Stand Strong
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "A Door Opens"Social pressures threaten a childhood friendship
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Comment from mountainwriter49
Good Morning, Bev
I see you've started a new book! I look forward to keeping up with this one now that I'm retired and have more time for reading. Your chapter well captures the issue of being a teenager. I think it's worse now than when we were of that age. I certainly wouldn't want to relive those years. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Ray
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2015
Good Morning, Bev
I see you've started a new book! I look forward to keeping up with this one now that I'm retired and have more time for reading. Your chapter well captures the issue of being a teenager. I think it's worse now than when we were of that age. I certainly wouldn't want to relive those years. Looking forward to the next chapter.
Ray
Comment Written 17-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2015
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Congratulations on your retirement, Ray. Like you say, now you'll have time to do the things you love all you want LoL. That's great.
I appreciate you taking time to read my chapter. Your review is very encouraging, and I really appreciate that. It's a relief to know that I'm, at least, in the ballpark when it comes to the subject matter of teens and all their timely angst. It IS rough being young these days. You are so right.
Appreciate it, Ray!
Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Genya
Thank you for sharing this part of your story. I thought it would be for Teens as the main character seems to be of that age. The story flowed really well with likeable characters. Good dialogue and the start of a really interesting story. Genya
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2015
Thank you for sharing this part of your story. I thought it would be for Teens as the main character seems to be of that age. The story flowed really well with likeable characters. Good dialogue and the start of a really interesting story. Genya
Comment Written 16-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2015
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Thanks, Genya. Yes, my target audience is YA.
:) Bev
Comment from RGstar
This seems like a filling out chapter, Bev. A nice calming f something to come. I will be hanging on to your curtails this time :)
As usual, your impeccable gift of harmonizing a scene so one becomes totally immersed , be it simple or difficult, good or evil is second to none.
Best wishes, my friend.
Good write.
RG
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
This seems like a filling out chapter, Bev. A nice calming f something to come. I will be hanging on to your curtails this time :)
As usual, your impeccable gift of harmonizing a scene so one becomes totally immersed , be it simple or difficult, good or evil is second to none.
Best wishes, my friend.
Good write.
RG
Comment Written 15-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
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Hi, RG. You are right, this chapter is setting up the conflict and introduction to the character(s). More action in the next few.
Thanks so much for reading and reviewing so generously. Great to hear from you!
Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Ulla
Like it a lot and I think you got a good take on the teenagers and their inter reacting. At times the story is a bit too descriptive. Take care of punctuation. There are places where words have to be omitted.
You have a good story going. Looking forward to more chapters
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
Like it a lot and I think you got a good take on the teenagers and their inter reacting. At times the story is a bit too descriptive. Take care of punctuation. There are places where words have to be omitted.
You have a good story going. Looking forward to more chapters
Comment Written 15-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
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Thank you, Ulla.
Comment from thee-name
Excellent chapter. Seen no mistakes. Interesting story.
I BELIEVE GOD'S WORD, THROUGH MUSIC, CAN WORK MIRACLES, MORA THOUGHT. THIS COULD END UP BEING AN AWSOME EXPERIENCE FOR FOR US BOTH.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
Excellent chapter. Seen no mistakes. Interesting story.
I BELIEVE GOD'S WORD, THROUGH MUSIC, CAN WORK MIRACLES, MORA THOUGHT. THIS COULD END UP BEING AN AWSOME EXPERIENCE FOR FOR US BOTH.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
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Thanks so much taking time to review and send along your generous review, T. :) Bev
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THANK YOU!
Comment from giraffmang
I can see why this is recognised. it is a great piece of writing with a good smooth word flow.
The characters, plot and setting are all well realised with a deft hand. Good role modelling is in place for the youngsters and there is the making of a good relationship there although who will influence who is the interesting dynamic.
Good luck with the rest of it.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
I can see why this is recognised. it is a great piece of writing with a good smooth word flow.
The characters, plot and setting are all well realised with a deft hand. Good role modelling is in place for the youngsters and there is the making of a good relationship there although who will influence who is the interesting dynamic.
Good luck with the rest of it.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
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Hi, G. Thank you so very much for your generosity and words of encouragement for this project. Your insights mean a lot to me! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Joan E.
This work is another example of your vivid imagination at work. I wish you well at reassembling the novel directed at teenagers. I bet you heard your own parent saying "Food is a fuel, not a reward"! "Peanut" is a cute pet name" and "hurting heart" a touching description. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
This work is another example of your vivid imagination at work. I wish you well at reassembling the novel directed at teenagers. I bet you heard your own parent saying "Food is a fuel, not a reward"! "Peanut" is a cute pet name" and "hurting heart" a touching description. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 15-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
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Hi, Joan. Thank you very much for your insights and generosity in reviewing this chapter. I appreciate, as always, the specifics :)
Comment from maggieadams
This is a hopeful piece for teens. I like the values interspersed throughout..our teens get inundated with cultural garbage, so it is nice to see a story that can make it okay for teens to have religion, care about their parents and yet have a modern problem for a friend. Great job.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
This is a hopeful piece for teens. I like the values interspersed throughout..our teens get inundated with cultural garbage, so it is nice to see a story that can make it okay for teens to have religion, care about their parents and yet have a modern problem for a friend. Great job.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
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Thank you so much, M. This review is not only generous but confirms what has been in my heart regarding our young people and this story. I really appreciate that confirmation. :) Bev
Comment from country ranch writer
sometimes you just have to give the other person a way to believe in ones self. everybody needs some body and this may be a great friendship in the makings
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2015
sometimes you just have to give the other person a way to believe in ones self. everybody needs some body and this may be a great friendship in the makings
Comment Written 14-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2015
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You make a very good point, CRW. That's what I had in mind, too. Thanks so much! :) Bev
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Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Mara has very nice parents who trust her. Her friend may not have a stable life as Mara does, but if Mara think Jujee is okay, then she probably is... but Mara will have to be cautious. Well written chapter. I suppose there is a market for teen books that appeal to those who remain true to their faith. Times have changed SO MUCH. It's sickening.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2015
Mara has very nice parents who trust her. Her friend may not have a stable life as Mara does, but if Mara think Jujee is okay, then she probably is... but Mara will have to be cautious. Well written chapter. I suppose there is a market for teen books that appeal to those who remain true to their faith. Times have changed SO MUCH. It's sickening.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2015
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Hi, Phyllis. Thank you for your gracious review. It's nice to get the perspective of other folks on this particular genre. I have felt the call to write for this age group for some time, and decided now is as good a time as any.
:) Bev