Comment from drivenbackward

Excellent

Now that was fun! A grand ole time at the freak show. Looks like you guys know how to have fun. I once participated in a similar event and scared the living S*** out of a bunch of kids. Mixed a mask of an old (very old) man's face with sailor's cap (including white hair sticking out on all sides), old stained sheet covering body, cane, and red booties. So much fun!!! Although I did have the police called on me. You guys must have had a blast.

"Teletubbies are freaky as hell, dude", -- Comma inside quotations. Some other places as well.

two-cents -- No hyphen.

Your kids sure aren't introverts. LOL.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2014

Thanks for catching those SPAGs for me, DB, I really appreciate that! We did have a lot of fun, and even though it was a bit "warped", we all did it as a family which made it even more enjoyable. After all was said and done, the kids said they had a blast as well.

Thanks for the review, my friend. :)

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

Dean, I wouldn't have thought you'd get so much fun out of this. Lol.
Poor Connie-how embarrassing.
What an authentic horror cast and perfect response. (From all accounts.)
I see that practise sure does make the results perfect.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2014

Heh-heh, yes, it certainly does, seken58. Thanks for the thoughtful review, my friend. :}

Comment from padumachitta

Excellent

Hello Dean..oh I so wish I could have ben there...you guys rock...what a hoot...do they know how lucky they are to have you in their midst? Do they?...cause I tell ya, I would so love it, a tent to scare my family...oh ya, oh ya...padumachitta

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2014

Hee-hee, I don't know if they consider themselves lucky, padu. But, they do find me somewhat amusing, as well as a nuisance sometimes. I try very hard to be both, LOL.

Thanks for the excellent comments. :}

Comment from Tomes Johnston

Excellent

This is yet another interesting and creepy story that the author has created with this piece of work. I like the play on words and the suspense keeps me going.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2014

Thanks very much, Tomes. I'm so glad you liked this one, my friend. :}

reply by Tomes Johnston on 18-Sep-2014

I did indeed

Comment from Domino 2

Exceptional

I hope your wife wore some clothes over her. 'striped yellow and black hips', Deano. ;-)

Teletubbies scare me, too. LOL.

Loads of fun dialogue brings extra life to this fun family scene.

I'm not one for prose, Dean, as my reading concentration levels are pathetic, but I can tell this was written by a very expressive, skilled and humorous pen.

Here's a sixer, my friend.

Cheers, Ray.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2014

Hey, thanks a million, Rayman. The fact that you're not all that fond of reading prose but still choose to read mine does my old heart good, my friend. And that makes the sixer you've so generously left with me even all the more special.

Thanks again, Rayman. What would I do without ya? :D

Comment from krys123

Excellent

Dean;
I'm glad I took the time to read it this was marvelous and it acted out more like a script than it did a prose/story. In fact with all this stage information and the script was just as fantastic as a few other scripts I have read recently.
Your writings and three was quite horridly descriptive and very frighteningly expressive throughout. Because anyone who wets their pants is a scary moment.
I like the one of Then asking the questions I could see that vividly.
Thank you for sharing and posting this for everyone to read and may the Lord be with you always Dean.
Alex
PS: Maybe you should write some scripts I love reading scripts.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2014

Thanks so much, Alex, I appreciate your kind comments, my friend.

I've never attempted to write a script, and I'm not really sure of how to go about it. Perhaps I will, one day.

Thanks again! :}

reply by krys123 on 19-Sep-2014

You are so sincerely welcome Dean. And you should consider writing a script.
Alex

Comment from Linda Engel

Excellent

What a great uncle you are scaring the piss out of children. Clowns are so terrifying and cruel and your motley looking bunch is spot on horrifying . Great story and I love how polite you are to raise your hand. Surprised your wife didn't whack you up side the head. Oh the family that scars together, stays together.
You must be a blast at Halloween.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2014

Thanks so much for dropping in and sharing your thoughts with me on the story, Linda. All the kids had a great time, with the exception of Connie, I suspect. Our entire family has a blast every Halloween, and this year, we're cooking up a haunted barn. It should be a lot of thrills and chills, LOL! :}

Comment from livelylinda

Excellent

Dean: you are a very, very sick man! And, so is your entire family! LOLOLOLOL Of course, this is six star worthy but but I'm deleting one because it is midnight as I write this and I'm about to go to bet . . . what will be in my dreams??? Linda

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2014

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is an excellent story about the show you put on. I had fun reading it. my sister's mother in law puts on the best Halloween shows and puts up tents. last year it was a zombie wedding and my newphew was laying on the dinner table screaming as he was served up as part of the wedding reception. she always has the biggest turnouts

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Comment from Dom G Robles

Exceptional

Dean this is beautiful. I was amused reading it from beginning to end. You have a mastery of your craft. I was trying to reach the climax and I found it at the end. Thanks for sharing. To me it is a perfect 6, my friend.

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2014

Thanks so much, Dom. You are too kind, my friend. I am so pleased that you enjoyed this story, and I am extremely grateful to your for your wonderful review.

All the best, my friend.:}

reply by Dom G Robles on 19-Sep-2014

You are very welcome. Dom