Life, Love, and Other Disasters
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Shall I sing?"A collection of poems on these themes
30 total reviews
Comment from DR DIP
That is one beautiful poem Steve its worth all the accolades you have received for it This should be a shoe in to win any valentine poem contest. I really enjoyed reading it. I wish I had a six left. The flow is perfect.
dip
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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That is one beautiful poem Steve its worth all the accolades you have received for it This should be a shoe in to win any valentine poem contest. I really enjoyed reading it. I wish I had a six left. The flow is perfect.
dip
Comment Written 15-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2017
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Hi, Dip. Where did you dig this one up from - it dates back to the valentine's Contest two years ago - and no, no prizes in sight. No 'surprize' either! It's going in my book, though. I'm lurching through the self-publishing process now.
Steve
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not like many others on this sight i delve through favoutrite poets profiles i don't give a rats if its only worth 2 cents its the quality of the poem I look for
member cent pumps don't faze me
good luck with the book
dip
Comment from mauidux1963
I can see why this poem isso highly regarded on this site. I hope you shared this with a very special person.....and you caught them when they swooned!! ;) Great job sir! I especially like the strong ending line...." In the great ship of life you are both rudder and keel". Aren't we all looking to book passage on THAT ship?
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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I can see why this poem isso highly regarded on this site. I hope you shared this with a very special person.....and you caught them when they swooned!! ;) Great job sir! I especially like the strong ending line...." In the great ship of life you are both rudder and keel". Aren't we all looking to book passage on THAT ship?
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015
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Thanks for the kind words - I managed second place with this one.
Let'a all hope for a long and happy voyage.
Steve
Comment from BeasPeas
Congratulations on your win for this contest. Your poem is wonderfully well written. I enjoyed reading it so much. Passionate and descriptive. A love story to be proud of. Good job. Marilyn/BeasPeas
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2015
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Congratulations on your win for this contest. Your poem is wonderfully well written. I enjoyed reading it so much. Passionate and descriptive. A love story to be proud of. Good job. Marilyn/BeasPeas
Comment Written 19-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2015
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Thank you - not a win, but second place... Glad you enjoyed.
Steve
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Hi Steve. Second place is still a win for your lovely poem. Marilyn
Comment from flamingstar
Wow...that's a classic for the poetry books. How did I miss it?? I've written one of these so I know what a challenge they are, but this is incredible - nothing forced, redundant, awkward...it all fits together perfectly.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2015
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Wow...that's a classic for the poetry books. How did I miss it?? I've written one of these so I know what a challenge they are, but this is incredible - nothing forced, redundant, awkward...it all fits together perfectly.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2015
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Thank you!
yes, it's a challenging form - Thank goodness there ere no more verses because I was right out of rhyme!
Steve
Comment from Tatarka2
This is just superb. I can see why you were chosen as the Author of the Year. My sincere congratulations. This was not only lovely and lyrical, it was such a beautiful tribute to your wife as well. As far as I can see, it follows all of the instructions completely, and reads in such a musical, gentle way, This poem seems to me to be a perfect example of "not too many words, and not too few." You have said exactly what you wanted to say, following all the "rules" of this contest, and created a piece of beauty at the same time. So well done.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
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This is just superb. I can see why you were chosen as the Author of the Year. My sincere congratulations. This was not only lovely and lyrical, it was such a beautiful tribute to your wife as well. As far as I can see, it follows all of the instructions completely, and reads in such a musical, gentle way, This poem seems to me to be a perfect example of "not too many words, and not too few." You have said exactly what you wanted to say, following all the "rules" of this contest, and created a piece of beauty at the same time. So well done.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
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Thank you so much for the great review and the six stars - much appreciated.
Author of the Year - what a great surprise to start off 2015 - I even get a real trophy!
Steve
Comment from Drew Delaney
Well done. I love the Rondeau Redouble and of course, other forms with repetitive lines. You did a swell job, I could hardly notice the transition of lines. Keep up the great work. Drew
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2015
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Well done. I love the Rondeau Redouble and of course, other forms with repetitive lines. You did a swell job, I could hardly notice the transition of lines. Keep up the great work. Drew
Comment Written 13-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2015
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Thanks, Drew - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from Irish Rain
'the sky high soprano to my booming bass'...now how beautiful is that? And it describes the man-woman relationship flawlessly...also a beautiful form you chose to write this in!
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2015
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'the sky high soprano to my booming bass'...now how beautiful is that? And it describes the man-woman relationship flawlessly...also a beautiful form you chose to write this in!
Comment Written 13-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2015
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Thanks again for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from MelB
Beautifully written, good flow. I like your a handful of trumps to the king and ace and sky high soprano to my booming bass.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2015
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Beautifully written, good flow. I like your a handful of trumps to the king and ace and sky high soprano to my booming bass.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2015
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Thanks, Mel!
Steve
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
When I did the course and learnt about the Rondeau redouble it was my favourite for a time, but I don't think I ever wrote one as nice as this one, Steve. It is perfect for Valentine's Day, so sweetly romantic, and the visions are bliss. Giddy
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
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When I did the course and learnt about the Rondeau redouble it was my favourite for a time, but I don't think I ever wrote one as nice as this one, Steve. It is perfect for Valentine's Day, so sweetly romantic, and the visions are bliss. Giddy
Comment Written 12-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
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Giddy, thanks for the great review.
Steve
Comment from Spitfire
This is true musicality, one several differences between prose and poetry. The craftsmanship is clear. Love the metaphors in the last stanza. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
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This is true musicality, one several differences between prose and poetry. The craftsmanship is clear. Love the metaphors in the last stanza. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2015
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Thank you.
One of my concerns was that I mixed those metaphors up too much, so it's good to hear you enjoyed them.
Steve
