Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

Getting rather messy. I was hoping Cicero would have been put off by one or the other of our friends, but he is too well trained and had no double earned his position. Can't wait to see the next part... hurry up! :)

By the way. They would NOT have started a fire. You can smell the smoke for miles and they'd be found easily. I suggest you remove that sentence.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2014

Yes, it's getting a bit crazy. Two or three segments before it gets any crazier. This is already longer than the whole book was going to be. I figured since it was in her backyard they'd figure it was Trellitia's. But, yeah, best to eliminate it. I guess I won't have the Red Sea flow down the highway then.... :))

reply by Phyllis Stewart on 06-Dec-2014

ROFLMAO! That's a relief! And don't worry about the length. I still say this third story is the right place to end the book. Anything after it would be anti-climactic. However, you have more in your head, which would make a nice sequel. :)

Comment from Michaelk

Excellent

I loved Julia's speech about God. Wow, what an action packed chapter. I see things turning real bad real soon. Who got shot with the arrow? I hope it was Leo. I think in the next life Vision and Sound deserve a nice quiet happily ever after.

 Comment Written 06-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2014

Wasn't that a great speech. I love her. I don't know how I can follow this, but I'm arrogant enough to just start writing. Hahaha. Two or three more chapters I think. This section is already longer than the whole book was going to be. The first sentence of the next post reveals the arrow recipient. mikey

Comment from Sankey

Excellent

Good chapter again matey. Plenty more excitement coming I am sure. Keep up the good work my friend. Only one spag this time yay! dead and (-I) blinded by her hand.

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 Comment Written 06-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2014

This turned out to be longer than the whole book was going to be. I need to end this pretty soon. But, then, I don't know how in the world I'm going to follow this story. Hahaha. mikey

reply by Sankey on 06-Dec-2014

Good point. had a lot of great reviews for my smoking story. Also a lot of reviews for the Vain Peewee just hoping a few will look at the rest of the book. Might be writing more about our other birds one of the ladies gave me the idea.

Comment from reconciled

Excellent

Hi mike....-smile- great start to an intriguing finish I'm sure coming from the mind of a new age sage . Great read Brother....you the man...big love michael

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 Comment Written 06-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Dec-2014

This was supposed to be a few pages long. It turned into a book. I really like writing this 500 AD stuff. I like the way they talk. Like Sling Blade! I have to do something to end it pretty soon though. Two or three chapters. Then what? How do I follow this? mikey