Vision and Sound: Their Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Born Enemies: Part Three"Two souls that meet as strangers on earth.
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Comment from emrpoems
The Roman Republic had waged war against her people and (were) her enemy--should be (was)
What you ask is beyond every (principal) I hold dear.-- should be principle
"No. What you ask (for you can never have without my say so)I suggest ---No. What you ask can never happen with my consent."
Then Tibertin, I have no doubt that (what you seek would be yours.")you will have your wish
The chapter held my attention throughout and stopped at a point that will make return to read the next.
Good use of dialogue
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The Roman Republic had waged war against her people and (were) her enemy--should be (was)
What you ask is beyond every (principal) I hold dear.-- should be principle
"No. What you ask (for you can never have without my say so)I suggest ---No. What you ask can never happen with my consent."
Then Tibertin, I have no doubt that (what you seek would be yours.")you will have your wish
The chapter held my attention throughout and stopped at a point that will make return to read the next.
Good use of dialogue
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2014
