Vision and Sound: Their Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 51 "The Priests Confront Julia & Wolves"Two souls that meet as strangers on earth.
16 total reviews
Comment from Joe_P
The story keeps my interest. There is plenty of action. I wonder if the two wounded priests learn something from their encounter with the wolves. I am curious about why the wolves didn't kill them. Great story!
Joe_P
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The story keeps my interest. There is plenty of action. I wonder if the two wounded priests learn something from their encounter with the wolves. I am curious about why the wolves didn't kill them. Great story!
Joe_P
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
Comment from robina1978
I think I read the chapters the wrong way around. In this chapter the wolves give off warning signs before they attack later on.
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I think I read the chapters the wrong way around. In this chapter the wolves give off warning signs before they attack later on.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Yes! Bravo! I love how Julia confronted the bastards and the wolves tore into them. I guess those wolves came from the little girl's father to protect her, and they did a terrific job!
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Yes! Bravo! I love how Julia confronted the bastards and the wolves tore into them. I guess those wolves came from the little girl's father to protect her, and they did a terrific job!
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
Comment from adewpearl
grabbed his arm, looked back in disgust - good use of non-verbal communication to enhance the already intense emotion of the spoken conversation
You convey Cervantes' fear effectively
you definitely make the wolves sound menacing
strong emotional appeal in that dire closing scene
Brooke
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grabbed his arm, looked back in disgust - good use of non-verbal communication to enhance the already intense emotion of the spoken conversation
You convey Cervantes' fear effectively
you definitely make the wolves sound menacing
strong emotional appeal in that dire closing scene
Brooke
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
Comment from emrpoems
excellent story that has been well developed.
Great visuals
A lot of drama that holds the reader's attention
Even in today's world it is still believed that mental illness is of the devil
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excellent story that has been well developed.
Great visuals
A lot of drama that holds the reader's attention
Even in today's world it is still believed that mental illness is of the devil
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
Comment from Sasha
Leopold and Rastavius are such obnoxious and arrogant men it is not easy to keep myself from wishing them a terrible and painful death...not nice, but I really do not like them.
It seems I got ahead of the story. You got my blood pumping with this one. Now, please, finish them off so I can have a good night's sleep knowing these evil men are finally gone.
Great work with this one. You clearly deserve a 6 for this, but it is Saturday and I doubt many have any left.
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Leopold and Rastavius are such obnoxious and arrogant men it is not easy to keep myself from wishing them a terrible and painful death...not nice, but I really do not like them.
It seems I got ahead of the story. You got my blood pumping with this one. Now, please, finish them off so I can have a good night's sleep knowing these evil men are finally gone.
Great work with this one. You clearly deserve a 6 for this, but it is Saturday and I doubt many have any left.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
Comment from Sankey
Good work mate. Well done and terror and excitement, drama it all abounds. Maybe some sense is all gonna come out of this eventually. No spags. Yay!
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Good work mate. Well done and terror and excitement, drama it all abounds. Maybe some sense is all gonna come out of this eventually. No spags. Yay!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
The attack on the priest may hasten the battle. It will be worse if the priest dies. Julia did right by confronting them. There is less fear when confronting women. Truly, she is the most dangerous though. Great work.
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The attack on the priest may hasten the battle. It will be worse if the priest dies. Julia did right by confronting them. There is less fear when confronting women. Truly, she is the most dangerous though. Great work.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
Comment from Michaelk
That was an excellent twist, I did not see that coming at all. You set me up very well, all along making the priests seem like the agressors but in the end they became the victims. Better be careful, you're making it seem like Julia could be a witch. I'm curious to know who was responsible for the wolves.
Great chapter, very unexpected results.
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That was an excellent twist, I did not see that coming at all. You set me up very well, all along making the priests seem like the agressors but in the end they became the victims. Better be careful, you're making it seem like Julia could be a witch. I'm curious to know who was responsible for the wolves.
Great chapter, very unexpected results.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
Comment from Gargantuan2
Good chapter and I like the sequence of events so far. I do have a suggestion this time:
terrified and unmoving. He pressure on his throat left him unable to utter a sound
terrified and statue-like.(giving a new verbiage from the previous sentence) The pressure on his throat left him unable to utter a sound
Until next time :)
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Good chapter and I like the sequence of events so far. I do have a suggestion this time:
terrified and unmoving. He pressure on his throat left him unable to utter a sound
terrified and statue-like.(giving a new verbiage from the previous sentence) The pressure on his throat left him unable to utter a sound
Until next time :)
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
