Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Ooh, I can feel my skin tingling!

Bev, my dear, you are an amazing storyteller.

I'm leaving for Oz on Friday. Will do my best to keep up over the next four weeks.

Hugs and kisses, and ciao, baby!

xxx

Sonali :)

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

Thanks so much, Sonali. I appreciate the kind review. Have a great time! :) Bev

Comment from Adri7enne

Excellent

Good chapter, Bev. It moves right along, with more than a hint of sensuality, a nice touch of bad women added for intrigue, and now a ghost, possibly a wicked leftover from the days of Al Capone. It develops well. Next!

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

Thanks much, Adrienne. I really appreciate your support and encouragement! :) Bev

Comment from Joan E.

Exceptional

You had me in my comfort zone in the opening paragraph, since I spent the last 15 years of my professional career as a business consultant and coached owners about writing mission statements. At the other extreme, your descriptions of Justin are quite seductive--"lights-out sexy" should go virile. Did you coin "irresponsibilititis" too? The dropping of the Al Capone bomb is very effective in adding to the suspense. Cheers- Joan

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

Joan, thank you so much for confirming my own thoughts on the opening of the story. Mission statements and vision boards, though I think they have somewhat faded in interest, are very helpful in focusing a business's goals. How cool that you were a business consultant! That explains why you always come across so polished and on point. Yes, I did come up with the tongue-twisting term LoL.

I really appreciate the grand review and all the lovely stars. But even more, the fact you read and enjoyed my story.

Warmest regards, Bev

reply by Joan E. on 21-Oct-2014

I retired six years ago from consulting and am glad you find the "polish" has not faded! Seriously, many thanks for your kind words. It is always a pleasure to read your work of great variety and originality--I feel transported to each setting. Looking forward to your next creation- Joan

reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

Joan, I'm absolutely glowing with the warmth of your words. Thank you! Hugs, Bev

reply by Joan E. on 21-Oct-2014

Glow away! ;) -Joan

reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

I will! :)

Comment from misscookie

Exceptional

Another interesting chapter.
You has my attention all the way.
Your stories always keep me in the air/
wondering what is going to happen next's ...And that's a good thin.g

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

Hi, Miss Cookie. I never know exactly where I'm going with a story until I sit down to write it so we are both in the same boat! Thanks so much for both your generosity and support. Means a lot to me.

:) Bev

Comment from padumachitta

Excellent

Hi. A good chapter, it brings out the characters a little more.
Nothing worse than having to fire someone, it creates bad blood, and we don't need more of that in this story!
I wonder how it will all tie together...and that is good that wonder..it keeps me reading:-)
padumachitta

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

Thanks so much, Padumachitta. I really appreciate your generous review. :)

Comment from robina1978

Excellent

I think I missed the first part of your story. Problems at a hairdresser saloon are an original idea. You described them in great detail.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

Thanks so much, Ine. Basically, part one was setting up some of the characters and Nikki's finding out about her employee's lie.

I appreciate you taking time to read and send along this generous review.

:) Bev

Comment from Roxanna Andrews

Excellent

Oh goody another chapter. Great as always, I wasn't expecting a ghost story. Should get very interesting. Great job. Rox

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

Hi, Rox. I'm going to be alternating between this short story and my novel. Thanks for reading and for your great review. Glad you're along for the ride.

Hugs, Bev

Comment from CR Delport

Excellent

Oh my. Just what you need when you do renovations, dead bodies. Unfortunately, if you're in a management position, once one staff member pull the wool over your eyes, it is difficult to trust the rest. Another well crafted chapter in this interesting story.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

That's really well said, CR. I've never been a business owner for the very reason you mention. Especially these days.

Really appreciate the review and encouragement. :) Bev

Comment from IndianaIrish

Excellent

You weave the mysteries well into the storyline, Bev, and it sure keeps the interest level up. I still like Nikki's character and look forward to more of her story.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

Thanks so much, Karyn. I didn't want this to be another Steel Magnolias and, of course, I never tire of the paranormal LoL.

I appreciate your grand review, my friend.

:) Bev

Comment from jaeladarling

Excellent

Woo, cue the "dun-dun-duuuunnn" music at the end. LOL So this is a ghost story? Sounds intriguing. Wonder what they'll dig up? Can't wait to find out! Great chapter. :)

Just a couple of suggestions:

"Over his heart, is the gold" (No comma)

"where I'm sitting and it sets" (Comma after "sitting")

"Have I caught you at a bad time, Nikki? (Close the quote)

"It's Ingrid Meyer and you" (Comma after "Meyer")

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2014

Thanks so much, Jaela. I really appreciate your editorial suggestions and encouragement for this second part of my story. Great to have you along!

:) Bev