Comment from emrpoems

Excellent

Congrats on raising a happy and well bred family. If every mother did such a fine job we would be having no problems today. love the story

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2014

Thanks you for the kind review. Also thanks for the congrats to me as a mother.

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

I truly enjoy reading about your family.
it makes me smile.
I have wrote about my children years ago but never post it maybe I will one day.
I think the would like to see it.
thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014

It is always fun to write about my loving family. My daughters are special. Thanks for the review.

reply by misscookie on 10-Nov-2014

You're very welcome. writing about my family brings me great pleasure also, have a blessed day.
Until next time.
Cookie

Comment from Sankey

Excellent

Nice chapter. Good read altogether. I love autobiographical stuff. Always a battle putting enough words in here to shut FS up hehe!

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014

I know what you mean. Sometimes I have to scratch my head to think of enough word to have F/S accept whet we write.

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi, Pat,

It's amazing how different kids can be when they all are raised the same. Part of their uniqueness.

Enjoyed the story. Beautiful photo. Thx so much for sharing your story.

Cheers & Blessing
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*.*)

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014

Thanks Jax for the review. Even though they were all raised in the same home, they were different people. As adults they have so many things that are so very alike now.

Comment from boxergirl

Excellent

Another sweet story about your daughters. This time is was Pamela. It is obvious that even though they have differences they were all loved.

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014

I am sure if yo9u were to ask our gilrs if the felt loved they would readily say they were loved very much. As a family we loved being with each other. Many evening we would sitt at the dinner table for more than 1/2 a hour just talking.

Comment from Susan B. Lamphier

Good

Pam sounds like a lovely woman, and it sounds like you did well bringing her up. She had a full, and happy, school life. I hope that you spend more time with her story. She could use more details in her life, to make her life come alive. Do you have any anecdotes about her boyfriend. If she was a cheerleader, did she have lots of friends? Did she slip out the back door and get into trouble? You know what I mean. What you have here is just the first sketch. If she grew up in the 60's and 70's, so many things were happening in the world--did they affect her? Did they affect you?

Please keep working on this, and paint more detail into your picture. Good luck!

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014

Thank you for your review.No she never slipped out the back door to get in trouble. her and her sisters were very chaste in their behavior. Since I had told them about my youth and the problems I had and they wanted to never bring shame on their dad and me

Comment from mmjg65

Good

I do enjoy reading about your life, and the memories of your children as they grew. You have a concise way with words that is elegant in its simplicity.

Your work contains a lot of run-on sentences. There are examples of run-ons with missing punctuation, and comma splices. Comma splices are considered run-on sentences because while they do use commas to separate independent clauses, they lack a coordinating conjunction after the comma (and, or, but, for, nor, so, yet). You can also use semicolons to separate independent clauses.

There are other places as well that could use commas. I would recommend another proofread. Keep on writing!

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014

Thanks for the review. I did some corrections per your suggestions. Thanks for the heads up.