The FanStory Redemption
A Short Story32 total reviews
Comment from Nosha17
You have made me cough and splutter (I am still sick with terrible cough)I laughed that much! I loved how you were delighted at being called insane!! I am so glad your story pokes fun at the shortcomings of fanstory, true satire. Delightfully creative, very funny and most enjoyable. Faye
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You have made me cough and splutter (I am still sick with terrible cough)I laughed that much! I loved how you were delighted at being called insane!! I am so glad your story pokes fun at the shortcomings of fanstory, true satire. Delightfully creative, very funny and most enjoyable. Faye
Comment Written 02-Jan-2015
Comment from Lovinia
Happy New Year Mikey!!
You know what absinthe did to van Cough?? ... made him paint better, yeah ... same for cold remedies ... creates genius. Donna is such an excellent critic ... she should be reviewing and earning dollars so you can post even more often. Oh yeah ... Warden Tom wouldn't let you do that ... he's right ... I get dizzy enough trying to keep up with your postings as it is ... in fact I don't keep up with them. Tom puts me in solitary too often ... such torture ... no contact with new posts ... no paper to write on except the toilet roll ... can't review and earn dollars ... just days on end of drivelling and muttering to myself. He won't even let me PM!!! He released me for the New Year ... on condition I review more of your posts ... do you have him in your pocket or whot?
Well this is really insane ... of course I might have a bias in that area. No one writes insane like you do Mikey... honestly. It used to be easy to spot the spag ... you've improved so much I can hardly ever find any. I've enjoyed this and am so pleased you included that excellent pome ... hehehe, had me chuckling. Great work and I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Hugs - Lovi xoxoxo
PS I think I'm a Lifer also.
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Happy New Year Mikey!!
You know what absinthe did to van Cough?? ... made him paint better, yeah ... same for cold remedies ... creates genius. Donna is such an excellent critic ... she should be reviewing and earning dollars so you can post even more often. Oh yeah ... Warden Tom wouldn't let you do that ... he's right ... I get dizzy enough trying to keep up with your postings as it is ... in fact I don't keep up with them. Tom puts me in solitary too often ... such torture ... no contact with new posts ... no paper to write on except the toilet roll ... can't review and earn dollars ... just days on end of drivelling and muttering to myself. He won't even let me PM!!! He released me for the New Year ... on condition I review more of your posts ... do you have him in your pocket or whot?
Well this is really insane ... of course I might have a bias in that area. No one writes insane like you do Mikey... honestly. It used to be easy to spot the spag ... you've improved so much I can hardly ever find any. I've enjoyed this and am so pleased you included that excellent pome ... hehehe, had me chuckling. Great work and I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Hugs - Lovi xoxoxo
PS I think I'm a Lifer also.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2015
Comment from emrpoems
Wish I had a six for this hilarious piece. You said all you did with a bit of humor but You know that most of it is true.
Why are we addicted I don't know. Do you?
Loved it and do have a blessed and happy new year
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Wish I had a six for this hilarious piece. You said all you did with a bit of humor but You know that most of it is true.
Why are we addicted I don't know. Do you?
Loved it and do have a blessed and happy new year
Comment Written 02-Jan-2015
Comment from bob cullen
I've spent years searching for the source of inspiration. I considered drugs, but the headache pills did nothing. I tried prayer, again to no avail. Drinking too failed, all that coke just made for stomach pains.
Could you please provide more info on the cold remedy recipe.
Seriously this is a fun write
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I've spent years searching for the source of inspiration. I considered drugs, but the headache pills did nothing. I tried prayer, again to no avail. Drinking too failed, all that coke just made for stomach pains.
Could you please provide more info on the cold remedy recipe.
Seriously this is a fun write
Comment Written 02-Jan-2015
Comment from Tellis
An excellent story and I enjoyed every bit of it. I also liked your wife's reaction to the story. Hmmm-cold medicine huh? Good luck.
Tellis
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An excellent story and I enjoyed every bit of it. I also liked your wife's reaction to the story. Hmmm-cold medicine huh? Good luck.
Tellis
Comment Written 01-Jan-2015
Comment from Gloria ....
This is terrifically funny, Mikey. See how I included that awesomely bad adverb even though Stephen King told us the road to hell is paved with them so he could keep them all for himself? No FanStory Redemption here. It's a wordy life sentence with plenty of comma splices.
Oh dear, felony hyperbole is the second worst criminal offence right after maniacal metaphors.
Smartly written, true, as all satire must be, and it doesn't resemble me in the least. I love these kind of writes though, so keep 'em coming.
Gloria
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This is terrifically funny, Mikey. See how I included that awesomely bad adverb even though Stephen King told us the road to hell is paved with them so he could keep them all for himself? No FanStory Redemption here. It's a wordy life sentence with plenty of comma splices.
Oh dear, felony hyperbole is the second worst criminal offence right after maniacal metaphors.
Smartly written, true, as all satire must be, and it doesn't resemble me in the least. I love these kind of writes though, so keep 'em coming.
Gloria
Comment Written 01-Jan-2015
Comment from mfowler
There's way too many truths in this parody to be revealed in one sitting. For example:
Look here, 5-7-5 about sidewalks. Good topic.
This isn't just a bunch of poets writing a few ditties and having a little talk about them.
Don't you find it strange that within a week of joining this place you are addicted to it?
You see what I mean. Warden Tom gets a hold of this, he can mute you in a heartbeat.
I love your life for hyperbole sentence. I think that would be well worth it.Your hyperbolic description of Sandy Insane proved the sentence was justified.
And the repeated notion that you can't make money out of a poetry book, cracks me up.
I see why Sandy escaped, but returned. Where else can this be expressed: Here I'm excellent all the time. Hell, I'm exceptional a good part of the time.
I'm struggling to remember the plot to 'Shawshank Redemption', just the bit where he tries to escape. So that part of your parody is clearly right. I'm just going to have to presume that you've a good parallel to it here.
A very funny piece which you have to read with care if you don't want to miss the clever detail. Good luck with this and the whole contest, Mikey.
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There's way too many truths in this parody to be revealed in one sitting. For example:
Look here, 5-7-5 about sidewalks. Good topic.
This isn't just a bunch of poets writing a few ditties and having a little talk about them.
Don't you find it strange that within a week of joining this place you are addicted to it?
You see what I mean. Warden Tom gets a hold of this, he can mute you in a heartbeat.
I love your life for hyperbole sentence. I think that would be well worth it.Your hyperbolic description of Sandy Insane proved the sentence was justified.
And the repeated notion that you can't make money out of a poetry book, cracks me up.
I see why Sandy escaped, but returned. Where else can this be expressed: Here I'm excellent all the time. Hell, I'm exceptional a good part of the time.
I'm struggling to remember the plot to 'Shawshank Redemption', just the bit where he tries to escape. So that part of your parody is clearly right. I'm just going to have to presume that you've a good parallel to it here.
A very funny piece which you have to read with care if you don't want to miss the clever detail. Good luck with this and the whole contest, Mikey.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2015
Comment from pattipac
Well, genius, I planting a virtual six-stars on this 'cause my pockets are empty, again! Loved this hilariously, and skillfully written story about a published weirdo named Sandy, that you fell for on Fan-Story. Goes to show anything's possible under Warden Tom's watchful-eye.
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Well, genius, I planting a virtual six-stars on this 'cause my pockets are empty, again! Loved this hilariously, and skillfully written story about a published weirdo named Sandy, that you fell for on Fan-Story. Goes to show anything's possible under Warden Tom's watchful-eye.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2015
Comment from nor84
Peter Paul Rubens is my favorite artist. The possessive should be Rubens's or Rubens' and you'll need to lose the E after the U, Mikey. I think miniskirt is one word.
Remember the commas before names in direct address: Wackydo, Writingmywayoutofapaperbag, etc.
It seems he had a girlfriend who was in to (into) poetry
I don't know whether Treacle of Tears is written that way on purpose. Did you mean Trickle? Dictionary defines treacle as: 1 : a medicinal compound formerly in wide use as a remedy against poison. 2 (chiefly British) a : molasses b : a blend of molasses, invert sugar, and corn syrup used as syrup --called also golden syrup or 3 : something (as a tone of voice) heavily sweet and cloying.
Waldens Books doesn't need an apostrophe -- it's just the name of the store, not a possessive. (They aren't really books belonging to Mr. Walden.)
Clever story, as most of yours are. Have you read King's novella, "Rita Hayworth and the Shawshank Redemption" or just watched the movie?
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Peter Paul Rubens is my favorite artist. The possessive should be Rubens's or Rubens' and you'll need to lose the E after the U, Mikey. I think miniskirt is one word.
Remember the commas before names in direct address: Wackydo, Writingmywayoutofapaperbag, etc.
It seems he had a girlfriend who was in to (into) poetry
I don't know whether Treacle of Tears is written that way on purpose. Did you mean Trickle? Dictionary defines treacle as: 1 : a medicinal compound formerly in wide use as a remedy against poison. 2 (chiefly British) a : molasses b : a blend of molasses, invert sugar, and corn syrup used as syrup --called also golden syrup or 3 : something (as a tone of voice) heavily sweet and cloying.
Waldens Books doesn't need an apostrophe -- it's just the name of the store, not a possessive. (They aren't really books belonging to Mr. Walden.)
Clever story, as most of yours are. Have you read King's novella, "Rita Hayworth and the Shawshank Redemption" or just watched the movie?
Comment Written 01-Jan-2015
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
LOL! Surely this will win BIG! Mikey, you are the best at this stuff. You're going to have a grrrreat year here in the FS yard... you'll be 'da boss' for sure!
doin' life for felony hyperbole, << LOL! Love your brain! :)
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LOL! Surely this will win BIG! Mikey, you are the best at this stuff. You're going to have a grrrreat year here in the FS yard... you'll be 'da boss' for sure!
doin' life for felony hyperbole, << LOL! Love your brain! :)
Comment Written 01-Jan-2015
