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Black Lives Matter Conclusion25 total reviews
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, lancellot, very well researched and facts presented without an emotional tone. just factual and presenting ideas on how to change the status quo. just like this latest kid shot by a cop, even though they have video of him pulling a gun on the cop, they are still protesting his shooting.
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this is an excellent write, lancellot, very well researched and facts presented without an emotional tone. just factual and presenting ideas on how to change the status quo. just like this latest kid shot by a cop, even though they have video of him pulling a gun on the cop, they are still protesting his shooting.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2014
Comment from S.M.E.Schultz
Wow. Very blunt, to the point. As an outsider, watching events from afar, it's good to read objective content, written in clear language, no jargon: effective and thought-provoking. Very insightful, thank you.
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Wow. Very blunt, to the point. As an outsider, watching events from afar, it's good to read objective content, written in clear language, no jargon: effective and thought-provoking. Very insightful, thank you.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2014
Comment from Spitfire
A lot of fire and brimstone in this--not the religious sort, of course. It was a shock to me about labeling the child to get SS funding! As a high school teacher, I do recall two black girls talking about whose turn it was to get pregnant again! Yes, that brings in more money. But I also remember how supportive a black parent was when I called about their child's misbehavior. The only one who gave me and the dean big-time flack about her son happened to be white! Go figure.
It has to start with the parents being good role models, watching that their children don't mess with the wrong crowd. But peer pressure and popularity is a powerful thing. Scary to think that with the new uprisings, we're back to square one.
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A lot of fire and brimstone in this--not the religious sort, of course. It was a shock to me about labeling the child to get SS funding! As a high school teacher, I do recall two black girls talking about whose turn it was to get pregnant again! Yes, that brings in more money. But I also remember how supportive a black parent was when I called about their child's misbehavior. The only one who gave me and the dean big-time flack about her son happened to be white! Go figure.
It has to start with the parents being good role models, watching that their children don't mess with the wrong crowd. But peer pressure and popularity is a powerful thing. Scary to think that with the new uprisings, we're back to square one.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Great ideas here. I agree on every point. I hope someone with power in govt is reading it! How do you get your message heard... that's the problem.
will insure that their kids fail as well << ENsure, with EN.
Kids, who are violent in school, should be expelled << Serious comma error here. The way you wrote it, ALL kids are violent in school. THat's because you placed a comma before WHO. Technically, there should be NO commas here at all:
Kids who are violent in school should be expelled. << Correct.
I noticed that you often break a critical rule. NEVER a subject from its predicate with a comma. You MAY use a pair of commas around an offset phrase, though the one you used here was not correct since it changed the meaning. Here's a better example of where you placed a comma between S and P.
...those examples people show the public, never say anything ...
In the sentence above, EXAMPLES is the subject noun and SAY is the predicate verb. Remove that comma. "People show the public" is a phrase with THAT implied (that people show the public) and a comma is never used before THAT, only before WHICH. The two words have different uses because they create different meanings.
Hope that helped. :)
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Great ideas here. I agree on every point. I hope someone with power in govt is reading it! How do you get your message heard... that's the problem.
will insure that their kids fail as well << ENsure, with EN.
Kids, who are violent in school, should be expelled << Serious comma error here. The way you wrote it, ALL kids are violent in school. THat's because you placed a comma before WHO. Technically, there should be NO commas here at all:
Kids who are violent in school should be expelled. << Correct.
I noticed that you often break a critical rule. NEVER a subject from its predicate with a comma. You MAY use a pair of commas around an offset phrase, though the one you used here was not correct since it changed the meaning. Here's a better example of where you placed a comma between S and P.
...those examples people show the public, never say anything ...
In the sentence above, EXAMPLES is the subject noun and SAY is the predicate verb. Remove that comma. "People show the public" is a phrase with THAT implied (that people show the public) and a comma is never used before THAT, only before WHICH. The two words have different uses because they create different meanings.
Hope that helped. :)
Comment Written 25-Dec-2014
Comment from Ekim777
Our author assiduously swamps us with 'facts' and we get lost in the details. I understand that America, like everywhere on earth is or tends to be a culture of violence. Why don't we admit that our whole civilization is a colossal failure and mankind nurses a healthy, savage instinct for destruction and self destruction. Returning to the text, I like to think that the Black population is the richest and most creative among the American populace even though the streets are rife with potential psychopaths. Civilizations come and go but somehow people survive. -Ekim777
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Our author assiduously swamps us with 'facts' and we get lost in the details. I understand that America, like everywhere on earth is or tends to be a culture of violence. Why don't we admit that our whole civilization is a colossal failure and mankind nurses a healthy, savage instinct for destruction and self destruction. Returning to the text, I like to think that the Black population is the richest and most creative among the American populace even though the streets are rife with potential psychopaths. Civilizations come and go but somehow people survive. -Ekim777
Comment Written 25-Dec-2014
Comment from patcelaw
What I have always failed to see, is how you tear down your community when thingsa like this happen. No real effort do I see in the people wanting to solve the problems, they just want to blame the police. If it had been a black cop shooting a black man would the reaction be the same? Just asking.
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What I have always failed to see, is how you tear down your community when thingsa like this happen. No real effort do I see in the people wanting to solve the problems, they just want to blame the police. If it had been a black cop shooting a black man would the reaction be the same? Just asking.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2014
Comment from Ric Myworld
I don't personally have all the answers, and I'm not privy to information to prove or disprove your details in this chapter. However, I like the fact you are willing to offer your ideas. I do agree that many of the checks given to the black and poor have caused many of the crippling effects. Thanks for another chapter meant to make us think. I hope it does. Great job. :-)
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I don't personally have all the answers, and I'm not privy to information to prove or disprove your details in this chapter. However, I like the fact you are willing to offer your ideas. I do agree that many of the checks given to the black and poor have caused many of the crippling effects. Thanks for another chapter meant to make us think. I hope it does. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
Comment from emrpoems
This is a well written commentary on the plight of underprivileged communities.
you make good arguments and suggestions and provoke us to think.
You are convinced in your arguments and that must be applauded
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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This is a well written commentary on the plight of underprivileged communities.
you make good arguments and suggestions and provoke us to think.
You are convinced in your arguments and that must be applauded
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Thank you very much
Comment from mikemagine
I agree with you again, Lancellot. You make points that are very tough, if not impossible, to fend off. Responsibility. The family unit. Education. Key, vital elements of contributing to the improvement of society.
Of course, in every person there is a crooked side that wants the "Easier, softer way." A free lunch. I've been there, done that. Doesn't work, most of the time...
Sure, a LOT of us would like our version/s of the so-called perfect world where there's a God who dances to our tune! Well, He's not about to do that...The wheels of justice....
I'm assuming your an attorney...I'm guessing there are days when you wish you hadn't gotten out of bed...
Anyway, whether you write fiction or non, you communicate with plenty of depth and talent.
Happy Holidays!
Mike
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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I agree with you again, Lancellot. You make points that are very tough, if not impossible, to fend off. Responsibility. The family unit. Education. Key, vital elements of contributing to the improvement of society.
Of course, in every person there is a crooked side that wants the "Easier, softer way." A free lunch. I've been there, done that. Doesn't work, most of the time...
Sure, a LOT of us would like our version/s of the so-called perfect world where there's a God who dances to our tune! Well, He's not about to do that...The wheels of justice....
I'm assuming your an attorney...I'm guessing there are days when you wish you hadn't gotten out of bed...
Anyway, whether you write fiction or non, you communicate with plenty of depth and talent.
Happy Holidays!
Mike
Comment Written 24-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Thank you very much
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Sure thing!
Mike
Comment from Kingsland
Everyone of those problems comes back to one thing, income. There are single parent homes in this country everywhere at every race and religion. What makes a difference in any of them is how much money is available to those single family homes. Just the idea of bringing in a second parent does little to help a poor person. It's just one more mouth to feed. Also the lack of education has to do directly with income as well. Those single parent homes that have enough money don't have all of the problems that a low income home has. So income has more to do with solving the problems in a home that anything else does.
I won't go into the part of the judicial system with you, because You already know we are looking at this problem differently.
As far as education goes. Once again that comes back to income. A home with enough income will live in a better neighborhood and have the ability to send one's child to better schools and or college. I still think you're totally wrong in how you perceive these problems. Any poor neighborhood will have high crimes rates as opposed to places with a decent income and better living conditions. So it's not single family homes that are the problem. It's low income that's the problem...
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Everyone of those problems comes back to one thing, income. There are single parent homes in this country everywhere at every race and religion. What makes a difference in any of them is how much money is available to those single family homes. Just the idea of bringing in a second parent does little to help a poor person. It's just one more mouth to feed. Also the lack of education has to do directly with income as well. Those single parent homes that have enough money don't have all of the problems that a low income home has. So income has more to do with solving the problems in a home that anything else does.
I won't go into the part of the judicial system with you, because You already know we are looking at this problem differently.
As far as education goes. Once again that comes back to income. A home with enough income will live in a better neighborhood and have the ability to send one's child to better schools and or college. I still think you're totally wrong in how you perceive these problems. Any poor neighborhood will have high crimes rates as opposed to places with a decent income and better living conditions. So it's not single family homes that are the problem. It's low income that's the problem...
Comment Written 23-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 24-Dec-2014
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Thank you very much
