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Old Shed...41 total reviews
Comment from Zinnia48
This is really a wonderful story of that shed and your relationship to it. It reminds me of a similar structure that my daughters and I would pass each year when we would go apple picking, Each year it leaned a little more, and then finally it was gone. I actually felt a sense of loss --I was secretly rooting for it to be there forever! Great rhythm and rhyme. Thank you! Caroline
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
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This is really a wonderful story of that shed and your relationship to it. It reminds me of a similar structure that my daughters and I would pass each year when we would go apple picking, Each year it leaned a little more, and then finally it was gone. I actually felt a sense of loss --I was secretly rooting for it to be there forever! Great rhythm and rhyme. Thank you! Caroline
Comment Written 12-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
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Hey Caroline, thanks so much. Your story sounds SO similar to mine and I did truly feel a loss and often look longingly at the spot when we pass by it. Much appreciate your thoughtful review.
Cheers P
Comment from michaelcahill
This truly got to me. So strange as I am one that doesn't cry at funerals. In fact, I buried my whole family and didn't shed a tear. (God, that sounds ghoulish!) I approach practically everything with humor. I think something like this lets me feel hurt or pain without falling apart. Little scenes in movies do this to me too. Not tear jerkers either, just little happy things like dopey comedies where the goofy guy gets the girl. :)) Geez, do you charge for these sessions? Loved this. mikey
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This truly got to me. So strange as I am one that doesn't cry at funerals. In fact, I buried my whole family and didn't shed a tear. (God, that sounds ghoulish!) I approach practically everything with humor. I think something like this lets me feel hurt or pain without falling apart. Little scenes in movies do this to me too. Not tear jerkers either, just little happy things like dopey comedies where the goofy guy gets the girl. :)) Geez, do you charge for these sessions? Loved this. mikey
Comment Written 12-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
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Wow, thanks so much Mikey and I appreciate your excellent review and personal thoughts. I approach pretty much everything with humour and sarcasm but I DO have a sooky la la side, infact I'm an emotional basketcase so I'm a rather strange mix.
I didn't realise there may have been some human parallels in here but reviewers have now brought that to my attention and I can see it clearly.
Now...my payment or charge...why a sixer of course.
*looking*
Ah, thank you my good man. You're paid up. LOL Thanks a bunch
Hugs P
Comment from Connie C
Before I thank you for your very lovely review of my poem, Sweetie, I just had to review this one. I can just imagine you photographing this one minute and crying the next when you see it gone. I love the line where you crept up close to it but didn't dare sneeze, for fear, I assume, of knocking it over. That would be a touch of Closet humor right there.
As always, you come up with something delightfully original to write about, and this one didn't even need a warning of sexual content at the beginning of the poem! I truly enjoyed it and truly miss reading more of your "stuff," my dear. I know you are a busy lady and would love to post more, so we will all patiently wait for when that day comes.
How wonderful to hear from you and see you posting something, a treat for everyone!
Love,
Connie xoxoxo
P.S. Bill sends a hug to you. We both do!
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
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Before I thank you for your very lovely review of my poem, Sweetie, I just had to review this one. I can just imagine you photographing this one minute and crying the next when you see it gone. I love the line where you crept up close to it but didn't dare sneeze, for fear, I assume, of knocking it over. That would be a touch of Closet humor right there.
As always, you come up with something delightfully original to write about, and this one didn't even need a warning of sexual content at the beginning of the poem! I truly enjoyed it and truly miss reading more of your "stuff," my dear. I know you are a busy lady and would love to post more, so we will all patiently wait for when that day comes.
How wonderful to hear from you and see you posting something, a treat for everyone!
Love,
Connie xoxoxo
P.S. Bill sends a hug to you. We both do!
Comment Written 12-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
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Hey sweet cheeks, thanks so much for stopping by to review this one. I really did sense that if I didn't take a photo that day it would probably be gone next time...much appreciate the sixer and thoughtful review as always...I did have some absolute filth to lay on my readers but I thought I better ease them in gently so to speak...after all this is my FIRST post for the new year.
I may save the saucy one for a bit. It is VERY VERY saucy.
Infact, what I call downright Philth haha
Love to you both and we will definitely catch up some more
Hugs Phillippa xoxoxo
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hi P. We all have that serious side my friend and yours is just as enchanting as your funny bone is! I'm with you on the old building thing, so many stories could be had when you visit one. Hmmmmm wonder who did what where in this ole gal. lol
Life gets real as we age. I never considered myself old but lately I'm noticing I don't quite look at life or love the same. I am a big fan my friend and always will be. Your writing inspires, it jolts the imagination and lingers long after the read. Hope you are well. Enjoyed this one immensely. Please say hi to Blue next time you hear from her. Happy New Year Doll! xoxo d
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
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Hi P. We all have that serious side my friend and yours is just as enchanting as your funny bone is! I'm with you on the old building thing, so many stories could be had when you visit one. Hmmmmm wonder who did what where in this ole gal. lol
Life gets real as we age. I never considered myself old but lately I'm noticing I don't quite look at life or love the same. I am a big fan my friend and always will be. Your writing inspires, it jolts the imagination and lingers long after the read. Hope you are well. Enjoyed this one immensely. Please say hi to Blue next time you hear from her. Happy New Year Doll! xoxo d
Comment Written 12-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
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LOL I agree about the stories mate. Yes life is becoming more real as we speak. With the atrocities being performed around the world in the name of some twisted ideal at the moment, we need to take stock and appreciate every damn second we have on this turbulent earth.
Thanks for stopping by...haven't heard from Pixel in ages but if I do I'll say hi.
Lots of love
P
xoxo
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is a very different kind if poem that the author has created with this piece of work. I like thus poem. I must admit that I was waiting fir the punch line that never came. I like thus serious side too. Well done.
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This is a very different kind if poem that the author has created with this piece of work. I like thus poem. I must admit that I was waiting fir the punch line that never came. I like thus serious side too. Well done.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
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Thanks Tom. You can bank on ME for different stuff...but you would have prolly guessed that by now LOL
Hugs P
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Yes indeed 😃
Comment from Ben Colder
Upon the ailing shed my gaze was cast
I captured it amidst its state of wane
Thus leaving me inspired yet aghast
Its character my image would retain.
Excellent poem. I like this best of your stanzas.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
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Upon the ailing shed my gaze was cast
I captured it amidst its state of wane
Thus leaving me inspired yet aghast
Its character my image would retain.
Excellent poem. I like this best of your stanzas.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
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Thanks Ben, I appreciate you stopping by
Cheers P
Comment from livelylinda
jester: I love these kind of poems and you have done a great job with it. These old, ill repair buildings have so much personality and history that they are keeping to themselves, it is inspiring to write about what might have in their healthier lives. Great work! livelylinda
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jester: I love these kind of poems and you have done a great job with it. These old, ill repair buildings have so much personality and history that they are keeping to themselves, it is inspiring to write about what might have in their healthier lives. Great work! livelylinda
Comment Written 12-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
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LL thanks so much, I appreciate your thoughtful analysis and sixer and indeed, these buildings and structures provide so much character and history as they slowly morph into the landscape.
Cheers P
Comment from LIJ Red
I understand your fascination with picturesque buildings of great age, in disrepair.
Your quatrains present the reader with good images and tell the story clearly. Excellent work.
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I understand your fascination with picturesque buildings of great age, in disrepair.
Your quatrains present the reader with good images and tell the story clearly. Excellent work.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
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And a fascination it will remain for many years to come.
I appreciate your delightfully supportive review.
Cheers P
Comment from Dean Kuch
You certainly must have a serious side, Phillippa, and this poignantly penned -- or typed, as the case were -- wonderfully metaphorical poem just goes to prove it.
First of all, excellent use of comparing the ways in which a weather-beaten, rusted and leaning old shack represents us in many ways as we grow older. Wonderfully rhymed throughout, and you've used many poetic devices here to create a beautiful poem.
Excellent alliteration (Precariously perched, Gave up the ghost), featuring great use of enjambment as well to keep the thoughts smoothly transitioning from one line to the next.
All in all, Phillippa, simply an amazing poem all the way around.
Great work! ~Dean
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
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You certainly must have a serious side, Phillippa, and this poignantly penned -- or typed, as the case were -- wonderfully metaphorical poem just goes to prove it.
First of all, excellent use of comparing the ways in which a weather-beaten, rusted and leaning old shack represents us in many ways as we grow older. Wonderfully rhymed throughout, and you've used many poetic devices here to create a beautiful poem.
Excellent alliteration (Precariously perched, Gave up the ghost), featuring great use of enjambment as well to keep the thoughts smoothly transitioning from one line to the next.
All in all, Phillippa, simply an amazing poem all the way around.
Great work! ~Dean
Comment Written 12-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
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Hey Dean, thanks so much. To be honest I hadn't even thought of the human parallels, I was more concerned with the poor bloody shed LOL
I very much appreciate you stopping by.
Cheers P
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You're very welcome, Phillippa. :)
Comment from emrpoems
i myself fell nostalgic when I pass an abandoned home engulfed in vines and showing signs of vandalism. My mind envisages the home in earlier days with all the warmth and love and un and children running. And then I face the reality of what it has become.
Well done in quatrains with abab rhymes and end rhyme couplet
well metered and good rhythm
Excellent enjambment
Superb presentation
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
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i myself fell nostalgic when I pass an abandoned home engulfed in vines and showing signs of vandalism. My mind envisages the home in earlier days with all the warmth and love and un and children running. And then I face the reality of what it has become.
Well done in quatrains with abab rhymes and end rhyme couplet
well metered and good rhythm
Excellent enjambment
Superb presentation
Comment Written 12-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
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Sounds like there is a following out there for these delightful old structures that are slowly morphing into the landscape.
I appreciate your charming review.
Cheers P
