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About losing my dog Bella
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Zinnia48
I'm so sorry for your loss and understand how grief can stir the creative juices a bit. A couple of issues: in the last line I think you want to say "presence", not present. Also--consider eliminating "past" before day. It would be clearer to say "fades each day", or fades as each day passes. This poem has strength in its simplicity of honoring a cherished friend. Thank you and good luck. Caroline
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Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
Thank you for pointing that out!
reply by Zinnia48 on 06-Nov-2014
Certainly. I hope to read more of your work. Caroline
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