Dark Covenant
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "Body Heat/Part Two"The Berwick Witches Series: Book One
17 total reviews
Comment from emrpoems
Great visuals
God use of descriptive language
Good interaction between the characters
Good use of dialogue
Held my interest to the end
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2015
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Great visuals
God use of descriptive language
Good interaction between the characters
Good use of dialogue
Held my interest to the end
Comment Written 07-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2015
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Thank you so much for this fine review.
Comment from thee-name
Excellent chapter. Excellent writing. Excellent expression.
KAYLA LIFTED MEAT ONTO HER PLATE NEXT TO HER BAKED POTATO. "UM, THIS IS DELICIOUS," SHE SAID AFTER TASTING THE MEAT." WHAT IS THIS?"
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2015
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Excellent chapter. Excellent writing. Excellent expression.
KAYLA LIFTED MEAT ONTO HER PLATE NEXT TO HER BAKED POTATO. "UM, THIS IS DELICIOUS," SHE SAID AFTER TASTING THE MEAT." WHAT IS THIS?"
Comment Written 07-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2015
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thank you very much.
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THANK YOU!
Comment from Starlight's Edge
Hi, Amahra. Great chapter
with very good visuals and descriptive language.
Liked to read everything,
particularly the unusual sexual scene.
Matt is a werewolf, right? What about his father?
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2015
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Hi, Amahra. Great chapter
with very good visuals and descriptive language.
Liked to read everything,
particularly the unusual sexual scene.
Matt is a werewolf, right? What about his father?
Comment Written 07-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2015
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thank you very much.
Comment from Eric1
Hi amahra, I am ashamed to admit that this is the first chapter that I have read of your wonderful story my friend, I will now have to go back and read the other chapters even though this chapter stands on it's own merits, these are wonderful strong characters, your use of description is awesome, I can almost picture these two people in my mind. Brilliant!
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Hi amahra, I am ashamed to admit that this is the first chapter that I have read of your wonderful story my friend, I will now have to go back and read the other chapters even though this chapter stands on it's own merits, these are wonderful strong characters, your use of description is awesome, I can almost picture these two people in my mind. Brilliant!
Comment Written 06-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2015
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Thank you, Eric1. I so appreciate you reading and reviewing me.
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It truly was my pleasure Amahra
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Wow! Hot scene! He seems to have turned into a werewolf with those sharp claws, and she didnt' even notice? Or care? Kay is a daring woman. Matt is really the gen. manager at 21? Did his dad retire?
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2015
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Wow! Hot scene! He seems to have turned into a werewolf with those sharp claws, and she didnt' even notice? Or care? Kay is a daring woman. Matt is really the gen. manager at 21? Did his dad retire?
Comment Written 05-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2015
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Thanks, Phyllis. Actually, it was his fangs that he use in the erotic sexual play. She had her eyes closed so she didn't see when he turned a little. No, the dad is CEO.
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Thanks for the clarifications. :)
Comment from Ric Myworld
I woke up this morning ready to catch up on all my neglected chores. However, after reading this new chapter of your story, my mind has drifted off and my body worn to a frazzle, caused only by my imagination's stimulation. Thanks for another fine chapter. :-)
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2015
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I woke up this morning ready to catch up on all my neglected chores. However, after reading this new chapter of your story, my mind has drifted off and my body worn to a frazzle, caused only by my imagination's stimulation. Thanks for another fine chapter. :-)
Comment Written 05-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2015
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LOL Thank you for a fine review, Ric. Happy New Year to you.
Comment from Writingfundimension
Wow, you do write sexual scenes very well, Amahra. This was erotic and frightening at the same time as Kayla, pushed by Matt, goes beyond the limits that she knows nothing about. Great job! :) Bev
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2015
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Wow, you do write sexual scenes very well, Amahra. This was erotic and frightening at the same time as Kayla, pushed by Matt, goes beyond the limits that she knows nothing about. Great job! :) Bev
Comment Written 05-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2015
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Thank you so much, Bev.
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You're very welcome, Amahra.
Comment from Zue65
Well this is really sliding to a bit of erotica and the dance of the familiar spirits which Christians like me don't really want to read. But sometimes the system of promoting one's posts requires us to review other member's post no matter how shocking they are. May God bless you and may Jesus shower you guidance. You have the gift of a writer.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2015
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Well this is really sliding to a bit of erotica and the dance of the familiar spirits which Christians like me don't really want to read. But sometimes the system of promoting one's posts requires us to review other member's post no matter how shocking they are. May God bless you and may Jesus shower you guidance. You have the gift of a writer.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2015
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Thank you, And may God bless you and guide you into doing only what is pleasing in His sight. Happy New Year.
Comment from marijmd
Well a date where his mom cooks and a job to boot - maybe she could eventually overlook this werewolf thing - but having to snuff out your baby boys would be a deal breaker for me.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2015
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Well a date where his mom cooks and a job to boot - maybe she could eventually overlook this werewolf thing - but having to snuff out your baby boys would be a deal breaker for me.
Comment Written 05-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2015
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Thank you, marijm. But don't forget there's a moon cure now. The moon cure will stop the killing of babies. I know it seems a bit confusing, but once I introduce all the characters and bring them together to fight one cause, it will all make sense.
Comment from chasennov
Chapter 9 of the book Dark Covenant The Berwick Witches Series: Book One "Body Heat/Part Two" This is another excellent chapter you have created here. This is what writing is all about; creativeness. You seem to have no problem with this gift. Well done.
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2015
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Chapter 9 of the book Dark Covenant The Berwick Witches Series: Book One "Body Heat/Part Two" This is another excellent chapter you have created here. This is what writing is all about; creativeness. You seem to have no problem with this gift. Well done.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 05-Jan-2015
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Thank you, Chasennov, my dear. I'm really flattered.
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You are most welcome.
