Comment from sgalletti

Excellent

Wow, Steve - see we just both posted Minutes almost simultaneously LOL! I'm happy to see you also chose to write this in the traditional way even though the rules, for whatever reason, were made more liberal. I appreciated the repetition of "My child" which tied the three stanzas together. This is not an easy form to write and still create a coherent poem. You did an excellent job of that. Good luck in the contest. Sue

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014

Thanks, Sue - just reviewed yours.

Steve

Comment from Just2Write

Excellent

An excellent Minute Poem, Steve - and it is done with such a smooth flow - something not easily accomplished in this 8/4/4/4 meter. The poem is sad and makes such a powerful statement when the speaker looks deeply into the eyes of a child sees not only the child's sorrow, and a reflection of themselves. How poignant that is!
Rose.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014

Thanks, Rose - glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from Leigh Ann

Excellent

Beautiful. Sometimes we fail to realize what our children go through when we're having trials in our lives. They understand way more than we give them credit. Excellent flow. Good job.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014

Thank you - yes, this gives a little tug of the heart strings - let's hope the committee has a heart.

Steve

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Steve, what a beautiful entry for this contest. This poem brings so many scenarios to mind, not the least of which is a family in turmoil over abuse. Very sorrowful.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014

Thanks, Dan.

Yes, it is open to various interpretations...

Steve

Comment from thee-name

Excellent

Excellent poem. Emotional.
MY CHILD, I SEE UPON YOUR FACE
A TEARDROP'S TRACE
WHAT HURT SO DEEP
CAN MAKE YOU WEEP

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014

Thank you.

Steve

reply by thee-name on 29-Sep-2014

THANK YOU!

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

This poem is lovely Steve. It's a well written minute poem with perfect rhyme. Much truth in the message, the children of today grow up much too quickly and see the sad/dark side of life too soon. Good Luck! Well done. Nancy

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014

Thanks, nancy.

Steve

Comment from James Dooney

Excellent

I like what you have done here. Your words are actually quite powerful and they help the pic shine also. Keep it up mate !

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014

Thanks, james.

Steve

Comment from CHIGYSISKI

Excellent

Excellently written poem.Beautiful artwork.My favorite lines were:
My child, I read it in your eyes;
'tis no surprise.
These tears I see,
you weep for me.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

Hi Steve, this is wonderful entry for this particular competition my friend, full of emotion well rhymed with a wonderful rhythm , good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014

Thanks, Eric.

Steve

reply by Eric1 on 30-Sep-2014

You are very welcome Steve.

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Hi Steve - This is a perfect Minute poem for the contest. Perfect syllable count and perfect rhyme. Very moving and a good entry for the contest. I love the very appropriate picture. Warm regards Dorothy x

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014

Dorothy, thanks for the warm review.

Steve