Crystal Clear
1-6-1 rhyming21 total reviews
Comment from MSJVClarke
The title was intrigueing certainly seduced me to read this great 1-6-1 poem. The words rhymed as required and the syllable structure was correct. The poem definitely fit the title. It was a shocking poem but a very bold statement and unfortunately too true to our society today.
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The title was intrigueing certainly seduced me to read this great 1-6-1 poem. The words rhymed as required and the syllable structure was correct. The poem definitely fit the title. It was a shocking poem but a very bold statement and unfortunately too true to our society today.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2015
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
I see where you are going with this though it is a little vague - the first line. Methylated Spirits maybe? If so it is a good entry and I wish you good luck in the contest. Great picture. Warm regards Dorothy x
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I see where you are going with this though it is a little vague - the first line. Methylated Spirits maybe? If so it is a good entry and I wish you good luck in the contest. Great picture. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 03-Jan-2015
Comment from Walu Feral
A very good statement and I wish more young and some not so young would read this and the streets might be a safer place to walk. Good luck in the comp. Cheers Fez
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A very good statement and I wish more young and some not so young would read this and the streets might be a safer place to walk. Good luck in the comp. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 03-Jan-2015
Comment from adewpearl
effective pairing of illustration and poem, which is in excellent 1/6/1 syllable count for this contest
strong end-line rhyming
a compelling message
good alliteration in crystal clear, and clever play on words in that title too
Brooke
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effective pairing of illustration and poem, which is in excellent 1/6/1 syllable count for this contest
strong end-line rhyming
a compelling message
good alliteration in crystal clear, and clever play on words in that title too
Brooke
Comment Written 03-Jan-2015
Comment from Jackarrie
meth
I seek you with each breath
death
A brilliant entry into the 1-6-1 contest. It has a very good warning to it, if only it was heeded.
Good luck in the contest. Mary
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meth
I seek you with each breath
death
A brilliant entry into the 1-6-1 contest. It has a very good warning to it, if only it was heeded.
Good luck in the contest. Mary
Comment Written 03-Jan-2015
Comment from nordicgirl
It would be most difficult to ever match the truth and impact of this short piece. The rhyme is natural and the words are devastating. Perfect presentation. I would be astonished if this did not win. But ... there is a puppy picture...
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It would be most difficult to ever match the truth and impact of this short piece. The rhyme is natural and the words are devastating. Perfect presentation. I would be astonished if this did not win. But ... there is a puppy picture...
Comment Written 03-Jan-2015
Comment from giraffmang
This is a great entry into the 1-6-1 competition.
Clearly depicts the dependency / addiction to the drug and the ultimate price, end journey.
Very well done
Good luck in the competition.
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This is a great entry into the 1-6-1 competition.
Clearly depicts the dependency / addiction to the drug and the ultimate price, end journey.
Very well done
Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2015
Comment from Carole Rosa
To the author of "Crystal Clear, meth, I seek you with each breath, death" I'm well aware of the seriousness of meth. My daughters did cocaine, crack and heroin. Neither did meth. I belong to a support group called Families Anonymous and ten sets of parents have lost ten young men, who have died from an over dose. Great presentation. Carole
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To the author of "Crystal Clear, meth, I seek you with each breath, death" I'm well aware of the seriousness of meth. My daughters did cocaine, crack and heroin. Neither did meth. I belong to a support group called Families Anonymous and ten sets of parents have lost ten young men, who have died from an over dose. Great presentation. Carole
Comment Written 03-Jan-2015
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is a striking and dramatic message, delivered in just eight syllables. Form and syllable count are correct, with rhymes that are not trite.(I'm sorry about your friends.) Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
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This is a striking and dramatic message, delivered in just eight syllables. Form and syllable count are correct, with rhymes that are not trite.(I'm sorry about your friends.) Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 03-Jan-2015
Comment from Neonewman
Excellent entry for this wonderful little 1-6-1 contest. Well crafted and the artwork above speaks volumes. Hard to tell a story with such few strokes.
Great job.
God bless!
Steve
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Excellent entry for this wonderful little 1-6-1 contest. Well crafted and the artwork above speaks volumes. Hard to tell a story with such few strokes.
Great job.
God bless!
Steve
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2015
