The Werewolf of Wall Street
Big business -- it's a dog eat dog world out there...77 total reviews
Comment from daeneam
"What frightens us today is exactly the sort of thing that frightened us yesterday. It's just a different wolf." -- Alfred Hitchcock~
It's absolutely right. When I was a child, I was frightened by dead people, who come back from the dead to hunt the living. But as I grew up, I realized that living people, who are capable of doing bad, are more terrifying than those fictitious creatures. c", Mae
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2015
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"What frightens us today is exactly the sort of thing that frightened us yesterday. It's just a different wolf." -- Alfred Hitchcock~
It's absolutely right. When I was a child, I was frightened by dead people, who come back from the dead to hunt the living. But as I grew up, I realized that living people, who are capable of doing bad, are more terrifying than those fictitious creatures. c", Mae
Comment Written 14-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2015
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Yeah. Me too, c", Mae. Thanks for the review.
Comment from country ranch writer
wolf on wall street is scary to say the least he gets up out of his chair and opens a window and jump out well what the hell, his was headed that way anyhow you reap what you so so you drive off silently into the night
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2015
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wolf on wall street is scary to say the least he gets up out of his chair and opens a window and jump out well what the hell, his was headed that way anyhow you reap what you so so you drive off silently into the night
Comment Written 14-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2015
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Thanks for your review, CRW. Much obliged. :)
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hope you like my gargoyle story it is the take of you, mikey and wacky
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I don't believe I've read that yet, Country. But, I'll have to check to be sure. I read and review so dang much here, LOL... :P
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awe you are so sweet
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Hah, well, I'm glad you think so, Ranchy. There are a lot of folks here who don't, LOL.
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some people don't like me but oh well it is a free country, I am just so loveable
Comment from krys123
Dean; Ah yes, I've seen the movie by Martin Scorsese and it was very good and you've done an excellent job in writing this horror story. Very intriguing, and with the use of your multi-alliteration's (mucronate, meticulously manicured fingernail) that added to the excitement, and quite alluring is your writing from the beginning to the end. One can be more descriptive and expressive in your imagery than you were, from right down to the light hairs on his body, to the extreme sweat of Mr. Gleason. Your pictures were outstanding and ominous and works really well to represent your story. You must draft this elsewhere and then paste it? Well which anyway you doing you do it excellently. I'm very impressed with your working can't wait for your book to come out of the anthology. Thank you for sharing and posting and may your future endeavors be as good as this one.
Alex
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Dean; Ah yes, I've seen the movie by Martin Scorsese and it was very good and you've done an excellent job in writing this horror story. Very intriguing, and with the use of your multi-alliteration's (mucronate, meticulously manicured fingernail) that added to the excitement, and quite alluring is your writing from the beginning to the end. One can be more descriptive and expressive in your imagery than you were, from right down to the light hairs on his body, to the extreme sweat of Mr. Gleason. Your pictures were outstanding and ominous and works really well to represent your story. You must draft this elsewhere and then paste it? Well which anyway you doing you do it excellently. I'm very impressed with your working can't wait for your book to come out of the anthology. Thank you for sharing and posting and may your future endeavors be as good as this one.
Alex
Comment Written 14-Jan-2015
Comment from vfbryant
What impresses me most as I read this piece is the description. Whether it's a scene, as in 'drab olive cubicles' or the reference to a an action, 'smoothing out his suit coat and tie in one fluid motion', the description was engaging and vivid. What surprised me most was the fact that you may actually enjoy and employ alliteration even more than I do. What fun...'stood sentry atop the structure',demure demeanor',stars struggled', 'prodigious full moon perched', etc. I'm curious. I'm often unaware of my propensity to alliterate in pros and poetry, but reviewers always call my attention to it. I think for me it occurs somehow in my unconscious delight in connecting words that play well together. I'll admit to occasionally using it consciously, but that's the exception. Is it like that for you? I used to tell my second graders that certain phrases provide a playground for the mouth (Myrtle caught a purple turtle), and alliteration is one of my favorite devices toward that end. Enjoyed your piece!
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2015
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What impresses me most as I read this piece is the description. Whether it's a scene, as in 'drab olive cubicles' or the reference to a an action, 'smoothing out his suit coat and tie in one fluid motion', the description was engaging and vivid. What surprised me most was the fact that you may actually enjoy and employ alliteration even more than I do. What fun...'stood sentry atop the structure',demure demeanor',stars struggled', 'prodigious full moon perched', etc. I'm curious. I'm often unaware of my propensity to alliterate in pros and poetry, but reviewers always call my attention to it. I think for me it occurs somehow in my unconscious delight in connecting words that play well together. I'll admit to occasionally using it consciously, but that's the exception. Is it like that for you? I used to tell my second graders that certain phrases provide a playground for the mouth (Myrtle caught a purple turtle), and alliteration is one of my favorite devices toward that end. Enjoyed your piece!
Comment Written 14-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2015
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Thanks for your very kind comments on this story, vfbryant. It is greatly appreciated.
I don't consciously write alliteratively, at least not as often as people think I do. It simply comes naturally, and I do it in both poetry and prose alike. Believe it or not, I speak that way a lot of the time, too. LOL.
Thanks so much again, I'm very happy you enjoyed the story. ~Dean
Comment from boxergirl
A new kind of wolf indeed, Dean. Good job with your horror flash fiction. The plot moved along quick like flash fiction should and then has an engaging main character in Ian. Strong descriptive details and a little humor with the Credence Clearwater song reference. Me thinks we need to hear more from this fellow. What's his past? What's his future? 8-)
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A new kind of wolf indeed, Dean. Good job with your horror flash fiction. The plot moved along quick like flash fiction should and then has an engaging main character in Ian. Strong descriptive details and a little humor with the Credence Clearwater song reference. Me thinks we need to hear more from this fellow. What's his past? What's his future? 8-)
Comment Written 14-Jan-2015
Comment from david28
Ian's confidence and wolf nature comes across well and the hypnotic control of a werewolf is something rarely covered in literature so is particular interesting. This piece could easily be expanded for instance whether anyone knows he is a werewolf and if not how he hides it. Lastly the quotes and images really add to the piece.
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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2015
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Ian's confidence and wolf nature comes across well and the hypnotic control of a werewolf is something rarely covered in literature so is particular interesting. This piece could easily be expanded for instance whether anyone knows he is a werewolf and if not how he hides it. Lastly the quotes and images really add to the piece.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2015
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Thank you for your review, David.
Comment from Neonewman
Well now, this will get one thinking LOL! Great story you have crafted so well and the accompanying artwork enhances the ride you have taken us on my friend. Good luck in the voting and on your first novel.
God bless!
Steve
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Well now, this will get one thinking LOL! Great story you have crafted so well and the accompanying artwork enhances the ride you have taken us on my friend. Good luck in the voting and on your first novel.
God bless!
Steve
Comment Written 14-Jan-2015
Comment from Showboat
Excellent as always, Dean. I wrote a novel about a werewolf called Loup Garou here, and it was very well received, lol. I never heard about the vampire thingy, though. Very interesting.
Okay, is this a site contest or member? If it's member, I'd leave it just like it is. If it's a site contest, just get in there and eliminate every 'ly' adverb you can lay hands on. They're not 'flashy' lol.
All the very best, my friend, I'll vote for this one!
Hugs,
Gayle
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2015
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Excellent as always, Dean. I wrote a novel about a werewolf called Loup Garou here, and it was very well received, lol. I never heard about the vampire thingy, though. Very interesting.
Okay, is this a site contest or member? If it's member, I'd leave it just like it is. If it's a site contest, just get in there and eliminate every 'ly' adverb you can lay hands on. They're not 'flashy' lol.
All the very best, my friend, I'll vote for this one!
Hugs,
Gayle
Comment Written 14-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2015
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I downloaded it Gayle, as one of your free offerings at Christmastime. What I've read thus far is outstanding!
As for the contest, it is a member sponsored one, but I'll see if I can shore things up a bit more, LOL.
Thanks so much for your encouragement and glowing review, Gayle. I am very grateful. :)
~Dean
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Oh, gosh, I hope you like it! Most of the time I stick to as much reality as I can in my series, but once you step into werewolf territory, well, reality is gone. That one and Face Off were my two faves. Can't wait to hear how you like my Loup!
Grins!
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I'll be sure to let you know, Gayle. You can always count on me. Werewolves are my favorites of all the "classic" monster myths. I loathe how stories like Twilight have bastardized the legends and made them some sort of supreme sentinels protecting all humanity. "The Howling", Stephen King's "Cycle of the Werewolf", and "An American Werewolf in London" is more my speed. :)
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I loved the early King, Salem's Lot, the Howling, the Shining. Read everything he wrote, liked some better than others, but it was Misery that turned me away forever. When she broke his leg again, I was outta there.
Scariest book ever written, imho, was Ghost Story, penned by Peter Straub and SK! Outstanding book, and equally great movie!
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That's a very good one, Gayle. I just finished watching the movie (for about the hundredth time, LOL) not more than an hour ago. Ironic, isn't it? :D
Comment from nancy_e_davis
I must say blood and gore does not appeal to me at all Dean but I recognize the talent that you have telling about it. You excel in that department. LOL Well done. What an evil man, Ian. Good luck. Nancy
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I must say blood and gore does not appeal to me at all Dean but I recognize the talent that you have telling about it. You excel in that department. LOL Well done. What an evil man, Ian. Good luck. Nancy
Comment Written 14-Jan-2015
Comment from rtobaygo
Excellent!
The premise of a werewolf on wall street was well executed. Combined with the pictures (art work) added to the posts smooth impact. Great imagery and extremely smooth. Kudos!
take care and stay safe,
Ray
PS: out of 6's
PSPS: What is the definition of mucronate?
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2015
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Excellent!
The premise of a werewolf on wall street was well executed. Combined with the pictures (art work) added to the posts smooth impact. Great imagery and extremely smooth. Kudos!
take care and stay safe,
Ray
PS: out of 6's
PSPS: What is the definition of mucronate?
Comment Written 14-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2015
mucronate
[myoo-kroh-nit, -neyt]
adjective, Botany, Zoology
1.having an abruptly projecting point, as a feather or leaf.
Also, mucronated.
Thank you very much, Ray. I'm very grateful for your review. :)
