Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Exceptional

Excellent is all I can say. I normally stay away from horror poems b/c they are too over the top. However, this one was enjoyable. The rhyme is great. The flow is super. I do not know what "chthonian" is, but I do not care. I know it has to do with some kind of underworld or evil spirits. Your artwork interspersed with the text is enjoyable. Good job and congrats on the awards.

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2014

You would be right about the word chthoniann, janny pan. H.P. Lovecraft once wrote an entire series of stories about these neterworld spiits. I am very happy you're taking a chance and broadening your horizons a bit by delving into the horror genre. Ii hope I've had something to do with that. Thanks so much for your wonderful comments and exceptional rating. All are sincerely appreciated. ~Dean

reply by Jannypan (Jan) on 11-Dec-2014

You are right. I am trying to read different genres. Yours are always exceptional.

Comment from rtobaygo

Exceptional

Hello;

Great rhyme, progression and and imagery woven a midst a haunting moment of revenge from a wronged soul. Excellent choice of pictures! Where do they come from?

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014

Thanks for the great feedback and exceptional rating, Ray. As always, i sincerely appreciate it! :)

~Dean

Comment from Dutchie

Exceptional

Again an exceptional poe, as always. Great presentation and storyline. Your imagination is very vividly. I can see it happen... Wonderful flow and unforced rhyme. It's evening here in Holland. I'm sure I'll have pleasant dreams...eh screams I meant. ... Just great!!! Fia

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014

Thanks so much for such a wonderful review, Dutchie. You have made my week, my friend, and I truly appreciate it! :)

~Dean

Comment from RGstar

Excellent

Dean, once again a great write. Perhaps a little work to smooth the flow making sure the graphics never overpower the words, which you are great and maintaining a good balance.
Once again, the positive for me , you are a born inovator. Like myself you thrive to do the best you can each work, not because of competition with others, but a marker for yourself and whoever may read. That is why there is strength and depth in your work. You put in blood sweat and tears to achieve the best you can...if this is done, you will always have results with no worries of who may like or dislike. If you keep on creating to the best of your ability, your work will be admired, regardless of the subject matter.

Another great story my friend, and this is where your strength is, for striping away the graphics you must command that respect...which you do.

The graphics are part of the make up of the story, and I think should always be included, from your side, as it is as apple pie and custard, one belongs to the other...but remember, make sure there is strength and depth in both...that is the key.

I love to see effort...and you give that 100%

Good luck wherever success takes you. You deserve it.
Best wishes,
RGstar

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2014

Thanks, Roy, you are very kind to say so, my talented friend. Coming from an innovator such as yourself, and a poet whose work I truly admire, I will take everything you've so eloquently written here to heart.

Thanks so much again. I sincerely appreciate it. :)

~Dean

Comment from mikemagine

Exceptional

This one, imo, is a fine balance 'tween terror and humor. I can't articulate exactly how it impacted me, but it is doggone good, Dean! I'm reading this on Classic, and far as I'm concerned, this WORKS!

You ARE a pro, Dean, and in my humble opinion, you're better than a LOT of guys who are called "pro." It'd be very cool to see you become a heavy hitter like McCammon, Campbell, and others.

Peace and God bless!

Mike

Oh yeah...Just rec'd Campbell's Told By The Dead:-) Thanks again, for the tip!

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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2014

Thanks, Mike, and what a wonderful compliment. Coming from a fellow horror aficionado, I'm honored because I'm sure you, like me, read a lot of terror tales.

I'm glad you enjoyed this, and I appreciate the wonderful things you said even more than the six star rating.

Thanks again, Mike, most sincerely. ~Dean

reply by mikemagine on 10-Dec-2014

You bet, Dean. Everything I've read by you has been very well told! You've talents for originality, eeriness, dark humor, atmosphere, etc. - I don't think I've ever spotted any flaws in your storytelling.

Peace,

Mike

reply by mikemagine on 10-Dec-2014

Been meaning to dive into my new Campbell book, but prolonged reading has been tough due to tooth pain. I finally got the "bad" tooth extracted, but now I've got another kind of pain, lol. Tough to get much done...

Mike

reply by the author on 10-Dec-2014

Well, once you start reading that book, you're gonna find it very hard to put down. So, be prepared, heh-heh...

Hope you get to feelin' better, Mike! :)

reply by mikemagine on 10-Dec-2014

Much thanks, Dean. Yes, I expect I'll enjoy the collection of stories very much.

The dentist told me to give him a call if I'm still in a lot of pain, a couple hours from now. Hopefully, he's got some good ideas...

Mike

Comment from JanetRussek

Exceptional

What an amazing piece of work. Great storyline; very compelling. Your writing style is certainly original. I love it. I enjoyed this read very much.
Warm Regards,
Janet

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reply by the author on 11-Dec-2014

Thanks so much, janet, you're very kind. I really appreciate you taking a peek at my work, and I'm extremely grateful for your awesome comments and exceptional rating.

Thanks again! :)

~Dean

Comment from boxergirl

Exceptional

Great story in a poem, Dean. Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned (or murdered). Your imagery is powerful as always, appealing to our senses of sight, sound, and smell. The presentation worked well also and I could see the different colored print. 8)

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2014

Thanks, boxergirl, and I'm happy you got to see the poem the way I tried to present it. My presentations are always a big part of my poetry, and the "New & Improved" FanStory website is wreaking hell and havoc with my formatting for some reason. I expect they'll get all of the bugs worked out eventually.

Thanks so much again!

~Dean :)

Comment from Goodauthor

Excellent

Somewhat eerie; but the story flowed so smoothly, and the imagery was so vivid that I had the feeling I was there in that other time. Since I believe in Reincarnation, it was easy to believe that it all happened in another life. It was the haunting that was interesting. I enjoyed the read.

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2014

Thank you very much, Goodauthor. I'm very pleased to know you enjoyed it. :)

~Dean

Comment from magalbagal

Exceptional

This is just so beautiful, words can't even begin to describe it. It's dark with a cynical ring to it; could job on making it flow and keeping with the ambiance through out the story. Many writers find it hard to stick with it but you were spot on all the time.

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reply by the author on 13-Dec-2014

Thanks you very much, magalbagal, you're very kind. I am pleased you enjoyed the poem, and I very much appreciate you reading and critiquing my work.

Thanks so much again! :}

~Dean

Comment from nomi338

Exceptional

This is absolutely one of the best poems I have read this year. The phrasing, the graphic (How did you do that?). This poem had all of the ingredients that make up a killer poem. I am simply blown away. Fantastic poem!

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reply by the author on 08-Dec-2014

Wow, Nomi. I'm pretty blown away by such a wonderful compliment. One of the best this year...that's saying a lot, especially coming from an accomplished poet such as yourself. I know you read and review extensively here, and the talent on this site is second to none, yourself included.

So, i extend my eternal gratitude to you for such a wonderful review. It is readers like you who make my efforts feel so worthwhile.

Thanks again, very much! :)

~Dean