Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

This is a wonderfully written entry which meets all of the requirements splendidly. This was a delightful read and very educational. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014

Thanks for the stars and nice review. Here is a little bit about the fair from yorkfair.org.

The traditions of fairs in the New World began with the York Fair, America?s first fair, held in the historic old Town of York in 1765, eleven years before the nation was founded. A charter to hold that fair was granted to the people of York by Thomas Penn, son of William Penn in recognition of ?the flourishing state to which the town hath arrived through their industry.? Those early gatherings were reported to have been ?the liveliest days of the whole year.?

At that time, the York Fair existed as a two-day agricultural market on the town commons, now known as Penn Park. Records don?t tell us too much about the York Fair during the American Revolution or the War of 1812, but we know the troops passing through York camped in the commons, so they would have shared the grounds with the Fair.

reply by Mystic Angel 7777 on 28-Sep-2014

WOW! This is really fascinating and I am really appreciative of your sharing this as it so much fun to learn something new, as well as be entertained creatively through words.

Comment from kiwisteveh

Good

Interesting historical information.

I felt the poem's flow was a little awkward due to the line breaks not coinciding with the natural pauses in the 'sentence.

Good luck.

Steve

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 Comment Written 28-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014

Thanks for the stars and the review. Thanks for your review, I will look at it and read up on haikus and make an adjustment if needed. Here is a little bit about my city.The traditions of fairs in the New World began with the York Fair, America?s first fair, held in the historic old Town of York in 1765, eleven years before the nation was founded. A charter to hold that fair was granted to the people of York by Thomas Penn, son of William Penn in recognition of ?the flourishing state to which the town hath arrived through their industry.? Those early gatherings were reported to have been ?the liveliest days of the whole year.?

At that time, the York Fair existed as a two-day agricultural market on the town commons, now known as Penn Park. Records don?t tell us too much about the York Fair during the American Revolution or the War of 1812, but we know the troops passing through York camped in the commons, so they would have shared the grounds with the Fair.

Comment from rjuselius

Excellent

"For the new world, fair
Events started on the town
Commons in York town"
this is a fine piece, i am just thinking that how could you avoid repetition for the word "town". and i can't get it done.. how about
"new world fair events
started on the town commons
in the york county"
however, thank you for sharing!
good luck in the contest!

rebekka x

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014

Thanks for the review and stars, I see the mistake and I will correct it. Here is a little bit about the start of the York fair.The traditions of fairs in the New World began with the York Fair, America?s first fair, held in the historic old Town of York in 1765, eleven years before the nation was founded. A charter to hold that fair was granted to the people of York by Thomas Penn, son of William Penn in recognition of ?the flourishing state to which the town hath arrived through their industry.? Those early gatherings were reported to have been ?the liveliest days of the whole year.?

At that time, the York Fair existed as a two-day agricultural market on the town commons, now known as Penn Park. Records don?t tell us too much about the York Fair during the American Revolution or the War of 1812, but we know the troops passing through York camped in the commons, so they would have shared the grounds with the Fair.
If I might add, I was trying put down what I read and I forgot you shouldn't repeat.

Comment from scd41

Excellent

But for your author notes, I would be wondering why York town has been included in the poem. What a lovely tradition of celebrating fairs for the last 250 years! A nice entry for the Celebrating County Fairs writing prompt contest. Best of luck for the contest

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014

Thanks for the stars and review. It was included in the author's note because it was once called a town and now we call it a city.
Here is a little bit about the start of the York fair.The traditions of fairs in the New World began with the York Fair, America?s first fair, held in the historic old Town of York in 1765, eleven years before the nation was founded. A charter to hold that fair was granted to the people of York by Thomas Penn, son of William Penn in recognition of ?the flourishing state to which the town hath arrived through their industry.? Those early gatherings were reported to have been ?the liveliest days of the whole year.?

At that time, the York Fair existed as a two-day agricultural market on the town commons, now known as Penn Park. Records don?t tell us too much about the York Fair during the American Revolution or the War of 1812, but we know the troops passing through York camped in the commons, so they would have shared the grounds with the Fair.

reply by scd41 on 28-Sep-2014

Thanks for giving more information on York fair.

Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin

Excellent

Hi,

What's not to like about a fair?? Nothing!

Used to love to go as a kid and try to win those canes with the ring toss.

You can see people at the fair you don't see the rest of the year.

Good poem. The best of luck in the contest

Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*.*)

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014

Thanks for the stars and review. There is a correction I have to make and here is a little bit about the fair itself.The traditions of fairs in the New World began with the York Fair, America?s first fair, held in the historic old Town of York in 1765, eleven years before the nation was founded. A charter to hold that fair was granted to the people of York by Thomas Penn, son of William Penn in recognition of ?the flourishing state to which the town hath arrived through their industry.? Those early gatherings were reported to have been ?the liveliest days of the whole year.?

At that time, the York Fair existed as a two-day agricultural market on the town commons, now known as Penn Park. Records don?t tell us too much about the York Fair during the American Revolution or the War of 1812, but we know the troops passing through York camped in the commons, so they would have shared the grounds with the Fair.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Your poem is very interesting. Thank you for the informative author notes. Your syllable count is correct. I see nothing to change. Good job and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014

Thanks for the review and stars. I made an error and I will correct it. I had town twice. Here is a little bit about the start of the fair.
The traditions of fairs in the New World began with the York Fair, America?s first fair, held in the historic old Town of York in 1765, eleven years before the nation was founded. A charter to hold that fair was granted to the people of York by Thomas Penn, son of William Penn in recognition of ?the flourishing state to which the town hath arrived through their industry.? Those early gatherings were reported to have been ?the liveliest days of the whole year.?

At that time, the York Fair existed as a two-day agricultural market on the town commons, now known as Penn Park. Records don?t tell us too much about the York Fair during the American Revolution or the War of 1812, but we know the troops passing through York camped in the commons, so they would have shared the grounds with the Fair.

reply by Jannypan (Jan) on 28-Sep-2014

I love the history of your poem. Guess I missed the repeated word.

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is a poem filled with a history lesson that I didn't know about. I like it when history is learned in a poetic manner. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 27-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014

Thanks for the stars and review. I made an error which I will correct when I am finished thanking people. Here is a little bit about York's fair.The traditions of fairs in the New World began with the York Fair, America?s first fair, held in the historic old Town of York in 1765, eleven years before the nation was founded. A charter to hold that fair was granted to the people of York by Thomas Penn, son of William Penn in recognition of ?the flourishing state to which the town hath arrived through their industry.? Those early gatherings were reported to have been ?the liveliest days of the whole year.?

At that time, the York Fair existed as a two-day agricultural market on the town commons, now known as Penn Park. Records don?t tell us too much about the York Fair during the American Revolution or the War of 1812, but we know the troops passing through York camped in the commons, so they would have shared the grounds with the Fair.

Comment from w.j.debi

Excellent

This is interesting historical information. I had no idea we had a fair that old in the USA. Fairs can be a lot of fun. Excellent choice of picture to complement you message. Good luck in the contest.

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 Comment Written 27-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2014

Thanks for your stars and review. I made an error, I had town twice but I am going to correct it. Here is a little bit about the York Fair.