation, but time heals and sometimes the grieving process takes much time. I think your penning of this poem will help to ease her grief, the love and concern for your wife emanating from it
Comment Written 30-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2015
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Thank you ravenblack. I hope so. I know it is true. Your comforting words are so well appreciated.
Comment from Joan E.
Ah, a straight forward sonnet to express sorrow--so appropriate. I'm glad your muse made it effortless to communicate the feelings in rhymed quatrains. The alliteration of "s's" and "d's" adds to the intensity. Warm regards- Joan
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2015
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Ah, a straight forward sonnet to express sorrow--so appropriate. I'm glad your muse made it effortless to communicate the feelings in rhymed quatrains. The alliteration of "s's" and "d's" adds to the intensity. Warm regards- Joan
Comment Written 29-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2015
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Thank you Joan, always an excellent review.
Comment from MissMerri
I am so impressed with your ability to write in such restrictive forms and yet tell your story with originality and creativity. Not only do you adhere to the sonnet form, writing in excellent iambic pentameter, but you use many poetic devices such as alliteration and internal rhyme and still communicate the strong emotional theme. The poem seems so honest and sincere and really touches the reader's heart. An excellent sonnet on grief and personal loss.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2015
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I am so impressed with your ability to write in such restrictive forms and yet tell your story with originality and creativity. Not only do you adhere to the sonnet form, writing in excellent iambic pentameter, but you use many poetic devices such as alliteration and internal rhyme and still communicate the strong emotional theme. The poem seems so honest and sincere and really touches the reader's heart. An excellent sonnet on grief and personal loss.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2015
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Thank you MissMerri for the excellent review. I am very pleased by the compliment to my work.
Comment from mshirachot
So sorry for this great loss for your wife and yourself. You have done a most excellent job of writing about her expressions of grief which you have observed. I like the aabb style you've chosen.
I liked the alliteration with dreadful, darkness, deep and tart tears.
Thanks for sharing this.
Blessings and prayers for comfort for your whole family.
Marsha
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2015
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So sorry for this great loss for your wife and yourself. You have done a most excellent job of writing about her expressions of grief which you have observed. I like the aabb style you've chosen.
I liked the alliteration with dreadful, darkness, deep and tart tears.
Thanks for sharing this.
Blessings and prayers for comfort for your whole family.
Marsha
Comment Written 29-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2015
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Thank you Marsha, your words are a blessing.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Often the best writing comes with spontaneous ease.
The Sonnet is perfectly formatted and captures the deep sense of loss well.
The loss of a close and dear loved one is so sad and difficult to accept and work through.
Sometimes we think we will never smile again but little, by little the sunshine of happiness begins to return. We never forget those lost.
:-) Shirley
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2015
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Often the best writing comes with spontaneous ease.
The Sonnet is perfectly formatted and captures the deep sense of loss well.
The loss of a close and dear loved one is so sad and difficult to accept and work through.
Sometimes we think we will never smile again but little, by little the sunshine of happiness begins to return. We never forget those lost.
:-) Shirley
Comment Written 29-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2015
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Thank you Shirley, your words are touching.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi,
So sorry for your loss. It's always so difficult to lose someone. One can read the overwhelming grief, the struggle to understand and except in this. Words with impact.
The artwork is just perfect, making for a stunning piece.
Here's a virtual sixer coming your way. They just don't give us enough of them.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*:*)
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2015
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Hi,
So sorry for your loss. It's always so difficult to lose someone. One can read the overwhelming grief, the struggle to understand and except in this. Words with impact.
The artwork is just perfect, making for a stunning piece.
Here's a virtual sixer coming your way. They just don't give us enough of them.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*:*)
Comment Written 29-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2015
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Thank you Jax. Yes, we could use more sixes, but a virtual is nice to get too.
Comment from mfowler
Your poem is very nicely constructed and flows very well by rhyme and meter. I sense how you've responded to your wife's grief through the two phases of deep grief and the turn to express determination to carry on in the light of a spiritual presence. Grief should carry these two sides, the pain and the hope. It's what makes us human. Lovely and supportive work. I hope your wife took comfort from your work.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2015
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Your poem is very nicely constructed and flows very well by rhyme and meter. I sense how you've responded to your wife's grief through the two phases of deep grief and the turn to express determination to carry on in the light of a spiritual presence. Grief should carry these two sides, the pain and the hope. It's what makes us human. Lovely and supportive work. I hope your wife took comfort from your work.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2015
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Thank you mfowler for your comforting words.
Comment from emrpoems
Although I find it hard to[] I understand- maybe a dash or a comma would make this read better.just my thought
A beautiful sonnet composition that evokes a lot of sadness and causes the reader to empathize
A stunning presentation
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2015
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Although I find it hard to[] I understand- maybe a dash or a comma would make this read better.just my thought
A beautiful sonnet composition that evokes a lot of sadness and causes the reader to empathize
A stunning presentation
Comment Written 28-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2015
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Thank you Erica. An interesting thought. I'll consider it.
Comment from Dawny53
In reading your authors notes I have to say I know what you mean.. sometimes it just takes over as if you were meant to write it, as if it were meant to be. It is such a sad poem though, and I don't really know what to say to you.. so I will just be honest and say you wrote it well. I'm sorry for your loss.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2015
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In reading your authors notes I have to say I know what you mean.. sometimes it just takes over as if you were meant to write it, as if it were meant to be. It is such a sad poem though, and I don't really know what to say to you.. so I will just be honest and say you wrote it well. I'm sorry for your loss.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2015
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Thank you Dawny for your lovely comments.
