Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Very good - Perfect iambic pentameter and rhyme scheme. I love the content - the way you make the comparison between Spencer and Shakespeare - clever! Good rhyme scheme and a very good end couplet showing your knowledge of Spencer's 'The Faerie Queen'.
The first line of stanza 2 could be improved and still end with crime - as it is, it does not sound right as 'thought it crime' - but other than that it is extremely well written - warm regards and good luck in the contest. Dorothy x

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2014

Thanks so much, Dorothy. That sat uneasily with me, too, but I couldn't get my brain to work last night. I've changed it now to "No doubt the older man eschewed the crime".

reply by Dorothy Farrell on 01-Dec-2014

So much better - very good - much more professional sounding and not contrived. Good Luck Dorothy x

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

The rhyme scheme is very unusual but effect as my ears are ringing with rhymes. Great rhythm and flows smoothly. I think whatever you choose to write is fine by me as long as you do a good job and that you did. Superb! Les

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2014

Thanks, Les. I appreciate your review and positive comments.Tony

Comment from Jose Saic

Exceptional

Beautiful poem dedicated to great poet, Edmund Spenser 1552-1599. “ sonneteer with interlocking rhyme”
The verses are rhythmic and appropriated to make this tribute.
Congratulations.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2014

Thank you very much for this review and six stars. Both much appreciated.

reply by Jose Saic on 05-Dec-2014

You are welcome.
 

Comment from sbedian

Good

I really liked this one a lot, the only reason I'm giving four instead of five is a spelling error, "Strictured" should be "structured" I'm assuming, but I liked the way the rhyming and tempo of the read flowed, and the emotion conveyed is well received. Keep writing!

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 Comment Written 01-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2014

Many thanks for your review, Saro, and your kind comments. A stricture is a rule that limits or controls something. The Spenserian sonnet is strictured by the additional requirement of the chain rhyme scheme running from one stanza to the next. Literally, I think, 'a narrowing' as in the root meaning of words like 'strict', 'restrict', and 'constrict'.

Comment from gypsymoth

Excellent

Hats off to those of you who enjoy poetry to 'the book'.
You do it very well. I"d rather play by ear just as I play the piano.
Gypsymoth

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2014

Many thanks for your review, Gypsymoth.

Comment from robina1978

Excellent

Thanks for explaining in your foot note what this form requires. It is nice. I like how you used the poem to tell about these forms as well. Best wishes for the contest.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2014

Many thanks for your review, Robina.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

strong consistent iambic meter
excellent use of enjambent
strong rhyming with its chain rhyme quality as required by this form
I love the satiric commentary on the nature of changing art/poetry
such fun to think of Shakespeare as the young upstart :-) Brooke

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 Comment Written 01-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2014

Many thanks for your review, Brooke..