Color-Bind
A rogue poem of sorts53 total reviews
Comment from boxergirl
Well, there you are, Mr. Rogue poet. I have missed seeing your posts. Good job with your "apology" to all your spurned ladies and I wonder if this will be the end? 8)
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Well, there you are, Mr. Rogue poet. I have missed seeing your posts. Good job with your "apology" to all your spurned ladies and I wonder if this will be the end? 8)
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
Comment from michaelcahill
So good to read some top of the line writing. Missed you. With you gone I had to learn iambic pentameter all by myself. Christ, I had to make an EFFORT and put WORK into it. Horrible experience. Loved this. Don't be a stranger. Drop by occasionally and say hello. mikey
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So good to read some top of the line writing. Missed you. With you gone I had to learn iambic pentameter all by myself. Christ, I had to make an EFFORT and put WORK into it. Horrible experience. Loved this. Don't be a stranger. Drop by occasionally and say hello. mikey
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
Comment from Green Lake Girl
Wow; you're back. Wondered what happened to you. I thought you were probably caught up in the tangle of taking care of your Dad.
You mention you were hunting for fresher prey. Does that mean you went to another WRITING WEBSITE?? Aaaaarrrggghh.
Great job with your rogueish poem, as usual!
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Wow; you're back. Wondered what happened to you. I thought you were probably caught up in the tangle of taking care of your Dad.
You mention you were hunting for fresher prey. Does that mean you went to another WRITING WEBSITE?? Aaaaarrrggghh.
Great job with your rogueish poem, as usual!
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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HI GLG. Thank you, my friend. Yes, that was the main distraction, but no other site. In fact, this is the first I've written in quite awhile, but it feels good, so I may see if I can get it back going again.
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Super. Glad you're back. I did the aging parent thing myself. It's exhausting and unbelievably time consuming. I'll bet the writing provides a nice escape.
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That's what I'm hoping, but I'm also not sure how often I'll be here. Today was unexpected. Thank you again, GLG.
Comment from Tatarka2
I've missed your presence on FS and am glad you're posting again. I'd forgotten how you are able to create seemingly effortless rhyme, yet say something so profound, within the same poem. That seems to me to be the case here. I do believe that this "just came to you." I hope you'll consider posting more of your musings as they "come to you." I enjoy reading them.
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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I've missed your presence on FS and am glad you're posting again. I'd forgotten how you are able to create seemingly effortless rhyme, yet say something so profound, within the same poem. That seems to me to be the case here. I do believe that this "just came to you." I hope you'll consider posting more of your musings as they "come to you." I enjoy reading them.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, my friend, for the sixer, and for your kind words.
Comment from trimple
Hey!
Marillion! How lovely to see you posting again...
LOve the rogues tales.
This one is almost an apology to all of the rogues previous willing parties:)
But I doubt his greyness would stoop so low as to consider himself less than the true rogue he is lol
Love the ending...
You suggest that the rogue only sees the colour 'grey' which I interpreted as him not falling into one particular category or another when it comes to his liaison's.
hugs
tracey xx
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Hey!
Marillion! How lovely to see you posting again...
LOve the rogues tales.
This one is almost an apology to all of the rogues previous willing parties:)
But I doubt his greyness would stoop so low as to consider himself less than the true rogue he is lol
Love the ending...
You suggest that the rogue only sees the colour 'grey' which I interpreted as him not falling into one particular category or another when it comes to his liaison's.
hugs
tracey xx
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Hi Tracey. Thank you so much, and you're right.
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You're welcome:)
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Marillion - Never expected you back after such a long break but it's good to see you. Not good to lose good poets on FS - and this is a good poem. Nice content, and good rhyme scheme - rhyming couplet starts each line and the 4th line in every stanza rhymes. It works well! Hope all's well, and as you are your father's carer, I seem to remember - hope he is well too. Keep the poems coming. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Hi Marillion - Never expected you back after such a long break but it's good to see you. Not good to lose good poets on FS - and this is a good poem. Nice content, and good rhyme scheme - rhyming couplet starts each line and the 4th line in every stanza rhymes. It works well! Hope all's well, and as you are your father's carer, I seem to remember - hope he is well too. Keep the poems coming. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Hi Dorothy. Thank you so much, my friend. Yes, caring for my Dad has grown in responsibility, so I have to temper my time, too.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
hey, marillion, I've missed seeing your work so I'm glad you posted this for us to let us know you're okay. I hope the rogue can stay around for a while just so he can make me smile. I'll take his charm, but rebuff his kiss for marriages are broken o'er things like this....
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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hey, marillion, I've missed seeing your work so I'm glad you posted this for us to let us know you're okay. I hope the rogue can stay around for a while just so he can make me smile. I'll take his charm, but rebuff his kiss for marriages are broken o'er things like this....
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, my friend. Good to "see" you, too.
Comment from padumachitta
Hi David. I am so glad to see you here. I have been worried.
And here you are in all your rogueness.
Please don't be such a stranger.
padumachitta
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Hi David. I am so glad to see you here. I have been worried.
And here you are in all your rogueness.
Please don't be such a stranger.
padumachitta
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, my friend. I appreciate it!
Comment from kiwisteveh
Hi, long time no see.
This is a clever piece, an apology of sorts,hwich bounces along with a strong rhythm and an unusual rhyme scheme.
Am I missing something about the colour blindness aprt from the obious difference between seeing things in absolutes or shades of grey?
Steve
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Hi, long time no see.
This is a clever piece, an apology of sorts,hwich bounces along with a strong rhythm and an unusual rhyme scheme.
Am I missing something about the colour blindness aprt from the obious difference between seeing things in absolutes or shades of grey?
Steve
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Thank you, Steve. You pretty much have it there.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear David, Well you caught me with this one. So uniquely you, and filled with a sense of truth with thoughts often unspoken. I liked this, it could be about so many, truth or fiction. Doesn't really matter, for in the moment you made me believe I was part of the black and white as I read it.
Excellent work my friend.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Dear David, Well you caught me with this one. So uniquely you, and filled with a sense of truth with thoughts often unspoken. I liked this, it could be about so many, truth or fiction. Doesn't really matter, for in the moment you made me believe I was part of the black and white as I read it.
Excellent work my friend.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 16-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, Maureen. I really appreciate it!