Vision and Sound: Their Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Valerius and Lourdes Journey Home"Two souls that meet as strangers on earth.
16 total reviews
Comment from faragon
This story about his two new traveling companions was a pleasant diversion from the main story line. I have a strange feeling that those two may be enlisted to help Julia or Julia to help them.
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This story about his two new traveling companions was a pleasant diversion from the main story line. I have a strange feeling that those two may be enlisted to help Julia or Julia to help them.
Comment Written 22-Oct-2014
Comment from country ranch writer
BY ALL MEANS STAY AWAY FROM PLACE THAT WILL HARM THE CHILD AND HELP HER HEAL HER SELF WITH LOVE AND PEACE FROM ALL AROUND HER'
P.S. SORRY BEHIND IN REVIEWS
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BY ALL MEANS STAY AWAY FROM PLACE THAT WILL HARM THE CHILD AND HELP HER HEAL HER SELF WITH LOVE AND PEACE FROM ALL AROUND HER'
P.S. SORRY BEHIND IN REVIEWS
Comment Written 14-Oct-2014
Comment from gypsycaravan
The mentally ill are still ostracized and misunderstood. There is too little compassion for these problems. Give someone measles for a short period of their life and all around are considerate and caring. Make someone schizophrenic and all the bullies show up. Nice work in showing the fear of being different.
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The mentally ill are still ostracized and misunderstood. There is too little compassion for these problems. Give someone measles for a short period of their life and all around are considerate and caring. Make someone schizophrenic and all the bullies show up. Nice work in showing the fear of being different.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2014
Comment from Sasha
Excellent work with this chapter. I especially like your last paragraph. You sum up my feelings regarding this matter perfectly. Again, no suggestions...you are doing just fine without them.
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Excellent work with this chapter. I especially like your last paragraph. You sum up my feelings regarding this matter perfectly. Again, no suggestions...you are doing just fine without them.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2014
Comment from Nosha17
Perhaps the child will benefit Julia's recovery and treatment and likewise. Well written chapter, interesting story line and a most enjoyable read. Faye
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Perhaps the child will benefit Julia's recovery and treatment and likewise. Well written chapter, interesting story line and a most enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 14-Oct-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
Florentina is a special little girl. She needs to have her talents encouraged. These talents will help her throughout life. Valerius realizes this. Many children do not fit the mold of what we call average. Not all are bad. Most just need help in developing their talents. Great work.
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Florentina is a special little girl. She needs to have her talents encouraged. These talents will help her throughout life. Valerius realizes this. Many children do not fit the mold of what we call average. Not all are bad. Most just need help in developing their talents. Great work.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2014
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Michael: I am glad that you were there for Florentina and her mother. Now, they can meet Trellita and Julia. Julia can help with the images of visions, takes one to know one.
Trellita can mentor both. Maybe, make a pot of home cooked stew. The priests were evil. I'm glad that Valerius was childlike too, made a friend and helped people. Well written, congrats on great stories. This should be a ten!
flylikeaneagle
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Michael: I am glad that you were there for Florentina and her mother. Now, they can meet Trellita and Julia. Julia can help with the images of visions, takes one to know one.
Trellita can mentor both. Maybe, make a pot of home cooked stew. The priests were evil. I'm glad that Valerius was childlike too, made a friend and helped people. Well written, congrats on great stories. This should be a ten!
flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 14-Oct-2014
Comment from drivenbackward
Great chapter. The story as a whole is a brilliant concept, and I wish you the best of luck with it. Only one small note to consider:
The soldier was tall and intimidating -- Consider 'The solider stood tall and intimidating'
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Great chapter. The story as a whole is a brilliant concept, and I wish you the best of luck with it. Only one small note to consider:
The soldier was tall and intimidating -- Consider 'The solider stood tall and intimidating'
Comment Written 14-Oct-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
Behold, search that mote! Who goes there? They seem to speak in short sentences. Plus they got a Italian accent. The little girl seems to be seeing things or having delusions. Maybe she is inflicted with some sort of ESP sense most of us ain't got. I saw no grammar issues. Reads good and reader friendly. I wonder about the girl's ailments? I bet Julia can help the bastard child. Since Julia already has a supernatural gift unknown of by the priests that confess a mental illness or gift with demons? I feel that the little girl has been misunderstood by the high priests. They are the dumb ole ox. Something may can learned from the new comer. Julia would make an ideal mentor and for her for she is cursed with her immortality living numerous lives. them wolves, I THINK, symbolize something of significance Sir Mikey of the Cahill clan. Do you hear that thunder? Better run -- better take cover from the wolves, not of the animal variety. Excellent thought and plot is thickening developing characters. I must be gone. i dust off my feet from those who don't welcome me into their villa and share their spoils. Trying to connect to the slang logo. Count your doubloon! I got a hacky sack with six coins inside. wackydo
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Behold, search that mote! Who goes there? They seem to speak in short sentences. Plus they got a Italian accent. The little girl seems to be seeing things or having delusions. Maybe she is inflicted with some sort of ESP sense most of us ain't got. I saw no grammar issues. Reads good and reader friendly. I wonder about the girl's ailments? I bet Julia can help the bastard child. Since Julia already has a supernatural gift unknown of by the priests that confess a mental illness or gift with demons? I feel that the little girl has been misunderstood by the high priests. They are the dumb ole ox. Something may can learned from the new comer. Julia would make an ideal mentor and for her for she is cursed with her immortality living numerous lives. them wolves, I THINK, symbolize something of significance Sir Mikey of the Cahill clan. Do you hear that thunder? Better run -- better take cover from the wolves, not of the animal variety. Excellent thought and plot is thickening developing characters. I must be gone. i dust off my feet from those who don't welcome me into their villa and share their spoils. Trying to connect to the slang logo. Count your doubloon! I got a hacky sack with six coins inside. wackydo
Comment Written 14-Oct-2014
Comment from Sankey
More good writing my dear friend. I am sure you draw from your experience as a carer for the ill around you. One little spag again. Previously, Valerius met a young wome(a)n
ha I looked at this before now I can cross it off.
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More good writing my dear friend. I am sure you draw from your experience as a carer for the ill around you. One little spag again. Previously, Valerius met a young wome(a)n
ha I looked at this before now I can cross it off.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2014
