Believe
A poem about believing again.16 total reviews
Comment from TAB_that's me
Isn't it so wonderful to see in ourselves how we have grown. I'm glad you aren't the angry woman you once were. Great faith poem - good luck in the contest.
teresa
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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Isn't it so wonderful to see in ourselves how we have grown. I'm glad you aren't the angry woman you once were. Great faith poem - good luck in the contest.
teresa
Comment Written 03-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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Thank you!! Very much appreciated!!!
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I also have a past. Thankfully, things always happened at just the right time that I never really stopped believing and dreaming. I definitely had my moments but things always happened. If you ever need to talk I'm here and will listen, you're not alone
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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I also have a past. Thankfully, things always happened at just the right time that I never really stopped believing and dreaming. I definitely had my moments but things always happened. If you ever need to talk I'm here and will listen, you're not alone
Comment Written 03-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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Thank you!! Very much appreciated!!!
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi - JPilcher - A thoughtful poem, the writer sums up her life. Good abcb rhyme apart from stanza 2. From a broken girl to an angry woman, to the person you have become now - I am not sure you fully describe exactly what you have become now. But I like the poem - it has a good human touch and is about believing again - that sounds positive which is good. Good Luck in the contest and warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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Hi - JPilcher - A thoughtful poem, the writer sums up her life. Good abcb rhyme apart from stanza 2. From a broken girl to an angry woman, to the person you have become now - I am not sure you fully describe exactly what you have become now. But I like the poem - it has a good human touch and is about believing again - that sounds positive which is good. Good Luck in the contest and warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 03-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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Thank you!! Much appreciated!!! :)
Comment from butterfly4265
I was feeling very positive as I read through your poem, thinking "Yes, she has overcome her past problems and issues!" Your final paragraph caught me a little off guard and made me feel a little sad that in order to overcome these past issues, she had to become someone else, rather than being herself. Definitely something that many people can relate to.
Your poem has good presentation (love the artwork!), with excellent rhyming, pace and emotion. Nicely done and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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I was feeling very positive as I read through your poem, thinking "Yes, she has overcome her past problems and issues!" Your final paragraph caught me a little off guard and made me feel a little sad that in order to overcome these past issues, she had to become someone else, rather than being herself. Definitely something that many people can relate to.
Your poem has good presentation (love the artwork!), with excellent rhyming, pace and emotion. Nicely done and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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Thank you & much appreciated!! :)
Comment from Walu Feral
That is one fantastically beautiful piece of poetry my friend and I wish I had a six left to give it. Just keep on believing and you will be fine. Great work and congrats. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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That is one fantastically beautiful piece of poetry my friend and I wish I had a six left to give it. Just keep on believing and you will be fine. Great work and congrats. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 03-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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Thank you & much appreciated!! :)
Comment from Eric1
Hi Jill, this is a wonderful roller coaster ride of emotions that you have experienced as you grew from a girl into a woman, There is good rhyming and proximate rhyming, and a nice rhythm with a smooth flow, good luck in the contest my friend.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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Hi Jill, this is a wonderful roller coaster ride of emotions that you have experienced as you grew from a girl into a woman, There is good rhyming and proximate rhyming, and a nice rhythm with a smooth flow, good luck in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2014
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Thank you!! Much appreciated!!!
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My pleasure Jill
Comment from bob cullen
This flowed nicely and it presented a most impressive message. It told how reality is so much better than dream world living. Playing the age old what if game.
It doesn't matter haw many times you dream, it does change what is.
That second last line sums it up so well, 'So I'd rather be one who believes again."
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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This flowed nicely and it presented a most impressive message. It told how reality is so much better than dream world living. Playing the age old what if game.
It doesn't matter haw many times you dream, it does change what is.
That second last line sums it up so well, 'So I'd rather be one who believes again."
Comment Written 01-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Thank you so much!! Very much appreciated!!! :)
Comment from Jammer11
A realistic poem that touched my heart. The message is strong. View your past as a positive thing. Accept it, because it makes you the person you. The other small message in this, it could be worse. :) I loved it!
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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A realistic poem that touched my heart. The message is strong. View your past as a positive thing. Accept it, because it makes you the person you. The other small message in this, it could be worse. :) I loved it!
Comment Written 01-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Awwweee!! Thank you!!! Being able to touch someone - just one person - that is my ultimate goal really. Thank you again & very much appreciated!!! :)
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi J,
I really love the flow in the tempo of this journey... sounds as if we may have trod the same path but not in the same shoes. There is a true rhythm telling this story... how many times have you looked in the mirror and captured the change as you morphed into your true self? I'd say you pretty much know by the honesty written within your intent... and if it is only a constructed poem, it would be even more impressive... for this is a very strong entry into this contest... your faith definitely shone through... your last two stanza's made sure of that.
All the very best wishes for the contest.
With our thoughts we create,
the best version of one's self,
James xx.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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Hi J,
I really love the flow in the tempo of this journey... sounds as if we may have trod the same path but not in the same shoes. There is a true rhythm telling this story... how many times have you looked in the mirror and captured the change as you morphed into your true self? I'd say you pretty much know by the honesty written within your intent... and if it is only a constructed poem, it would be even more impressive... for this is a very strong entry into this contest... your faith definitely shone through... your last two stanza's made sure of that.
All the very best wishes for the contest.
With our thoughts we create,
the best version of one's self,
James xx.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014
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It seems a lot of us have ventured the same path, in one sense or another at least (as you sort of touched on with the shoes comment). ;) Thank you so much for this review - it's beyond appreciated and was very nice to read through tonight especially!!! :)
Comment from Trybuck
I believe you're right, let the past alone and focus on today making wiser choices for a better future.. An excellent entry in the contest. Well done, Buck
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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I believe you're right, let the past alone and focus on today making wiser choices for a better future.. An excellent entry in the contest. Well done, Buck
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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Thank you!! Much appreciated!!! :)
