Comment from Adri7enne

Excellent

"Ess RISES a head of steam." RISES? vs. RAISES?

"Ess is trying to find a missing woman, Daisy, but IN WAS ENCHANTED...." something missing or extra here.

"Sandals were not going to be up to the job when she started kicking arse." Ha ha ha! She's a riot!

Oh, so witchy! You would surround yourself with tough, witchy women if you could, wouldn't you, snod? LOL! It's evident you'd be cheering for their side. Nice! I'm having fun with your story. Next!

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014

There's a comment there about my marriage, but I'm too cowardly to make it. Thanks for the review

reply by Adri7enne on 11-Dec-2014

Poor darling! It can't be that she's beating you. Maybe that's the problem, uh? LOL! Don't worry. I don't take anything you say seriously.

Comment from CR Delport

Excellent

Yeah, I can tell you, it is hard to kick ass in sandals :) Snodlander, this is another fine crafted chapter that has everything to make it an interesting read. I spotted no obvious errors.
Have a great day.
Christelle.

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014

You're very kind, thanks, though I suspect Ess is the sort of woman that can give a right kicking in barefeet if she were sufficiently motivated

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

So Ess is going to go it alone. No help from Dorothy or from her honey.

I like your characters, Snodlander. There's whimsy with them, but also a groundbase of reality. She's afraid he'll mount his white steed and follow after her.

Like this chapter.

 Comment Written 11-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014

Thank you. Yes, sometimes a woman's got to do what a woman's got to do. Glad you liked it