All You Can Eat
Anapestic Tetrameter Quatrains AABB36 total reviews
Comment from Eric1
Hi Micheal, this is a wonderfully witty and clever entry for this poetry mechanics competition, great rhyming and rhythm a lovely smooth flow and an absolutely brilliant finale! Good luck my friend.
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Hi Micheal, this is a wonderfully witty and clever entry for this poetry mechanics competition, great rhyming and rhythm a lovely smooth flow and an absolutely brilliant finale! Good luck my friend.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2014
Comment from RYME4U
Excellent. Very timely for Halloween. The rhyme and rhythm are great and the anapest style is well done. Very subtle humor here. Delightful to read.
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Excellent. Very timely for Halloween. The rhyme and rhythm are great and the anapest style is well done. Very subtle humor here. Delightful to read.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements beautifully. You deliver a pithy Halloween piece with solid rhyme and meter throughout. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully. You deliver a pithy Halloween piece with solid rhyme and meter throughout. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Mike,
Well, this was a hoot. The guy in the photo is a real keeper. Just the kind a fella a gal wants to take home to the folks. NOT! LOL.. Too funny and great presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*.*)
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Hi, Mike,
Well, this was a hoot. The guy in the photo is a real keeper. Just the kind a fella a gal wants to take home to the folks. NOT! LOL.. Too funny and great presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'... Jax (*.*)
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
Comment from mfowler
As far as my tiny mind can tell, the mechanics are correct
Great yarn told with characteristic humour
Love the idea of the kid trying not to be a sissy only to be spared because he's undersize
Good use of dialogue to show the story
The ending is precious:
I stepped out the door and announced with great spunk,
"It's empty--come in, or you're all gutless punks!"
Very entertaining at a time while a lot of us are thinking of ghouls
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As far as my tiny mind can tell, the mechanics are correct
Great yarn told with characteristic humour
Love the idea of the kid trying not to be a sissy only to be spared because he's undersize
Good use of dialogue to show the story
The ending is precious:
I stepped out the door and announced with great spunk,
"It's empty--come in, or you're all gutless punks!"
Very entertaining at a time while a lot of us are thinking of ghouls
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
Comment from honeytree
I liked the very powerful and scary art work
for these scary words that were written very well.
A place to escape very quickly from, one would hope
honey tree
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I liked the very powerful and scary art work
for these scary words that were written very well.
A place to escape very quickly from, one would hope
honey tree
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
Comment from nancyjam
I love the ending . This is in great Anapest meter with
Strong rhyme and wonderful images.
A humorous and entertaining read.
Good luck in the contest.
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I love the ending . This is in great Anapest meter with
Strong rhyme and wonderful images.
A humorous and entertaining read.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2014
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Mikey
Remind me not to attend any Halloween dinner parties with you. Though I suppose 'they' sent you up to that "green rusty door" in the first place. I have mastered the use of chopsticks with my long talons which are ever so handy for picking my teeth after a meaty bloodied feast. I'm full just thinking about it ... hmmm ... "gutless punks"... sounds tasty.
I was exhausted just reading all the antipasto meter stuff ... so I'll just read and vote. You have a fine entry here ... I imagine some stiff competition ... I haven't read the other entries yet. Timely ... for I read this on Halloween evening. Great fun and you appear to have complied with all the rules.
A great meaty feasty tale which works very well in this meter, good rhyme, not forced. I imagine this will be contender for the win. Good luck. Hugs - Lovi. xoxo
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Hi Mikey
Remind me not to attend any Halloween dinner parties with you. Though I suppose 'they' sent you up to that "green rusty door" in the first place. I have mastered the use of chopsticks with my long talons which are ever so handy for picking my teeth after a meaty bloodied feast. I'm full just thinking about it ... hmmm ... "gutless punks"... sounds tasty.
I was exhausted just reading all the antipasto meter stuff ... so I'll just read and vote. You have a fine entry here ... I imagine some stiff competition ... I haven't read the other entries yet. Timely ... for I read this on Halloween evening. Great fun and you appear to have complied with all the rules.
A great meaty feasty tale which works very well in this meter, good rhyme, not forced. I imagine this will be contender for the win. Good luck. Hugs - Lovi. xoxo
Comment Written 31-Oct-2014
Comment from ravenblack
Oh, so you skip out the door and save your scrawny ass by inviting others for a smorgasbord. Oh, they will be gutless punks soon, alright. Damn- you are almost as wicked as the witch!
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Oh, so you skip out the door and save your scrawny ass by inviting others for a smorgasbord. Oh, they will be gutless punks soon, alright. Damn- you are almost as wicked as the witch!
Comment Written 27-Oct-2014
Comment from kiwisteveh
Uh, oh, there's some tough competition in this contest. My chances of winning three in a row have taken a plunge!
This is a great poem ith wonderful humour and a light-hearted touch while managing the anapaestic meter in excellent fashion, even in the dialogue.
Not only that, but it's topical as well with the Halloween theme.
Good luck - this should do well, but as I said there are some good entries and I haven't even posted mine yet!
Steve
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2014
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Uh, oh, there's some tough competition in this contest. My chances of winning three in a row have taken a plunge!
This is a great poem ith wonderful humour and a light-hearted touch while managing the anapaestic meter in excellent fashion, even in the dialogue.
Not only that, but it's topical as well with the Halloween theme.
Good luck - this should do well, but as I said there are some good entries and I haven't even posted mine yet!
Steve
Comment Written 27-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2014
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Hey, thank you very much. Yes, this is going to be something else. Some great entries for sure. Well, when the dust settles, everyone has some good work in their portfolio. But, the funny money looks good, not to mention the bragging rights!! mikey
