Minnesota Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 45 "The Bridge and River"Poems About and Around Minnesota
9 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
You captured quite an expanse and wonderful mirror image along the Mississippi adorned with autumn colors! I was thrilled by the "lanes of life" description and the "knife" simile. Your alternating rhymes and rhythm are masterful. I don't know if you intended it, but I enjoyed reading the last line of the third stanza as referring to the poets primarily! Many cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2014
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You captured quite an expanse and wonderful mirror image along the Mississippi adorned with autumn colors! I was thrilled by the "lanes of life" description and the "knife" simile. Your alternating rhymes and rhythm are masterful. I don't know if you intended it, but I enjoyed reading the last line of the third stanza as referring to the poets primarily! Many cheers- Joan
Comment Written 19-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2014
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Thank you Joan. Your comments are always warm and welcome.
Comment from rod007
The picture and the poem blend creating a force of color and a magnificence of the fire in the water. A truly great message in this poem that modern technology can with artistic foresight enhance nature's magic. Well done, Tom.
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The picture and the poem blend creating a force of color and a magnificence of the fire in the water. A truly great message in this poem that modern technology can with artistic foresight enhance nature's magic. Well done, Tom.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2014
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Thank you rod. I appreciate the comments.
Comment from Green Lake Girl
You really are a talent combining your poetry with photography. Great photo; the water has to be very still for this type of reflection. Nicely penned.
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2014
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You really are a talent combining your poetry with photography. Great photo; the water has to be very still for this type of reflection. Nicely penned.
Comment Written 19-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2014
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Thank you.. Sometimes i get lucky
Comment from trimple
Oh, Tom
This is such a wonderful piece of writing.
I looked back to see that one of your reviews gave you a lousy rating and was horrified!
You have captured this scene with pure poetry, my friend.
I love the personification of the two arches. They are as you say constructed of concrete and steel, and yet you have given them such a beautiful description as if they are soft.
Love the seasonal references too.
Top rhyming and a stunning photograph to accompany from your wonderful collection.
Kind regards
tracey:)
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2014
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Oh, Tom
This is such a wonderful piece of writing.
I looked back to see that one of your reviews gave you a lousy rating and was horrified!
You have captured this scene with pure poetry, my friend.
I love the personification of the two arches. They are as you say constructed of concrete and steel, and yet you have given them such a beautiful description as if they are soft.
Love the seasonal references too.
Top rhyming and a stunning photograph to accompany from your wonderful collection.
Kind regards
tracey:)
Comment Written 18-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2014
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Thank you Tracey. Yeah, i was bummed by that one. She crisicized the lack of punctuation. Musy be a school teacher. Thanks for your support.
Comment from adewpearl
Stunning photo, my talented friend :-)
solid use of abab rhyming
nice touches of alliteration like in tinted tones
lovely descriptive detail
and a thoughtful tone of gratitude for such beauty
Brooke
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2014
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Stunning photo, my talented friend :-)
solid use of abab rhyming
nice touches of alliteration like in tinted tones
lovely descriptive detail
and a thoughtful tone of gratitude for such beauty
Brooke
Comment Written 18-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2014
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Thank you Brooke, always a pleasure to be reviewed by you.
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
A keen eye for colour, shape and beauty has served you well in capturing this scene in both word and image.
The word choice describes the scene well and to me it almost seems as though a pair of glasses is gazing back at me.
Clever use of rhyme and meter and pairing of complementary words and image.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2014
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A keen eye for colour, shape and beauty has served you well in capturing this scene in both word and image.
The word choice describes the scene well and to me it almost seems as though a pair of glasses is gazing back at me.
Clever use of rhyme and meter and pairing of complementary words and image.
Comment Written 18-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much Shirley. I am pleased , you really got it. The review is wonderful and the ranking is a wonderful acknowledgement.
Comment from patcelaw
Then as I walked refreshed in Fall's brisk air
I stood transfixed along those river banks
Was blessed by scenery unfolding there
In breathless wonder, started giving thanks
This is such a wonderful poem. I especially love this verse
as it so well describes the beauty.
Blessings Patricia
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Then as I walked refreshed in Fall's brisk air
I stood transfixed along those river banks
Was blessed by scenery unfolding there
In breathless wonder, started giving thanks
This is such a wonderful poem. I especially love this verse
as it so well describes the beauty.
Blessings Patricia
Comment Written 17-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Thank you Pat. This mine too.
Comment from Goodauthor
This is a beautiful nature poem, but proper punctuation is paramount to the smooth flow of a poem, commas, and semicolons are necessary to the smooth flow of a poem, and a period at the end says this this end. One you have attended classes for proper punctuation and comma usage, minimalist just does not work. Proper Grammar and Punctuation are at least as important to smooth flow and interpretation in poetry, as are they in prose. If the story is not punctuated, and capitalization is not employed, a run on sentence results, and you will lose your reader.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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This is a beautiful nature poem, but proper punctuation is paramount to the smooth flow of a poem, commas, and semicolons are necessary to the smooth flow of a poem, and a period at the end says this this end. One you have attended classes for proper punctuation and comma usage, minimalist just does not work. Proper Grammar and Punctuation are at least as important to smooth flow and interpretation in poetry, as are they in prose. If the story is not punctuated, and capitalization is not employed, a run on sentence results, and you will lose your reader.
Comment Written 17-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Thanks for your opinion.
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You're welcome.
Comment from gypsymoth
This is an awesome picture. Your words do justice to the
scene, describing God's work and man's work. Very nicely done.
Gypsymoth
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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This is an awesome picture. Your words do justice to the
scene, describing God's work and man's work. Very nicely done.
Gypsymoth
Comment Written 17-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2014
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Thank you Gypsymoth.
