Little Poems
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Comment from mommerry
Having just returned from a road trip through rural Iowa, this poem said it all for me. Nature offers us so much beauty and it is "too soon gone." Good job.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Having just returned from a road trip through rural Iowa, this poem said it all for me. Nature offers us so much beauty and it is "too soon gone." Good job.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Thank you, mommerry
Comment from risktaker
I love the photo and the gorgeous colors. I can feel the cool wind breezes and the comfort of smog free air. I see the beauty of the colorful leaves on the ground and on the trees. I feel the freshness of the cleansing air and the soothing feel of the cool air against my skin and the relaxing touch of the sun on my face. Thanks
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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I love the photo and the gorgeous colors. I can feel the cool wind breezes and the comfort of smog free air. I see the beauty of the colorful leaves on the ground and on the trees. I feel the freshness of the cleansing air and the soothing feel of the cool air against my skin and the relaxing touch of the sun on my face. Thanks
Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Thank you risktaker. That is a wonderful review.
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Comment from macee97
Lovely use of alliteration....also liked the sentiment...re-read for typing errors...2nd verse, 2nd line...left out the word in
In the last stanza, in the last line the word should be too
I wondered about your capitalization in the last verse...when you capitalized most of the lines in the previous verses.
Overalll well done...with a beautiful picture attached.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Lovely use of alliteration....also liked the sentiment...re-read for typing errors...2nd verse, 2nd line...left out the word in
In the last stanza, in the last line the word should be too
I wondered about your capitalization in the last verse...when you capitalized most of the lines in the previous verses.
Overalll well done...with a beautiful picture attached.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Thank you made. Fixed the typos. Appreciate the comments.
Comment from kiwisteveh
You seem to have been away for a while - perhaps taking a trip into the future if the last detail in your notes is correct! :O)
This is a lovely portrait of the fall season, and what comes across most is the genuineness of the positive comments, together with a light and happy touch to the description as in this section:
The effort is worthwhile without a doubt.
Go walk a crunching, color-coated path,
Or jump a pile to take a leafy bath.
I love this pleasing season's pretty sights!
Steve
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You seem to have been away for a while - perhaps taking a trip into the future if the last detail in your notes is correct! :O)
This is a lovely portrait of the fall season, and what comes across most is the genuineness of the positive comments, together with a light and happy touch to the description as in this section:
The effort is worthwhile without a doubt.
Go walk a crunching, color-coated path,
Or jump a pile to take a leafy bath.
I love this pleasing season's pretty sights!
Steve
Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Thank you Steve. Yes,it been a while. Been off marketing my book and writing the next. A wonderful review.
Comment from Domino 2
Typo in last line - should read, 'TOO short'.
8th line needs a syllable less to retain meter, so maybe, 'orange' instead of 'oranges'.
11th line, I think you mean, 'IN the air'.
Top imagery in excellent examples of autumn.
Excellent alliteration and rhymes throughout.
Apart from my 2 nit-picks, excellent meter, too.
Nice one.
Cheers, Ray
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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Typo in last line - should read, 'TOO short'.
8th line needs a syllable less to retain meter, so maybe, 'orange' instead of 'oranges'.
11th line, I think you mean, 'IN the air'.
Top imagery in excellent examples of autumn.
Excellent alliteration and rhymes throughout.
Apart from my 2 nit-picks, excellent meter, too.
Nice one.
Cheers, Ray
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Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Thanks ray, for the catches. I fixed them
Comment from Acquired Taste
My absolute most favorite time of year - just love autumn. Your phrase: Go walk a crunching, color-coated path, is so visual and the artwork choice is terrific. Nicely done. AT=/
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My absolute most favorite time of year - just love autumn. Your phrase: Go walk a crunching, color-coated path, is so visual and the artwork choice is terrific. Nicely done. AT=/
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Comment Written 20-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2014
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Thank you AT. Mine too.
