Little Poems
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16 total reviews
Comment from lakeport
Season of starkness, indeed every season has its charm, but winter I could do without it, that's a very nice expressed poem, I enjoyed reading it. God bless you,
Lakeport.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2015
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Season of starkness, indeed every season has its charm, but winter I could do without it, that's a very nice expressed poem, I enjoyed reading it. God bless you,
Lakeport.
Comment Written 26-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2015
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Thank you Lakeport. Point well taken.
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you are very welcome, lakeport.
Comment from Nosha17
Every season has its own beauty, even winter-but I am glad it doesn't last too long. Good use of descriptive language to describe the loveliness of nature and excellent rhyming. Interesting poetic form, great picture. Faye
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Every season has its own beauty, even winter-but I am glad it doesn't last too long. Good use of descriptive language to describe the loveliness of nature and excellent rhyming. Interesting poetic form, great picture. Faye
Comment Written 25-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Thank you Faye. Glad you liked it.
Comment from Wabigoon
Treischel--
Hey, nice job. I don't know a darn thing about roundelays, but you seem to have hit it. The repeating lines and refrains really work. To me, I guess, the richness of the form contrasts with the starkness of the subject matter -- meaning if I were to try to write a poem about this subject matter I'd go for something really spare. But I understand you are working with a form. Congratulations. Nice job.
Thanks
Wabigoon
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Treischel--
Hey, nice job. I don't know a darn thing about roundelays, but you seem to have hit it. The repeating lines and refrains really work. To me, I guess, the richness of the form contrasts with the starkness of the subject matter -- meaning if I were to try to write a poem about this subject matter I'd go for something really spare. But I understand you are working with a form. Congratulations. Nice job.
Thanks
Wabigoon
Comment Written 25-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jan-2015
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Thanks Wabigoon. Yup, the format drives a lot.
Comment from mshirachot
You chose some challenging words for your repeated rhyme scheme. Bravo for creeativity on that. These types of poems are not easy to master and keep them from sounding repetitive, but you have done a marvelous job of keeping it fresh.
Thanks for sharing.
Blessings,
Marsha
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2015
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You chose some challenging words for your repeated rhyme scheme. Bravo for creeativity on that. These types of poems are not easy to master and keep them from sounding repetitive, but you have done a marvelous job of keeping it fresh.
Thanks for sharing.
Blessings,
Marsha
Comment Written 24-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2015
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Thank you Marsha. Yes, i did have to get creative.
Comment from Dawny53
Your poem has given me a much appreciated love for the roundelay. I like the style in which you presented near rhymes, the poem reads so well all the way through. Great art selection, just perfect for it. I truly enjoyed it!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2015
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Your poem has given me a much appreciated love for the roundelay. I like the style in which you presented near rhymes, the poem reads so well all the way through. Great art selection, just perfect for it. I truly enjoyed it!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2015
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Thank you Dawny. Glad you liked it. Give one a try.
Comment from tfawcus
This seems to be an exceptionally difficult form to create in English, with its comparative paucity of rhyming words. You have managed some ingenious rhymes and near rhymes to maintain the flow and the sense. I imagine that these poems were composed to be sung in the form of a round, with different vocal groups taking up the repeating lines to form an intricate melody. I must at least have a go at it, having your splendid example here to guide me!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2015
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This seems to be an exceptionally difficult form to create in English, with its comparative paucity of rhyming words. You have managed some ingenious rhymes and near rhymes to maintain the flow and the sense. I imagine that these poems were composed to be sung in the form of a round, with different vocal groups taking up the repeating lines to form an intricate melody. I must at least have a go at it, having your splendid example here to guide me!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2015
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Thank you tony. Yes, I'm sure you'll do an excellent job. I think you are right about singing.
Comment from risktaker
Starkness represents a step in the renewal process of seasons.This stage represents the absence of color, green spaces, and the singing of birds. I relate to "vital roots and dormant grains," " barron limbs,abandoned lark nests," "winter's grip yields to springtime rains." Great imagery. Good job.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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Starkness represents a step in the renewal process of seasons.This stage represents the absence of color, green spaces, and the singing of birds. I relate to "vital roots and dormant grains," " barron limbs,abandoned lark nests," "winter's grip yields to springtime rains." Great imagery. Good job.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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Thank you risktaker. Appreciate the response.
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Comment from RGstar
Lovely write. So strong in imagery, there is no escaping the wonder of it.
Lyrical and entertaining with the repeating line an asset rather than a hinder, which can often be the case.
Great write, my friend.
Best wishes,
RG
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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Lovely write. So strong in imagery, there is no escaping the wonder of it.
Lyrical and entertaining with the repeating line an asset rather than a hinder, which can often be the case.
Great write, my friend.
Best wishes,
RG
Comment Written 23-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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Thank you RG for a wonderful review.
Comment from ravenblack
Beauty rests in what remains- in seasons of darkness, it is the only consolation we have. Leafless trees, gnarled limbs stark and black against a grey sky do have their own beauty as if one is stepping into a black and white photograph. Thank God for those seeds! Excellent poem.
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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Beauty rests in what remains- in seasons of darkness, it is the only consolation we have. Leafless trees, gnarled limbs stark and black against a grey sky do have their own beauty as if one is stepping into a black and white photograph. Thank God for those seeds! Excellent poem.
Comment Written 23-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jan-2015
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Thank you ravenblack. Viva la seeds.
Comment from kiwijenny
Barren limbs ....not Barron
Underneath a living spark rests
Vital roots,,,and dormant grains...I love the vibrancy and dormancy co mingling in nature
God bless
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2015
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Barren limbs ....not Barron
Underneath a living spark rests
Vital roots,,,and dormant grains...I love the vibrancy and dormancy co mingling in nature
God bless
Comment Written 22-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2015
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Thank you Kiwijenny. Oh gosh, your right. I'll have to fix that. I appreciate you pointing it out.
