Comment from Ben Colder

Excellent

Knew a drunk one time who fell in one. Another drunk heard him moan and wanted to know the matter. The drunk said I"m cold. The other said, no wonder , you kick all the cover off you. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2014

Hah! Thanks so much for the entertaining review and clever comments, Ben. I sincerely appreciated the laugh. I needed one today, my friend. :|

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

Your fun 5-7-5 poem is fun in a different kind of - scary, but not - sort of way. good luck to you in the contest.
~teresa~~~

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2014

Thanks, Teresa, and that's what I was shooting for. A little Halloween flavor, but not too overwhelming.

I really appreciate your comments.

Comment from Acquired Taste

Excellent

Absolutely hysterical - formatting is the key, but the words are terrific...perfect choice on photo as well. Great creative take on this one...AT=/

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2014

Thanks so much, Jean, my dear friend. I truly appreciate your kind and encouraging review! :}

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

I like the subtle humor here and the way you have presented this poem.You have managed to keep to the 5/7/5 format. Very well done.

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2014

Thanks for taking time out to read and review it for me, RYME4U. I do sincerely appreciate it! :}

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

The syllable count is spot on. This is a great Halloween entry, cleverly penned and the satori well executed. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2014

Thanks for the kind comments, Monica. I'm glad you had fun with it. I sure did!:}

reply by Mystic Angel 7777 on 14-Oct-2014

You got my vote! I am a sucker for a fallen anything LOL.

reply by the author on 14-Oct-2014

:)

Me too!

Comment from Neonewman

Excellent

I absolutely love how the last word appeared to be plummeting, this was certainly brilliance at its best. I will certainly read the others but fear this one I will be voting for LOL. God Bless and good luck..

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2014

Thanks, Neonewman. I appreciate your support as well as your encouraging comments.

Much obliged:}

Comment from Juliette Chamberlain

Exceptional

Oh that was superb. I don't really know what else it is necessary to say but I 'have' to elaborate.
The descending letters of plummets is amusing and an apt illustration of what is actually happening.

Warmly,
Juliette

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2014

Thanks so much, Juliette. I sincerely appreciate your stellar rating and review. :}

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is so funny and the picture you painted in my mind is awesome. Nicely thought out piece and the presentation is clever. Blessings, Pat

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2014

Thank you, Pat, I appreciate your comments. The moderator of this contest said to "have fun", so that's exactly what I did, had some fun with it. LOL...

Comment from drivenbackward

Excellent

I like this one a lot. Very creative. This pertains to the words as well as how the last word plummets. Cool stuff.

fog shrouded -- 'fog-shrouded grave'

 Comment Written 14-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2014

Got 'cha, Dan, I'll fix that straight away. Despite that nit, I'm glad you enjoyed reading it. :}

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

You have found a very creative way to format this short poem. The formatting gives this poem some extra punch. This was a very enjoyable piece of poetic art to have read and written this response for... John

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 Comment Written 14-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2014

Thank you, John. I appreciate your encouraging comments very much. :}