All You Can Eat
Anapestic Tetrameter Quatrains AABB36 total reviews
Comment from Spitfire
Some friend you are! Good argument to stay thin. Love the analogy to being a fish--undersize. Of course, the fishing witches strike a bargain in order for him escape being an appetizer.
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Some friend you are! Good argument to stay thin. Love the analogy to being a fish--undersize. Of course, the fishing witches strike a bargain in order for him escape being an appetizer.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
Comment from emrpoems
As usual a well written poem that satisfies all the rules of the contest.
Compellingly paired picture and poem .
All the best in the contest
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As usual a well written poem that satisfies all the rules of the contest.
Compellingly paired picture and poem .
All the best in the contest
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
Comment from Judith Ann
This is a hoot! I love poetry that rhymes, reminds me of reading books to my grand-kids. This is very clever with a great ending. I see nothing to change or improve upon. -Judy
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This is a hoot! I love poetry that rhymes, reminds me of reading books to my grand-kids. This is very clever with a great ending. I see nothing to change or improve upon. -Judy
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
Comment from Linda Engel
What a friend, send your buddies in to get devoured by the ghoulish fiends. See what bravery does for you? good rhyme and story for this contest entry.
You watched them go in
You know that you lied
The eating begins
You run and hide
Just then the door creeks
And out comes their bones
Laughter and shrieks
Giggles and moans
What have you done
You led them astray
But inside THEY were laughing
As you ran away.
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What a friend, send your buddies in to get devoured by the ghoulish fiends. See what bravery does for you? good rhyme and story for this contest entry.
You watched them go in
You know that you lied
The eating begins
You run and hide
Just then the door creeks
And out comes their bones
Laughter and shrieks
Giggles and moans
What have you done
You led them astray
But inside THEY were laughing
As you ran away.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
Comment from LIJ Red
Judas sheep gambols again. End rhymes and pentapestic
anemometer and a Halloween flavor. How could I accuse it of less than five?
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Judas sheep gambols again. End rhymes and pentapestic
anemometer and a Halloween flavor. How could I accuse it of less than five?
Comment Written 25-Oct-2014
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Michael: You get 5x5 on this one!!!!!
So funny and I saw that this is the contest #3.
I have been working on this on my trip up and down and over 5 hours. No, I didn't drive and write, ok, I wasn't as bold on my story. You are better than Dr. Seuss. I have over 20 Doctor Seuss books and you beat them all. Top notch, so funny, wow, amazing and they don't know what's inside the door...
flylikeaneagle
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Michael: You get 5x5 on this one!!!!!
So funny and I saw that this is the contest #3.
I have been working on this on my trip up and down and over 5 hours. No, I didn't drive and write, ok, I wasn't as bold on my story. You are better than Dr. Seuss. I have over 20 Doctor Seuss books and you beat them all. Top notch, so funny, wow, amazing and they don't know what's inside the door...
flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
Comment from krys123
Mikey;
the imagination is truly amazing and I found it to be very inventive and ingeniously creative and as I wondered how many late-night scary movies have you been watching.
Your anapestic tetrameter is written very well and where you meter and tempo flows smoothly throughout your writing. Your rhyming also is neither forced nor labored and helps with your rhythmic flow. Your many uses of types of rhymes were just a few's these; feminine, masculine leonine and linked rhymes(rhymes that depend on completing the rhyme by enjambment over the end line).
Your imagery was fantastic and truly spirited with a very demonstratively descriptive and eloquently expressive writings: "So, I tripped up the steps to a green rusty door I rushed in a screamin' and slipped on the floor". These lines by themselves were so full of vision that I could actually see him slipping on the floor in my minds eye.
Thank you for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and good luck in the contest for this is a formidable entry.
Alex
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Mikey;
the imagination is truly amazing and I found it to be very inventive and ingeniously creative and as I wondered how many late-night scary movies have you been watching.
Your anapestic tetrameter is written very well and where you meter and tempo flows smoothly throughout your writing. Your rhyming also is neither forced nor labored and helps with your rhythmic flow. Your many uses of types of rhymes were just a few's these; feminine, masculine leonine and linked rhymes(rhymes that depend on completing the rhyme by enjambment over the end line).
Your imagery was fantastic and truly spirited with a very demonstratively descriptive and eloquently expressive writings: "So, I tripped up the steps to a green rusty door I rushed in a screamin' and slipped on the floor". These lines by themselves were so full of vision that I could actually see him slipping on the floor in my minds eye.
Thank you for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and good luck in the contest for this is a formidable entry.
Alex
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
Comment from perpetualwallflower
Haha. This poem is great! I love the story it tells and the images that I get from it are quite vivid. You've done a really marvelous job in this and I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
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Haha. This poem is great! I love the story it tells and the images that I get from it are quite vivid. You've done a really marvelous job in this and I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
Comment from seaglass
This is a funny Halloween poem. "Better them then me," thinks the kid. Great rhyme and I love the old gothic-like words.
"chopsticks and knives" suggests an interesting picture. No one had forks or spoons. lol
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This is a funny Halloween poem. "Better them then me," thinks the kid. Great rhyme and I love the old gothic-like words.
"chopsticks and knives" suggests an interesting picture. No one had forks or spoons. lol
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
Comment from Sankey
ha ha ha more halloween queers hey! Good poem mate I love the art work and set up. I should try using my Dream Weaver web design programme and apply some hTML codes and stuff ha!
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ha ha ha more halloween queers hey! Good poem mate I love the art work and set up. I should try using my Dream Weaver web design programme and apply some hTML codes and stuff ha!
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
