Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

I had to laugh at how things were changed from then to now and the total difference in work and ethics and how we responded to things. Very interesting and quite refreshing

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017

Thanks Barb did you have a look back at the previous chapter after I cleaned it up from your suggestions? Most of them anyway and I did change stuff.

Comment from MelB

Excellent

Unfortunately, I never understood the usefulness or method of application of the "Arch Supports*" the podiatrist supplied to me as they were known back then for inside my shoes - back then(,)

I more recent times I have been reminded of him again, in the person, would you believe, of our Local Federal - I(n) more recent times(,)

People are very interesting and peculiar. You ran into quite a range of different people in this store.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017

Thanks for the great review Sis much appreciated will get on those spags. I re-did the previous chapter after barb Henson etc made some suggestions if you wanna look no rewards on it sorry.

Comment from Brett Matthew West

Excellent

Informative and well written piece.

Notes add another level of depth to this story.

Pictures do too.

Well done.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017

Thanks mate. Did I tell ya I recently signed up for another 2 years of FS.

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

This is a very engaging story about your time as floor manager at Penfold's. Your story is a snapshot in time providing a glimpse of the people and retail from almost fifty years ago. I found intriguing you having to show checks to get them authorized. You write:

"Bankcards were very new in those days, similar to today's Mastercard and Visa, or even American Express. I think Amex was probably around long before any of these others anyway."

I also found fascinating your description of checking registers. Meeting Jerry Lewis and other celebrities were a plus to your story, too.


Thank you for remembering and even more for sharing.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017

Thanks Sis cat. never was a floor manager but, as I said they did give me more responsibility, which was encouraging. So glad I got this up today been trying to get the funny money up so I could do it. I just re-joined for another 2 years. have to see if I can find some of your stuff.

Comment from Heidi M

Excellent

This is so interesting to read. It's great to get a first-person perspective of what your work was like in 1970. I loved the attitude toward customers as related on the poster.

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2017

Thanks Heidi, as I stated it was so good to see it again at the Window Tinting place here in the city where i now live so many years after seeing first at this job. I just did some corrections on the [previous chapter that were pointed out a while ago. There are no rewards on it sorry if you are interested. (If you have not seen it before that is.)

Comment from GWinterwin

Excellent

A good chapter to your story. Sounds like some times I can relate to. Your times of standing on the concrete, and having foot problems. Also some of the elderly people bring back memories. Good job of telling your story.

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014

Thanks Bro If you saw my Foo in Mouth poem that was a rant I said too much to Tom was enjoying addig the extra chapters but he says I was in breach of the rules. Should have shut up ha! No more extras after chapter 10 part 2 now.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I am enjoying reading this. You experiences are extremely interesting. In a few places, it seems EE added a *

I will always be grateful for their generosity to me. (omit 'to me', not needed)

For starters I wonder if they thought I was 'Gay', as most everyone else there, was. (omit 'there was')

Someone accused me, at one time, of visually undressing a customer her with my eyes, (omit 'her')

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014

Thanks for the pickups amazing how often people point out spags and when we go back we find others we forgot as well. Thanks again.

reply by the author on 06-Oct-2014

Hi been a while since you gave me these errors but I think I have fixed them all i you would like to read again.

Comment from judiverse

Excellent

This is delightful. I enjoyed your description of sharing your living quarters with Miss S. Sounds like you were glad you didn't live there very long. Your experience at Penfold's is described very well, and it does remind me of "Are You Being Served?" One of my favorites. The formality was quite humorous. Having to be on your day would have been hard on the arches. I don't know that you need to say anything about the lawyers. I'd say you are quite safe with your recollections. That was some years ago, anyway. I don't know that I have much to add from the first time. Interesting pictures of the celebrities you met. judi

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014

Yeah mate the company has died since then anyway, sadly. Taken over by a big mob called Officeworks all over Sydney now. You will notice no more second parts to chapters soon. Have a look at my Foo in Mouth man poem (Fred I think) said too much to Tom as MIkey said if I didn't say anything could have gone on doing what a I was doing sigh! The poem was a rant! HEEH!! Thanks for the review. The second parts cut out on Chapter 10 :( Talk more later on PM if you like

reply by judiverse on 04-Oct-2014

You're welcome. Some of our office supplies companies have gone under because of so much use the Internet to order things online. judi

reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014

That's a good point too!

reply by judiverse on 04-Oct-2014

You're welcome. A delightful account of happenings at Penfold's. judi

Comment from GracieAnn

Excellent

Sankey, this installments to your book can be read as stand alones and that is a good thing. We have commuted 180 miles round trip in a car for several years 5 days a week, but no more. Well done. :0 GracieAnn

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2014

Thanks for your review and glad to know the long distance commute is over keep reading more coming just put two more up today. Some you have seen before but there is more added since the split of chapters.

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

In general, Geoff, there is much overuse of parentheses.

You also need to NOT use double punctuation marks. It's considered the sign of an amateur ... as is what I call your overuse of "cute-isms" such as Arrrr! and Hee-hee. One look at these, Geoff, and an editor would toss your manuscript in the slush pile.

good company to work for, in the time I was employed there. [the sentence is clearer with
"during" instead of "in"]

Of course, this is one I'd read before, so I don't know if I might have already commented similarly then.

I hope this is not "coming down too hard" on your writing. You have a warmth and caring in it, though, that I can't help but feel would be enhanced by making these changes.

I won't go into the dialogue again, because I've run that into the ground, and it doesn't seem like you've employed any of it.

Anyway, I hope this helps some, Geoff.

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014

Thanks mate no worries yeah I do try with the dialogue and maybe in a later edit inspiration might come there too and I can add it. Sorry for the Arrgghh's and hehe work on those ok. I guess I feel like I am talking on Face book Sigh! Appreciate you coming back and don't worry I repeat myself all the time ha! See!