Outsmarted
Trip to the park for science class24 total reviews
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Evidently you weren't afraid of snakes. They can stay away from me. I do know that grass snakes are harmless but I still don't like them. I'll keep reading your saga. Love to read the story of your life.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Evidently you weren't afraid of snakes. They can stay away from me. I do know that grass snakes are harmless but I still don't like them. I'll keep reading your saga. Love to read the story of your life.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2019
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2019
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Thanks for your review.
Comment from DonandVicki
It sounds like the kind of bullies that we had in school, sad to say that most of them that I knew did not amount to very much of anything, I will enjoy reading your stories.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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It sounds like the kind of bullies that we had in school, sad to say that most of them that I knew did not amount to very much of anything, I will enjoy reading your stories.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2016
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Thanks for the review. Bullies today are mean, in my day they were more practical jokers.
Comment from Douglas Paul
I do like this story Patricia. Glad you suggested it. Your writing is fluid and clear. Good thing you knew is was a harmless garter snake, but still it took courage to wrap it around your arm. LOL we used to catch those things all the time when we were kids in Michigan. I got bitten a few times - doesn't really even hurt - it's like a pinch. You are a good story teller. I enjoyed this
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2016
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I do like this story Patricia. Glad you suggested it. Your writing is fluid and clear. Good thing you knew is was a harmless garter snake, but still it took courage to wrap it around your arm. LOL we used to catch those things all the time when we were kids in Michigan. I got bitten a few times - doesn't really even hurt - it's like a pinch. You are a good story teller. I enjoyed this
Comment Written 26-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2016
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Thank you Douglas, for the nice review.
Comment from BruceMiller
You have a very interesting and basically well written story. I see a couple of problems:
In the paragraph starting "As the boys came to the picnic ... ...Kathy and a two of her ....": the "a" in "and a two" looks like a mistake.
You have a problem with commas. They are missing from some compound sentences, and they are sometime used when not required.
Small errors in a very good offering. Cheers.
as the boys came to the picnic
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2016
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You have a very interesting and basically well written story. I see a couple of problems:
In the paragraph starting "As the boys came to the picnic ... ...Kathy and a two of her ....": the "a" in "and a two" looks like a mistake.
You have a problem with commas. They are missing from some compound sentences, and they are sometime used when not required.
Small errors in a very good offering. Cheers.
as the boys came to the picnic
Comment Written 26-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2016
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Thanks you Bruce, for the review and the help.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Well written story that depicts for macho high school boys the very last thing they want spread around about them is that they got bested by a girl!
That, undoubtedly, would bring much embarrassment and shame down on "Robert".
Interesting choice of final essays.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2016
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Well written story that depicts for macho high school boys the very last thing they want spread around about them is that they got bested by a girl!
That, undoubtedly, would bring much embarrassment and shame down on "Robert".
Interesting choice of final essays.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2016
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Thank you Brett, for the nice review.
Comment from Caressa_08
This was a delightful read, Pat, that was one over the top to know how sophisticated you were in handling that big bully, Robert. Good, Pat, you showed him, & think it might of help change his life around. I like how you described everything, leading up to that snake incident & too, how you were strong, even though those covered knees were shaking, while wrapping that snake around your arm..So Deserving of a six, so will come back here & reward you for this one on Sunday, & replace this 5 with one.
Thanks for sharing...Caressa
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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This was a delightful read, Pat, that was one over the top to know how sophisticated you were in handling that big bully, Robert. Good, Pat, you showed him, & think it might of help change his life around. I like how you described everything, leading up to that snake incident & too, how you were strong, even though those covered knees were shaking, while wrapping that snake around your arm..So Deserving of a six, so will come back here & reward you for this one on Sunday, & replace this 5 with one.
Thanks for sharing...Caressa
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Thank you Caressa for the loving review. I can still close my eyes and see the scene that day.
Comment from robina1978
This chapteer is gorgeous: the boys bully the girls but you wanted your revenge on Robert about a previous event. And you were not scared of this snake as you knew it was harmless.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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This chapteer is gorgeous: the boys bully the girls but you wanted your revenge on Robert about a previous event. And you were not scared of this snake as you knew it was harmless.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014
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Thanks for the review.
Comment from James Dooney
Yes I can see how this has taken an emotional toll out of you. Well done for keeping it going. This is some seriously solid work here.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014
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Yes I can see how this has taken an emotional toll out of you. Well done for keeping it going. This is some seriously solid work here.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014
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Thank you James for the review and the kind words.
Comment from country ranch writer
sometimes a girl has to do what a girl has to do it was time for that bully to grow up and stop with his instigating scaring the girls and calling them names
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014
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sometimes a girl has to do what a girl has to do it was time for that bully to grow up and stop with his instigating scaring the girls and calling them names
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2014
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Thanks for the review.
Yeppers a girl has gotta do what a girl has gotta do, and growing up with brothers I could handle myself.
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same here
Comment from misscookie
I love This chapter very much and how the beauty of the park looked to you.
you were a writer long ago.
The best part is how you outsmart the bully.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
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I love This chapter very much and how the beauty of the park looked to you.
you were a writer long ago.
The best part is how you outsmart the bully.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2014
Thank you for the nicereview. This is one of the few stories I did not lose memory of when I had a traumatic happen when I was 19. That trauma event comes up in the next chapter.
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Your very welcome. God bless and have a nice say.
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