THIS is Overkill
Security gone wrong37 total reviews
Comment from kiwijenny
I absolutely agree....we need a revival and a return to good morals and Biblical decency.....our children are dumbed down in school...
Thank you for this poem....well done
God bless
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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I absolutely agree....we need a revival and a return to good morals and Biblical decency.....our children are dumbed down in school...
Thank you for this poem....well done
God bless
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Kiwijenny thank you for your review. Giovanni
Comment from onebrit
Nicely written, although I'm not sure why security would kill you. Most people are good, certainly values have changed but that happens with every generation, they define their own truth. Still lots of love left in the world.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Nicely written, although I'm not sure why security would kill you. Most people are good, certainly values have changed but that happens with every generation, they define their own truth. Still lots of love left in the world.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Bless your open-mindedness or should I say your open-heartedness? Innocence is bliss. Thank you for your review. Giovanni
Comment from Finglas
You are right, there has to be a better way. We cannot go on like this. No oil left to light the smallest candle of faith or lamps to guide .... This is a real gem. Well done b
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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You are right, there has to be a better way. We cannot go on like this. No oil left to light the smallest candle of faith or lamps to guide .... This is a real gem. Well done b
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Finglas thank you for your review. Giovanni
Comment from DSMalott
Well written.
Your free verse style brought the theme home for me. Great depth of thought and word choice. The emotion and passion was clear in all lines.
Good job.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Well written.
Your free verse style brought the theme home for me. Great depth of thought and word choice. The emotion and passion was clear in all lines.
Good job.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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DSMalott thank you for your review. Giovanni
Comment from adewpearl
excellent use of enjambment to create flow of thought from line to line and stanza to stanza
good imagery in conveying strong social commentary
Brooke
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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excellent use of enjambment to create flow of thought from line to line and stanza to stanza
good imagery in conveying strong social commentary
Brooke
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Thank you for your review. Giovanni
Comment from Glasstruth
It seems as if the world is going mad as you write, "Huston we have a problem"! Your words are tightly packed, flows smoothly with the message. Overkilli, it is. Is there anything we can do? Just go mad, I suppose. Well penned. Les
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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It seems as if the world is going mad as you write, "Huston we have a problem"! Your words are tightly packed, flows smoothly with the message. Overkilli, it is. Is there anything we can do? Just go mad, I suppose. Well penned. Les
Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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Les, thank you for your review. Giovanni
Comment from stroncoso1
You wrote a very thoughtful piece of prose. It is opinionated, political and to the point. I loved it! You definitely have a way with words. I would suggest "Houston" (spelling) in the line of "Huston we have a problem," But "THIS is overkill" is quite good and well written. Actually several lines are powerful, as in the last verse "No lamps to guide the way to the wedding feast banquet table or to one's self identity." Way to go!
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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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You wrote a very thoughtful piece of prose. It is opinionated, political and to the point. I loved it! You definitely have a way with words. I would suggest "Houston" (spelling) in the line of "Huston we have a problem," But "THIS is overkill" is quite good and well written. Actually several lines are powerful, as in the last verse "No lamps to guide the way to the wedding feast banquet table or to one's self identity." Way to go!
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Comment Written 13-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2014
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You are so good, thank you. I didn't see Huston! Thank you for your review. Giovanni
