Penny Our First Born
Just a few precious memories of Penny6 total reviews
Comment from misscookie
I love the photo you choose for your poem
she really knows how to shake her thang. LOL
She looks as though she having so much fun.
As always this another great write.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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I love the photo you choose for your poem
she really knows how to shake her thang. LOL
She looks as though she having so much fun.
As always this another great write.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2014
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Thanks for the review. She dances as a relief from the stress of her work as A CPA
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You're very welcome. I'm glad she can release her stress by dancing. Tell her I said she is to blessed to be stressed. have a blessed day.
Until next time.
Cookie
Comment from boxergirl
What cute memories you have shared with us about your daughter Penny. First, the name and address ending with "Amen". Then the spilling of stuff such as perfume and cream of wheat. The "Mama, can I have a piece of toats" was especially heart-warming.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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What cute memories you have shared with us about your daughter Penny. First, the name and address ending with "Amen". Then the spilling of stuff such as perfume and cream of wheat. The "Mama, can I have a piece of toats" was especially heart-warming.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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Thank you for the nice review. I am glad you enjoyed the stories about Penny. Tomorrow I will put up stories about Pam my second daughter. And on Friday I will put up stories about my third daughter. When you read all the stories you will find I have 3 different girls. They each have their own personality.
Comment from mmjg65
You can take up my time with your stories any day. Very nice biographical anecdotes. You have a nice writing style.
Some things I noticed:
"Penny and was born on Christmas day."
"moms" needs an apostrophe
"Penny sucked her thumb for six months and then she on her own quit sucking her thumb." There is technically nothing wrong with this, it just doesn't seem to flow all that well. Could be just me, though:-)
...we were teaching her to say her, name and address..." needs no comma.
"...and tied to clean it up with a wet towel..."
"I asked her why and she said, she..." also needs no comma
I love the story about the cream of wheat. Oh, that must have been such a mess! A wet towel, no less...
And finally, isn't it a strange commentary on our society when we suspect that well mannered, well behaved children have to be abused to get that way?
Keep on writing!
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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You can take up my time with your stories any day. Very nice biographical anecdotes. You have a nice writing style.
Some things I noticed:
"Penny and was born on Christmas day."
"moms" needs an apostrophe
"Penny sucked her thumb for six months and then she on her own quit sucking her thumb." There is technically nothing wrong with this, it just doesn't seem to flow all that well. Could be just me, though:-)
...we were teaching her to say her, name and address..." needs no comma.
"...and tied to clean it up with a wet towel..."
"I asked her why and she said, she..." also needs no comma
I love the story about the cream of wheat. Oh, that must have been such a mess! A wet towel, no less...
And finally, isn't it a strange commentary on our society when we suspect that well mannered, well behaved children have to be abused to get that way?
Keep on writing!
Comment Written 05-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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Thanks fot the review and pointing out some error. I have corrected them all I think.
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I know. just when you think you've cleaned up your work to a high gloss, somebody comes along and says, "oh dear, is that a fingerprint? And what about that smudge?"
I always appreciate when people point out the things I miss, and I'm glad you do too.
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I have a serious eye ailment and quite often I will miss something so I appreciate the pointers.
Comment from emrpoems
She has surely made you proud and that speaks well for her parents. What you put in is what you get out . I can tell that your family meant a lot to you and that you were a good mother aching the children good values. Well written and holding the reader's attention
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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She has surely made you proud and that speaks well for her parents. What you put in is what you get out . I can tell that your family meant a lot to you and that you were a good mother aching the children good values. Well written and holding the reader's attention
Comment Written 05-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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Thanks for the review. Oh, yes my family was and is the most important thing this side of Heaven. My love for my family is only outdone by my love for God and what He means to me.
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Pat,
What a beautiful picture! Is that her hubby?
I can't believe the teacher thought she was abused. Jeesh. Lovely story.
My youngest when he was 6-ish, we were in a food court and all of a sudden he took my hand and said, "I love you, Mom."
Wow! Did I float on air or what? The people around turned their heads and couldn't believe their ears.
Another time he stayed all night at a friends and I received a phone call from the mom. She asked me what I did to raise such a well mannered boy because instead of going out and playing with the boys, he stayed inside and helped her with the dishes!! I told her my boys were raised to respect their elders, AND return a kind deed. If she was good enough to cook a meal, he best show respect in kind.
Tooooo bad respect isn't something that is important as it used to be.
Really enjoyed your story about Penny. Look forward to more.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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Hi, Pat,
What a beautiful picture! Is that her hubby?
I can't believe the teacher thought she was abused. Jeesh. Lovely story.
My youngest when he was 6-ish, we were in a food court and all of a sudden he took my hand and said, "I love you, Mom."
Wow! Did I float on air or what? The people around turned their heads and couldn't believe their ears.
Another time he stayed all night at a friends and I received a phone call from the mom. She asked me what I did to raise such a well mannered boy because instead of going out and playing with the boys, he stayed inside and helped her with the dishes!! I told her my boys were raised to respect their elders, AND return a kind deed. If she was good enough to cook a meal, he best show respect in kind.
Tooooo bad respect isn't something that is important as it used to be.
Really enjoyed your story about Penny. Look forward to more.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax
Comment Written 05-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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Thanks for the review. No the man is her dancing instructor.
When Penny graduated from HS she was valedictorian and this mom was one very proud mom.
Comment from c_lucas
Children will often surprise their and sometimes surprised them. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read,
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I reminder (reminded) her it was toast.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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Children will often surprise their and sometimes surprised them. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read,
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I reminder (reminded) her it was toast.
Comment Written 05-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2014
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Thanks for the review and the correction has been made on the word.
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You're welcome, Pat. Charlie
