I'm Gonna
Won't someone listen?54 total reviews
Comment from MelB
Thank you for drawing attention to this rampant problem with youth. The poem was haunting and it covered the different ways that people try to commit suicide. There is a great ministry that travels around the country called the 99 (for the 99 teens that are killed each day). They re-enact the top 10 things that kill teens each day and then minister to the kids that are there. I want to go see it next time they come to town.
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Thank you for drawing attention to this rampant problem with youth. The poem was haunting and it covered the different ways that people try to commit suicide. There is a great ministry that travels around the country called the 99 (for the 99 teens that are killed each day). They re-enact the top 10 things that kill teens each day and then minister to the kids that are there. I want to go see it next time they come to town.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2015
Comment from giraffmang
I am sorry I came to this just now as I have just given out my final six for the week.
This is an incredibly powerful and important poem. I work with teenagers and one of my girls is at high suicide risk. I had to strip out the house for possible sharps and ligatures. I personally have had to break down her door four times and remove ligatures from her neck. Spent countless hours in the hospital waking nights with her after overdoses and significant self harm. She is only 16. Abused by family and friends since the age of 3. pregnant 3 times. It is understandable why she wants to go.
This poem speaks to me and needs to speak to many others too.
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I am sorry I came to this just now as I have just given out my final six for the week.
This is an incredibly powerful and important poem. I work with teenagers and one of my girls is at high suicide risk. I had to strip out the house for possible sharps and ligatures. I personally have had to break down her door four times and remove ligatures from her neck. Spent countless hours in the hospital waking nights with her after overdoses and significant self harm. She is only 16. Abused by family and friends since the age of 3. pregnant 3 times. It is understandable why she wants to go.
This poem speaks to me and needs to speak to many others too.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2015
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You do a wonderful job with the poem and with the message of how important being aware of youth suicide is. We all need to be aware of it and take action.
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You do a wonderful job with the poem and with the message of how important being aware of youth suicide is. We all need to be aware of it and take action.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2015
Comment from CALLAHANMR
Hi Dean:)
Your poem paints the true picture of futility that suicide paints. I like the way you show the sings and precussos to potential suicide. I like the way you show your victim first wanting to carve words or symbols on his wrist, just like losers who join gangs, Then you show the disconnect to their families. and the use of drugs to get high.
The most telling thing is the last verse, the finality of it all when, if anything survives, it is everlasting pain.
Our children need to know all the downsides of suicide and patents need to recognize the sings in time for professional help.
Thank you for sharing both your poem and the awesome Author Notes.
Roger
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Hi Dean:)
Your poem paints the true picture of futility that suicide paints. I like the way you show the sings and precussos to potential suicide. I like the way you show your victim first wanting to carve words or symbols on his wrist, just like losers who join gangs, Then you show the disconnect to their families. and the use of drugs to get high.
The most telling thing is the last verse, the finality of it all when, if anything survives, it is everlasting pain.
Our children need to know all the downsides of suicide and patents need to recognize the sings in time for professional help.
Thank you for sharing both your poem and the awesome Author Notes.
Roger
Comment Written 17-Jan-2015
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Dean Kuch,
Very good message on the suicide problem. There seem to be a number of causes, driving young people to this extreme act of despair, not least being cyberbullying and general bullying at school or in their relationships.
Patrick
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2015
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Hi Dean Kuch,
Very good message on the suicide problem. There seem to be a number of causes, driving young people to this extreme act of despair, not least being cyberbullying and general bullying at school or in their relationships.
Patrick
Comment Written 17-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2015
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Thank you very much for your thoughtful review, Patrick. As always, it is greatly appreciated. :}
Comment from robina1978
Great picture you found that complements your poem very well. Here in The Netherlands it is the same, it also varies per area. A catching title you found. You are very right to ask parent's attention for this huge problem.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2015
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Great picture you found that complements your poem very well. Here in The Netherlands it is the same, it also varies per area. A catching title you found. You are very right to ask parent's attention for this huge problem.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2015
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Thank you, Ine, and it is a growing epidemic in the United States. With the advent of the internet, bullies are no longer relegated to torturing their victims only at school, or while they're out and about just trying to have a good time. Now they can torment the objects of their wickedness and spew their vile hatred from the comfort of their own bedrooms, 24 hours a day, 7 days a week. The poor victim never gets relief, and the stress eventually becomes too much for them to bear.
I'm very grateful to you for your comments and review, my friend. :)
Comment from forestport12
A very important set of statistical information. This poem encompassed, cutting, hanging, and a gun. It created indelible images that hope makes the reader who may have a teen talk more openly with their children. Masterful job.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2015
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A very important set of statistical information. This poem encompassed, cutting, hanging, and a gun. It created indelible images that hope makes the reader who may have a teen talk more openly with their children. Masterful job.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2015
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Thank you very much, Stan, and that was my intentions exactly, my friend. I certainly appreciate your very thoughtful comments and very generous rating. ~Dean :)
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Dean,
Suicide has certainly touched my life. There were two boys (not blood related) who took their own lives. Your notes are informative, although depressing.
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2015
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Hi Dean,
Suicide has certainly touched my life. There were two boys (not blood related) who took their own lives. Your notes are informative, although depressing.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 17-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2015
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I wrote this in response to a friend of my daughters who hanged herself last Wednesday, Lou. I'll simply call her Tiff. So it is a topic that really hits home for me. Tiff was just 17 years old and was being bullied at school and on social networks twenty-four seven because it got out that she was gay. She was a beautiful girl, and it is such a terrible waste.
Comment from krys123
Dean; horrifically believable and quite astonishingly vivid in nature. The imagery was very, in a way, demonically descriptive and also evilly expressive in the sense where it really did seem like it was him doing the deed. It's a sad subject of teens taking their own lives, as in your poem, you sure the state that after he is done the deed is quite a fear of the dark and still feels the pain. Your rhyming quatrains and ABAB were done quite convincingly well, Or your rhyming was neither strained, tense or labored. You have your metering, tempo, timing and movement down during masterful science. Where the reading is very fluid, easy and clear. Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always Dean.
Alex
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2015
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Dean; horrifically believable and quite astonishingly vivid in nature. The imagery was very, in a way, demonically descriptive and also evilly expressive in the sense where it really did seem like it was him doing the deed. It's a sad subject of teens taking their own lives, as in your poem, you sure the state that after he is done the deed is quite a fear of the dark and still feels the pain. Your rhyming quatrains and ABAB were done quite convincingly well, Or your rhyming was neither strained, tense or labored. You have your metering, tempo, timing and movement down during masterful science. Where the reading is very fluid, easy and clear. Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always Dean.
Alex
Comment Written 17-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2015
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Thank you very much for your very thoughtful review here, Alex, which I appreciate tremendously. I wrote this poem because a friend of my daughter's hanged herself last Wednesday. It got out on Facebook and other social media sites that she was gay, and she was incessantly bullied about if for over a month afterward. She finally could no longer take the embarrassment, frustration and pain any longer, and ended her life.
Her name was Tiff, and she was just 17 years old...
Such a sad, sad tragedy. ~Dean
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Dean; that is such a tragedy a horrible tragedy. So said that young people really don't know how irritable they can be when they bully.
Alex
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Very true, Alex.
Comment from BeasPeas
A dynamic poem on an important topic. I've lost friends to suicide, too, either through addiction or depression. No matter the cause it's heartbreaking. Excellent descriptive word choices.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2015
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A dynamic poem on an important topic. I've lost friends to suicide, too, either through addiction or depression. No matter the cause it's heartbreaking. Excellent descriptive word choices.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2015
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Thank you very much, Marilyn. This was written in response to a recent suicide committed by a friend of our daughter's. She hanged herself last Wednesday after it got out that she was gay. She was just seventeen-years-old.
Such a horrible waste of life... ~Dean
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That is a double tragedy because nowadays, the stigma of a gay lifestyle is gone. I truly believe it is a DNA thing, not a choice. One of my daughter's friends hung herself also. I had wanted that girl (an orphan) to relocate near our family, but she was not emotionally able to make that change. Heartbreaking. Marilyn
