Comment from mauial

Excellent

Very funny last line with good alliteration and visuals. So this I would say meets the prompt requirements not only with the form, but with the fun part.

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 Comment Written 14-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2014

Thanks, mauial, and funny was what I was shooting for, so I'm glad to know that it came across that way.

I really appreciate your comments.:}