Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Hello Vance I must say I had so much fun reading your comical poem

I got a big kick out of this part-

SO I'M THROWING OUT A WISH TO YOU THAT SOMEONE HITS THIS CAR
THEN THE INSURANCE MAN WILL BRING A CHECK AND I CAN HIT THE BAR
WE'LL DRINK A TOAST TO YOU, OLD MISTER BRIGHT AND SHINY--

(I take it you mean big ass star)

 Comment Written 09-Nov-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Nov-2014

Thanks so much Gert; for your very kind remarks. This is truly out of my normal 'box' but ya' know..when something off the wall hits you .... and it's funny....ya' just gotta let it go! So far nobody's been offended and we're all still having fun! Thanks again: Vance Hey: anyone's gotta love a BIG ASS STAR!!!!!

reply by Gert sherwood on 14-Nov-2014

big smile Vance.

Gert

Comment from lakeport

Exceptional

Country star,indeed Twinkle,Twinkle, that's a humorous expressed country story poem, well written,I enjoyed reading it, God bless you. lakeport.

 Comment Written 26-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014

HI lakeport: Thanks for this very generous six stars and great review. It is a bit out of my normal style but something just hit me and it all rolled out with a bit of off color but I just saw this situation unfold and had to deal with it! I really appreciate your great review dear friend! God Bless you too!vance

reply by lakeport on 28-Oct-2014

you are very welcome.Lakeport.

Comment from robina1978

Excellent

Beautiful artwork that complements your rhyming poem ever so well. Somebody in a car could not see through the window. At the end they decide to look at real stars.

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014

Thanks so much robina1978! It is always delightful to hear from you and I look forward to seeing you again soon. Vance

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Love the speaker's attitude in this fun version of twinkle twinkle...
I really prefer not to read all caps
I like the assonance in joking/broken
good use of enjambment
good touches of alliteration
then well write about - we'll
fantastic ending with it's fan story reference :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014

Thanks Brooke for your (always) meaningful review and also for not scolding me for going off into "loonie" land a bit. Something just hit me and I could not stop but I'm not often this goofy. Thanks so much! Vance

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I enjoyed this and had a laugh Vance, great colloquial language liberally sprayed with a huge amount of humour, I laughed at this, there are a few folk I recognise in this well written and very amusing anecdote, not the least the old me! well done, great work, blessings, Roy.

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014

Thanks so much Roy and I've been a bit worried that stepping out of my typical poetic style might be seen as having a few too many beers...but not the case...just some crazy thoughts overcame me and ... well you know what happens then! Blessings dear friend! Vance

Comment from tbacha58

Exceptional

THEN WELL WRITE ALL ABOUT THIS GOOD LUCK WE HAD AND POST IT ON FANSTORY
THEN BUDDY YOU'RE A GONNA SEE SOME REEEEEEL BIG STARS!!!! WATCHOUT NOW!!

Perfect. xoxo

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014

Terry: thanks so much for the great six stars and letting me get by with a really 'OUT THERE" story that I could not stop. A bit of humor just seemed to be like a needed aspirin or glass of wine so not the normal me but glad you enjoyed it. Bless you! Vance

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

LOL. When you're at the bottom, there's nowhere to go, but up. Wishing to get hit to collect the insurance money definitely sounds like a poor man's dream. The rhyming is quite natural, but was a little hard to read with it all being capital letters. Like how you tie all this to the good luck they had and posting it on Fanstory. Very clever and unique. Les

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014

Hi les and thanks for your great review. I really fell off the wagon with this one but something just hit me and I could not let it go. I'm sure you understand!! All the best! Vance

reply by Glasstruth on 25-Oct-2014

You should fall off the wagon more often. LOL.:)))

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

An absolutely nutty vision, and I loved it! Love the hiding the money under the rug, especially! WHERE do you get your ideas??? My favorite line...the first...probably because it's such a shocker, ha ha!

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014

Hi Irish Rain: Thanks so much for sharing the fun in good spirit. I just could not stop once that twinkle twinkle got stuck in my mind. Sorry about a few off color remarks but thanks for enjoying it in good spirit. All the best! Vance

reply by Irish Rain on 24-Oct-2014

off color..in the mind of the reader, ha ha...I enjoyed this!

reply by the author on 28-Oct-2014

Thanks so much Irish Rain: it was indeed fun although a bit off my normal style! Vance

Comment from Cajungirl

Excellent

LOL, this was indeed a very hilarious and fun poem to read. Sometimes we need to break from our serious writes and write something just for fun. Great job.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

Hi Cajungirl: thanks so much for your reassurance as this is totally out of the box for me and I just felt nuts and had to write it down. Then after I posted it, I thought "gee" I hope readers know ...as you said...sometime we just need a break! Thanks again: Vance