Fleas
A sestina40 total reviews
Comment from kittykatnoel
I just became a fan, and so glad after I saw the post about this poem I just had to read it. Well done, so true. I hope to get rid of my own fleas, Perhaps I will start with chalk.
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2014
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I just became a fan, and so glad after I saw the post about this poem I just had to read it. Well done, so true. I hope to get rid of my own fleas, Perhaps I will start with chalk.
Comment Written 30-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 31-Dec-2014
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Thanks for stopping by to review. Glad you enjoyed this one. Glad to have you on board as a fan.
Comment from Treischel
That was a real hoot to read. I laughed and laughed as i read each verse that got more hilarious as it went on. Very clever. Definitely conveyed the experience of writing a destination. Reminded me that i havent written one in a while. And why.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2014
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That was a real hoot to read. I laughed and laughed as i read each verse that got more hilarious as it went on. Very clever. Definitely conveyed the experience of writing a destination. Reminded me that i havent written one in a while. And why.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2014
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Thanks, Tom. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I tried to write a serious one initially but gave up the unequal struggle and lapsed into this bit of comedy instead. I appreciate your six stars. Very kind.
Comment from michaelcahill
This was a helluva lot of fun. Hahaha. It was a ball to read and, YES, I am crazy enough to check it! You actually did all of that. Wow, what a complex thing. Those French! This made sense and was highly entertaining AND you managed to follow all of the rules and nail it! All I can say is, BRAVO!! mikey
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2014
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This was a helluva lot of fun. Hahaha. It was a ball to read and, YES, I am crazy enough to check it! You actually did all of that. Wow, what a complex thing. Those French! This made sense and was highly entertaining AND you managed to follow all of the rules and nail it! All I can say is, BRAVO!! mikey
Comment Written 01-Dec-2014
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2014
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Thanks. Mikey. This was fun to write and a bit of a joke. I might try a 'proper' one some day. Glad it entertained you!
Comment from Whitemorn
Well this is an interesting item.
You stayed true to the appropriate 39 line style while maintaining the repetitive edge.
I have not had the pleasure of reading many of these sestinas, so I cannot truly critique this style of prose, but knowing your skills ... it must be top notch. ;)
I thoroughly enjoyed the flea idea, and the very human way that you spin the writ.
Well done my friend, Whitemorn :)
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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Well this is an interesting item.
You stayed true to the appropriate 39 line style while maintaining the repetitive edge.
I have not had the pleasure of reading many of these sestinas, so I cannot truly critique this style of prose, but knowing your skills ... it must be top notch. ;)
I thoroughly enjoyed the flea idea, and the very human way that you spin the writ.
Well done my friend, Whitemorn :)
Comment Written 30-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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Many thanks, Whitemorn. Glad you enjoyed my poem!
Comment from Dawn Munro
G-U-L-P >> ah...no, don't even THINK about it, Dawn...(*grin*)
Holy smokes, if this isn't the most clever poem I've ever wished I'D written...
I BELLOWED with laughter at this one, Tony! HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHA!!! BRILLIANT!
(Wish I had a six!!!)*********************************!!!
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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G-U-L-P >> ah...no, don't even THINK about it, Dawn...(*grin*)
Holy smokes, if this isn't the most clever poem I've ever wished I'D written...
I BELLOWED with laughter at this one, Tony! HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHA!!! BRILLIANT!
(Wish I had a six!!!)*********************************!!!
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2014
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It's great to hear how much you enjoyed this one!
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Totally confused by the end of your author notes, I was only slightly less expectant of an explanation by the poem itself. (Comment doesn't make sense?) Give me time, Tony, the brain is catching up slowly. I found this one too hard to manage and I take my hat off to you for completing it. I'll take your word that the format is right and I congratulate you on completing such a weird composition, Giddy
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Totally confused by the end of your author notes, I was only slightly less expectant of an explanation by the poem itself. (Comment doesn't make sense?) Give me time, Tony, the brain is catching up slowly. I found this one too hard to manage and I take my hat off to you for completing it. I'll take your word that the format is right and I congratulate you on completing such a weird composition, Giddy
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Weird is about right! I started off trying to write a serious one but then collapsed into comedy.
Comment from amahra
I really liked the poem. Great fun art work that you chose.
And causes some scratching out with his pen,
As if his poem has fleas.[love these lines]
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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I really liked the poem. Great fun art work that you chose.
And causes some scratching out with his pen,
As if his poem has fleas.[love these lines]
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Thanks, Amahra. Certainly an itchy-scratchy little poem! Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Tony,
I'm not familiar with this format, but I can certainly tell a lot of effort went into writing this. I must also praise you for your originality and intelligent humor!
I've been struggling with my writing and my cat has been struggling with fleas - really. I haven't seen any on the paper soaked with ink, but I've been dealing with a lot of dead ones on her bedding. Maybe I should apply some of her medication to the back of my neck and I'll start writing again, lol.
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Hi Tony,
I'm not familiar with this format, but I can certainly tell a lot of effort went into writing this. I must also praise you for your originality and intelligent humor!
I've been struggling with my writing and my cat has been struggling with fleas - really. I haven't seen any on the paper soaked with ink, but I've been dealing with a lot of dead ones on her bedding. Maybe I should apply some of her medication to the back of my neck and I'll start writing again, lol.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Many thanks for your lovely review and six stars, Lou. It sounds as though you're itching to write again! LOL
Comment from misscookie
W0w!
I have no more stars to give.
This is a tough form of poem to write
bravo to you my poet this is some task.
I truly enjoyed your poem most of all the Gin. That was my favorite drink back in the day. LOL
Cookie
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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W0w!
I have no more stars to give.
This is a tough form of poem to write
bravo to you my poet this is some task.
I truly enjoyed your poem most of all the Gin. That was my favorite drink back in the day. LOL
Cookie
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Many thanks for your most complimentary review of my Sestina, Cookie. Cheers!
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You're very welcome.
Have a blessed Sunday.
Until next time.
Cookie
Comment from ravenblack
Sounds like me last night up until 4:00 a.m. trying to get down the right words. And I still itch. The grid in your author notes- a form that resembles sudoku is beyond me. Great humor and wit in making your sestina woes conform to form.
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Sounds like me last night up until 4:00 a.m. trying to get down the right words. And I still itch. The grid in your author notes- a form that resembles sudoku is beyond me. Great humor and wit in making your sestina woes conform to form.
Comment Written 29-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2014
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Many thanks, Ed. It is far nobler to stay up until 4am writing poetry than drinking gin!
