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Mummy's Magic Kisses

contest entry

15 total reviews 
Comment from adewpearl
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solid use of rhyming couplets
good use of alliteration in phrases like mummy's magic
great illustrative examples of those things healed by a magic kiss
good assonance in mixed with tickles
I LOVE the humor of how mom gets what she wants when she cries for dad LOL
Brooke

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2015

reply by the author on 30-Jan-2015
    Brooke, thank you for your lovely feedback :) Kindest regards, Debra
Comment from Lovinia
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Hi Debra


Cheeky woman you are. Hahaha! Oh well, let's face it those pouts often come in handy. Nice to have 'one' who can't resist. LOL

I love all the mummy kisses ... amazing how well they work. You took me back a little ... now I get hugs and maybe a kiss ... not showered in them as I once was. :( Enjoy them all while you can. "Mummy's magic kisses" ... love it!

Excellent rhyme and rhythm ... you have such a natural gift for this. I'm trying to work out iambic pentameter ... YIKES!! ... I'm tone deaf it seems.

I enjoyed your poetic technique using alliteration, assonance and consonance and your creative approach to the contest. I just started reading the poems and have missed the vote. Well done anyway. Hugs - Lovi xoxo

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2015

reply by the author on 30-Jan-2015
    Hi Lovi :) Thank you ever so much for your wonderful feedback. Glad you enjoyed the poem! Good luck with the iambic pentameter LOL! Love Debs xx
Comment from Dawny53
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I love it, love it, love it!! Also think the image choice is really great, the judges will no doubt look at this entry for a good long while!

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2015

reply by the author on 30-Jan-2015
    Hi Dawny :) Thank you for your wonderful feedback..... I didn't do too shabby in the voting booth with this entry - had fun writing it - glad you enjoyed! Kindest regards as always, Debra x
Comment from Ricky1024
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Very nice and well written too.!
Heres mine!
Perect Adjective and Objective Content.
Grammar and imagery. "The Kiss?"
{A Contest Entry Dedication}
by ?
"I must so much dismiss the Kiss for If I shall resist...
"I must try hard not to cry for if I so...
"I think I will die...
"And I must not think of *you my love for now you have gone...
"So far above..
...
"But why and when shall I see..
"You again my............................................................................
"Buddy Friend?"
"My first written poem on April 1st, 2003.
"I won a beautiful , silver bowl for this!"
"I'm not here right now...
"but I am not far...
" I'm in a place...
"not far like a star...
"you'll feel this place take a moment...
"and then you will soon see...
"exactly where...
"I shall be..
{Dedicated by me and Jay to his friends in 2003}
Richard Edward Smrkovsky and my "Buddy Friend
Jason Richard Smrkovsky.
"Rest in place my only *Son...

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 Comment Written 29-Jan-2015

reply by the author on 29-Jan-2015
    Thank you!
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
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Hi,

This is too cute! Mummy's are special, and of course, more special if she can get daddy to open up the wallet!

A fun story and take on the prompt, as well, a neat presentation.

Good luck in the contest.

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*:*)

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2015

reply by the author on 29-Jan-2015
    Thank you, Jax for your great feedback and good luck wishes :) kindest regards...
Comment from Emily George
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Love that last line so true. And of course mummy's kisses are magic.
A light hearted poem with a delightful rhyme and content. Good end rhyming. Good luck

 Comment Written 29-Jan-2015

reply by the author on 29-Jan-2015
    Thank you, Emily, for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes :) Kindest regards...
Comment from patcelaw
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There indeed is a magic in the kisses of a mother. Mothers who cannot kiss their child's hurts is not a very good mom in my opinion. Patricia

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2015

reply by the author on 29-Jan-2015
    Thank you, Patricia for your great feedback :) Kindest regards...
Comment from BeasPeas
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Playful and cute, humorous, well rhymed. Use of two-line rhyming is good. Nice use of transitioning lines from child to mummy and daddy.

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2015

reply by the author on 29-Jan-2015
    Thank you BeasPeas for your great feedback :) Kindest regards...
Comment from RYME4U
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Very well written. Smooth and even and introspective into what a mother's kiss can mean. You have described this well and have the feelings come through

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2015

reply by the author on 29-Jan-2015
    Thank you Ryme4u for your great feedback :) Kindest regards...
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
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This is well-written, humorous, and has good rhyme, rhythm and flow. I like the Mummy kisses theme. Good luck to you in the contest, Jeanie Mercer

 Comment Written 28-Jan-2015

reply by the author on 29-Jan-2015
    Thank you, Jeanie, for your lovely feedback and good luck wishes :) Kindest regards...