Comment from Goodauthor

Excellent

I'm sorry I don't have a six to give you. Your poem is deserving, it flows so smoothly and the subject is so poignantly presently with such strong imager. It's always timely. I wonder is the individual who beats a child thinks about this after the fact; especially when violence turns to tragedy and loss. I enjoyed the read.

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2014

Thanks for the great review and the virtual six.

Steve

reply by Goodauthor on 30-Sep-2014

You're welcome.

Comment from bard owl

Excellent

Will we ever find out what circumstances caused the child to weep for you? Perhaps it is that you are growing older and they want you to stay the way you are? Or perhaps you have hurt the child repeatedly in some way. Very thought-provoking write. Blessings, Linda

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2014

Thanks, Linda

You are right, we ill never know - and if I don't know then no one does!

Steve

Comment from fastdigits

Excellent

A poem of brevity but laced with
poignant feelings from deep within
that leaves a touch of sadness when
writing of the heartbreak of a young
child.
Well done

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2014

Thank you!

Steve

Comment from Linda England Bonam

Excellent

Very nicely written. I think it will do quite
well in this contest for the minute poem.
The picture was very suiting for this as well.

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2014

Thanks, Linda

Steve

Comment from Earthlover

Exceptional

Wow! what a heart wrenching poem! The image speaks its own language, it tells its own story, you captured such strong emotions in this writing! I love the line..."I see upon your face, a tear drops trace"..very expressive poem.

Thanks for sharing your talent.
Sincerely,
Earthlover

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2014

Thanks so much for the generous review and the six stars.

Steve

Comment from Lovinia

Excellent

Hi Steve

A tender and poignant piece beautifully presented. Nothing worse than the tears of a child. You leave us in poetic nuance as to the reason for the child's distress ... I like this ... leaves us with much to ponder ... and reflect. It is unbearable when they cry for themselves, almost inconsolable when they cry for someone close.

An excellent entry in the contest in full acquiescence to the contest rules and those of the form itself. Some fine alliteration in "teardrops trace", "world/woe", "tender/tears", "should shed". Excellent rhyme and perfect meter. I wish you the best of luck my friend. Hugs - Lovi xoxox

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2014

Thanks, Lovi

Don't know where this came from - out of some bleak poetic imagining, I suppose...

Steve

reply by Lovinia on 30-Sep-2014

Hi Steve

Yes .... I'm the same. I sit down to write something and it becomes something else. I thought you might have come across the image and wrote it to that. I'm pleased the tears aren't for you. Good luck. Lovi xoxo

Comment from arsinBW

Excellent

Good luck with this one in the contest. I hope you do well with it. The read flowed pretty smoothly throughout. Good luck sir.

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2014

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from jaeladarling

Excellent

I can't stand it when I child cries. I get accused of "coddling" my nieces. LOL I just want to make sure they're okay! Anyway. Nice work on this piece. A heart-wrencher for sure. Thanks for sharing!

 Comment Written 30-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 30-Sep-2014

That's what aunties and grannies are for - plenty of coddling...

Thanks for reading.

Steve

Comment from JM

Excellent

Anytime a child cries, it is heart wrenching. Maybe I just have a hard time seeing children hurt. Your poem brings to mind so many possibilities as to why the child is crying. I am left wondering why "you weep for me." I like your minute.

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014

Thanks for the kind ords.

Steve

Comment from Mastery

Exceptional

Hi, Steve. How have you been? I have missed your writing but am almost back here for good. My novel will be out on February 26 2015. I have been very busy as you can imagine. The publisher has a ton of things I have to do. LOL...

This poem is a real emotional rollar coaster.

"My child, I read it in your eyes;
'tis no surprise.
These tears I see,
you weep for me"

Wow! Take care. Bob (Mastery)

 Comment Written 29-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2014

Hi, Bob - good to see you back. I'd be interested to hear about the whole 'getting published' experience one day - still dreaming of it myself and wondering where to start.

Thanks for the generous review and the six stars.

Steve

reply by Mastery on 30-Sep-2014

Hi, Steve. Start with aquery letter to some agents/publishers and grow from there. Bob